{the stormbringer}
{800/800} && {3/3} Notes: 1. I struggled a lot with this post, whether because it's been a while since I read through and posted on this spar or because of something else, I'm not sure. My apologies if this makes it any harder on you as a teacher! 2. I understand the 1/2 and 5/6 damage severity, but 3 and 4 I get really lost. So I had some bruising, a mild scrape, and some missing feathers (which I count as very minimal, considering birds often preen their own feathers and can still fly when they are attacked?) I may need some more help on the middle portion damages. Kaj also took a LOT of damage these past two turns, with his Critical Miss and a 3 damage, which I feel made it so much harder to write because I felt like I was writing pain after pain after pain and then I was losing word space like crazy because I wanted it to be realistic? 3. I couldn't, for the life of me, find anything from past spars to bring into this post. And since I specifically wrote Kaj disregarding Maskan's advice since it ended up not working out, I didn't know how else to bring in the past? So I instead used the recent past, of Ulrik constantly targeting his wings. Is that appropriate? 4. Brought in more of the environment through sand, moonlight and darkness, and had it impact Kaj by aiding Ulrik since his dark coloring made it harder for Kaj to pinpoint him. Thoughts? 5. Completely off topic of the previous numbers, but I really personally liked Kaj's half-flared wings blocking his peripherals. I did a little giddy dance, because I thought it was creative. So I hope that was okay. @[Ulrik] |
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