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ROUND ONE: Belial v. Mirage >> BELIAL

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#1
The first round will be between Belial and Mirage. You will be fighting using strictly magic, and your goal is not necessarily to injure your opponent. You will be assessed based on realism of writing and creativity. Make your judge believe in your magic!

There will be Two Rounds plus a Closing defense. Official challenge rules for time limits and word counts apply.

You are fighting in the: Thistle Meadow during a thunderstorm

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#2
Demonchild walks onto the battlefield, and he is the first, the greatest, the lord of all he commands and all he sees. The heavens are merely a mirror into his soul, a reflection in his eyes, a tumultuous painting depicting the strains of his heart. He stands alone, and the wind tries to be his friend; it breaks across his face and clings to his hair, painful in its needy grasp and passionate embrace. Soon, though, it falls away and carries its whispers with it. The demon does not give it a second glance. He does not have the attention to spend on such trivial things as a mere zephyr, when around him there rages a storm. As though in retaliation for his insolence, thistles slap him across the shoulder, wet splatters that leave more mark than their raindrop compatriots. Ripped from their stalks by a breeze like an angry child who, growing tired with his toys, casts them aside - but the mahogany youth pays them no mind. Like the wind, they can leave no lasting impression. They are dust motes in a tornado, infantile minds clashing against the great collective of the universe. They mean nothing to him! He is their lord, their master, their god.

Vibrant streaks of lightning paint the sky, casting high contrast shadows instead of illumination. It breaks upon him in sudden bursts, electric slashes in murky clouds that hurt his eyes; but he refuses to squint. His challenger approaches, the dark angel sent to end his demonic rein, the cruel black form a murky haze in the horizon of his mind. Above her, a streak of fire, a golden companion that speaks of ancient legends and heartless beasts. He feels an intense loathing for the pair, an emotion deeper than he usually achieves. To him, she is not just an equine, not just a foe; she is the devil overthrown, a vengeful seraph come to wrest control of all he commands. She is tall, she is experienced, she is old. She knows the ways of a world that has barely welcomed him into its arms, and she knows that he is but a babe, a newly christened yearling sent far from his mother's embrace. "Should I be afraid?" he wonders, and it is the voice of his mother that answers, soft and serpentine in his mind.

Against her height you pitch your weight; against her experience, your fervor. Against her knowledge you thrust your horns; let her underestimate you, and strike her back while she enjoys her confidence. Deception is your tool, my son.

Deception. Lies. He is a king of demons, a prince of deceit. Ice freezes in his eyes, rain stings at his face, and he relishes the pain, laughing in the face of his usurper. The sound is hollow and mirthless, an expression of some emotion that he does not know, a rising result of a need to react. Poor fallen angel, you have come to the end of your road. The demonchild will not relinquish his crown.

He closes his body, but he does not close his eyes. They remain two-toned beacons on a map of snow, blue and silver and cold as the thunderous sky, broken and staring with neither purpose nor focus. Pale mane whips about his neck, and he does not react. He has retreated away from her, away from this scene. In his mind, he builds a maze, a labyrinthine world of hedges and stone, of cruel thorns that tangle among themselves and threaten to tear against the delicate flesh of equine, yearn to taste blood. In his mind, it grows detailed; he is careful to taste each leaf, to examine the strength of each stalk. Aromas kiss his nostrils, and foliage cries under the assault of the furious storm. The stench of rotting undergrowth makes him pinch his nostrils in disgust.

He blinks, and the labyrinth is there, and she is caught. It springs around her, springs around them; it is realistic and deep. It twists with corridors that mimic his convoluted mind, winding trails and twisted missteps; but it is wide, each aisle the breadth of an equine from side to side, large enough that she might avoid the 'thorns'. It only takes a minute for him to draw the plans out in his mind, a second to cast them upon the ground, but he fears it is too late, an ugly scowl of concern stretching across his face. Still, it is done; he can do no more. He stands within the cage of his own making, and he dares her to try and escape. Far above, lightning streaks and casts foreign shadows across the meadow.

His labyrinth casts no shadows, for it is only a shade of his mind.

[ ooc || 798 words. Belial created an illusion labyrinth around Mirage and himself, roughly 60 by 60 feet, which looks, smells, and sounds like real leaves, but casts no shadow. It is full of large thorns to discourage touching the walls ]
Belial

Mirage the DragonHeart Posts: 414
Deceased atk: 5.5 | def: 9 | dam: 6
Mare :: Equine :: 15.3 :: Eighteen HP: 68.5 | Buff: ENDURE
Akaith :: Royal Golden Dragon :: Fire Breath Whit
#3
A smudge of darkness stands beneath the storm above them, around them. A barely audible sound echoed from the maw of the golden lizard dancing upon the violent winds above her. She was careful in her flight, though she looked haphazard and unsteady, she was controlled, sure not to let the zephyrs take her too high lest they steal all of the control away from her strong, leathery wings. Thunder rumbled, a sound akin to the vibrations of a large dragon's growl.

But the only dragon upon the scene, for the moment, was Akaith. Below her, her bonded stood squarely upon sturdy, yet limber, legs. Golden eyes observed the unknown little horned creature before her, under different circumstances she might have been cruelly amused at his plight, watching as the grasses of the Thistle Meadow nearly swallow him whole, while she stands with her elegant tiara held above the obscuring grasses, waiting for his first move. The pale outline of his mane give her something to track, to keep a hold upon in this dull, overcast setting. Akaith, her eyes above the ground, used a similar technique, feeding the information she gleamed directly to her beloved's beautiful mind.

Suddenly, her view of him is obscured. No Meadow takes residence in her surrounds, but a maze, a deep and wondrous creation no doubt as twisted and convoluted as the mind which orchestrated it. A flinch sends vibrations, nerves firing all at once, up her spine - but her hooves did not moved, only the muscles holding her frame upright shuddered in its containment of the need to flee. It startled her, but it did not scare her, for Akaith was still in the skies above, and able to aid her in noticing the failings of this masterpiece.

Dank, rotten stenches curled her nostrils, but as the seconds dripped by and allowed her to absorb her surrounds, the flaws of his design became more and more apparent. A smile curved her lips, there were no shadows here; none except for herself, of course.

But the magic of illusion that the mare possessed was not to be activated here, now - no, the mare did not wish to fight Light with Light. She was going to go with a far more direct method.

Akaith warbled above her, the call barely discernible amidst a peal of thunder that decided to simultaneously make itself known amongst the skies above. The storm, and the colt's own illusion, would hide the mare as she prepared herself for the next steps. Tiara bowed deep as she called upon the Darkness within her, legs folding as pain consumed her. It was the price of the magic, the crippling agony that was comparable to one being devoured by ravenous, voracious flames.

Seconds more passed, then a deep grumbling rolled over the lands. The main difference between this thunder and the storm's around them - this thunder travelled through the ground. Wings were spread, golden, glittering even in the dull, overcast light. They passed through the illusion set by the colt, the strange, warming sensation going through them as the stretch was performed. A broad, toothy grin was given, and a dragon's laughter was heard from the middle of this maze.

The golden queen rose then, wingbeats thrashing against the storm. It was difficult for her to gain altitude, harder still to maintain it. A frown created sharp angles along her scaled face, the effort annoyed her. Not nearly high enough off the ground, but with enough strength to propel herself forward, towards the unicorn, Mirage's muscular bulk dove through his illusion, the ground rushing up swiftly beneath her, her clawed legs made trenches as she grappled for traction. But this was her intention, to stir up the earth, to scare the colt into peeing himself silly, and bow down to her without ever needing to lay a claw upon him.

Wings flared as the halt was made before him, but though her bulk stilled its motion, the debris and dirt around her that her actions had stirred up were undoubtedly being carried by the stormy winds, battering both his and her frames. It mattered little to the dragon; her hide was covered in golden armour now. Massive, elongated tail swept over the earth, and the dragon crouched low, appearing to be a cat, preparing to pounce upon its delectable prey.

[ 730 words.
Mirage is surprised by his illusion, but with Akaith’s help, sees through its flaws and transforms herself into a dragon. Flying partly through and over the illusion, she lands quite roughly in front of him and prepares herself to pounce on him. ]




Belial Posts: 33
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#4
He feels a looming sense of curious dismay, an uncomfortable and undesired thrill of doubt as his illusion rippled and bent. No, he hisses in the heavy weight of his mind, swift disbelief clouding against the judgement of what clearly resonates against his eyes. She must have touched, but to touch she must have known - but how, the demonchild could not say. King of illusions, prince of lies, how have you failed on this night? Furies rise in his chest as he backs away, snorting, beastly crown rocking to and fro in anxious motions, long narrow horns clashing against raging winds and blue lightning. The labyrinth shuddered under its master's distress, bent away harmlessly as the black angel pressed against it. Beneath the thunder and behind the pouring rain, he is his own whirlwind of fury and distress, a wild mind that wants nothing more than to claw through the body that confines it and to devour the souls who dare oppose him.

And she? She, the fallen angel who dared disrupt his dark desires, the blackened beacon of purity who had thwarted his carefully composed deceit? She was scarcely visible through the pouring rain, the failing illusion, the dying light, and yet a blinding flash of lightning gave the demon more of a view that he had ever desired. She was airborne, a Valkyrie of heaven sent to bring him down, a flame in the sky that would, he was certain, show him no mercy.

She was a dragon, and she had come to bring the rapture upon his kingdom, to smite him where he stood and cast his rule aside. She was a dragon, and she was enormous, and in the presence of such a monster he should have been shaken. Demonchild, foolish king, can you not see that you are a mere boy in the playing field of giants? No, you cannot; for you are a son of serpents and a mask of lies. You, little demon, you do not know fear, and soon you will suffer for your ignorance.

The weight of her wings tears through the air; it rumbles not unlike the thunder, and yet so unlike the thunder. The lightning is his ally, glancing off of her with brash contrast and illumination, causing golden scales to glow while hiding his own dark form, giving him cover as he splits, contorts, and becomes three. In the instant she claws the ground, six hooves leap away, six small figures retreating from her imposing form, six pairs of heterochromatic eyes gazing at her with dark defiance, with a cold question of guess who?. They make no sound, but it matters not, for the raging elements and pouring water would mask any noise the demon legion tried to intimidate with. All are wet, real or illusionary droplets of water coursing down their sides, identical reactions the the falling sky. They snake around her, one left and two right; they dance, daring her to guess the one who is real, keeping their long and deadly horns directed at her form in case she guesses well. The demonchild conducts his army like a general; each movement is precise, each glance exact, carefully avoiding tail and claws alike as all question, silently, what will you do now, fallen seraph? Will she dive for the duo who harry her right? Will she know that the lone colt is truly the one she seeks? A single thistle blows against his chest as he waits, the soggy purple flower quickly disintegrating in the wind like some poor abused plaything.

[596 words]
Belial

Mirage the DragonHeart Posts: 414
Deceased atk: 5.5 | def: 9 | dam: 6
Mare :: Equine :: 15.3 :: Eighteen HP: 68.5 | Buff: ENDURE
Akaith :: Royal Golden Dragon :: Fire Breath Whit
#5
Sharp, slitted eyes watch the little cretin, the emotions that draw across his face - with a snap of her head she observes him double, no triple himself, and run in all directions. A snarl curls her lip, glistening white teeth flash in the next strike of lightning that vibrates through the ground. The dragon is lit up, golden, intimidating. She stands tall, arching her magnificent, long serpentine-like nape, turning her majestic crown about to view the dance of which one, which one this little devil crafted. The dragon watches, long enough to grow frustrated, long enough to grow bored of merely watching. The dragon loses patience soon, the trio of dancers may waltz steps of war, but they do not touch - Mirage knows that for them to touch they would be exposed for the mere twists of light that they were.

She had decided before to use Darkness against the Light powers of this colt - now, she changed her mind. The dragon bent her head low, chin touching her breast, eyes clicking shut behind scaled lids - she was confident he would touch her, confident that he lived in the fear of being exposed, confident that her eyes could open swiftly at any second should she suspect he might reveal himself. As her head bowed low, it almost, almost, appeared as if she were bowing her defeat to the young buck - but this dragon was far from defeated.

Shadows, darkness, clouds of black, swirling smog crept over her, swallowing her up, consuming her, writhing into each indent of golden scale, masking her golden form from view. It was as if the black sky above them was falling down around her, even when lightning struck no light was reflected from the mass of shadows that consumed the draconic beast. The Darkness released its hold upon the dragon-mare, leaving behind a small, smudge of darkness standing amidst a stormy afternoon, watching a trio of colts dance their way about her.

Vacant, empty expressions lingered for a few moments longer, breaths passing between her nostrils - sweat congealed with the rain upon her sides, the agony of the shift causing her legs to shudder as it sent sharp spikes of nervous pain shooting along her spine. The mare took the time to recover, to watch, to try and see. Now, she was a dark mark upon the gloomy landscape as much as the colt - no, colts - were, only she was a mistress of darkness and shadow, a queen like no other.

Pain subsided, and it was as if the storm clouds within her own cranium had cleared to reveal a serene, calm picture. Though no solution as to the identification of the colts became apparent, the mare had a plan; a counterattack, as it were. A glimmer, a hint, a shadow of a smile dared to curve the edges of her velvet lips - but it lasted less than a breath's length in time, for then, with no effort at all, an illusion of her own creation cascaded over the dark, inky form. It shimmered and warped her, blurred the edges, and otherwise made invisible that which one might try to focus upon.

But focus upon her was what she wanted. So intently had all three been staring at her, so perfectly had they been crafted - Mirage wondered, would the effects of staring at her be trebled with the focus coming from triple directions? Rain battered upon her, if one could bear the ache their eyes would give them and stare at it long enough, they might see the vague outline of droplets splashing off her damp hide. Lightning flared up, revealing only shadows and confused water droplets where there stood a mirage of a beautiful mare.

Laughter pulled forth from her throat, and with a delicate step, the little illusion began to move, moving much like the seraph the colt thought her to be. With her steps, there was a purpose written in the dirt, a dance to provoke the little colt from looking, staring harder, trying to discern where she might land. Sometimes she moved closer to where the two colts danced together, other times nearer to the singular one, but all the time, moving, dancing, living. Rain pounds a beat into the earth, and it drums against her back that is hidden by the cloak of magic she wears upon her own skin - would he match her tune or choose to sing it differently?

[753 words.]


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The angel is gone, the phantasm of heaven sent down to lay waste to his domain vanished back into the abyss of eternity from whence she sprang. In her absence he is left empty, void, purposeless; he is suspicious of his apparent victory. He sees his castle as one of sand, quickly demolished by the raging elements, the scornful wind and tearing rain laughing in his face as he reels from the abruptness of her departure. She has pulled some cloak of invisibility over herself, she thinks; she is not gone, and if he only looks, he will find her again. But everything is blurred in the rain, all firm edges erased into meaningless shadows; even the demon is flawed, distorted, a melting palate of dark shades and silver streaks under the weight of the falling sky.

"My angel, why have you forsaken me?" he cries, and the call rings out from a trio of throats, a chorus of concerned youth, an offensive sound to the demon's ears, swept away on the wind and devoured by howling rain. Three figures circle, circle where moments before their foe stood, and in the cacophonous silence that follows, lightning paints an abrupt picture of disorganized raindrops falling in erratic patterns, miniscule splashes that cascade off something which simply is not there, followed suddenly by her laugh. A haunting noise muted by rain and yet still so sweet, so confident, so rich and similar to the haunting melody of his mother the seraph, the hymn sung by that treacherous purveyor of injured truths and misformed lessons. He longs to find its source, to look once more upon the creature that is so unlike the dam he remembers, this opposing angel of fire and night. He wants to see her, to speak to her and hear her reply, to slice open her throat and examine the vocal folds that impersonate his begetter so perfectly and understand why they work.

Three figures continue to pace, tight and wiry muscles of youth moving in tandem, a duo and a lone child circling anxiously about the vanished dragon. Heterochromatic eyes gaze intently at the space between them, watching the shift of darkness that swirls in their midst, snorting gently in the rain and shielding their ears to its assault. For a minute they play, cat and mouse and wolf and prey, the demon and his imaginary army dancing with the shadow. He follows her disguised movements with oversized hooves and gangly legs, plastered feathers creating no shadows in the light streaked sky as he dances, the illusions following suit. It is a challenge, an intellectual stimulation and a test of his endurance to watch her. Within moments the pain begins within his frontal lobe; by the minute mark, his head has begun to throb.

The demonchild relishes the pain. He exalts in the challenge and clings to this chance to match his foe. One by one the illusions flicker and vanish, forgotten; now, in these final moments, he is dancing with the shadow of an angel, and they make a fantastic pair, a duo of dark, the pure and the putrid. The demon stretches his cranium to the sky; in his mind he is full grown, a behemoth of hell, her equal in this battle and something to fear. He wears his crown of thorns with pride and distinction, black spires cutting into the electric sky. Of course, he is merely a child, an outmatched demon in a fight far above his level of capability or control; in the flickering light he is dwarfed even by her shadow, a yearling pitted against a lioness, a sparrow locked in combat with a dragon. He gazes at her mirage with intelligent eyes, his fleet steps matching the contours of her cloaked body, and finally, he blinks. He can gaze no more.

They have been fighting for minutes that stretched into eons. Their conflict is universal and unsolved, and yet now, he knows, it has ended. After the hair's breadth of a century they have concluded their duel, and abruptly he steps back. In the flashing dark, in the pouring rain, he stands, a king of his domain facing his avenging angel, and he feels nothing. The demon loathes and loves her, for he has shared something with her, an experience, a fight; and yet the only thing that matters is whether or not he found victory. Does the field still fall under the banner of hell, or have the legions of heaven won on this day? He asks it silently to the drowning downpour, and the whisper of Zuriel floats on the wind – no answer, simply the refrain that shaped his childhood, that guided his steps and carried him here. Do not disappoint me, Belial.

"I will not, Mother.”

[ ooc || 800 words. ]
Belial

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BELIAL v Mirage
By my verdict BELIAL is the winner.
BELIAL - POST 1
[+ 3] Prose:
One of the most beautifully written posts that I have read in a very long time. The descriptors had my mind inventing pictures that were detailed, sharp and stunning.
+ 1: emotion
+ 1: flow
+ 1: grammar
[+ 2] Ease of Read:
I am sure that it was not easy to describe Belial's magic, but I was not once confused as to what he was doing.
[+ 4] Realism:
+ 1: Creating the labyrinth to entrap them both
+ 1: Adding thorns to the labyrinth to give it realism
+ 1: Mentioning that the labyrinth casts no shadows
+ 1: Used Mirage in the post without godmoding

MIRAGE - POST 1
[+ 2] Prose:
Very well written and lovely, but I did not get a clear picture of the scene and the emotions of the thunderstorm.
0: emotion
+ 1: flow
+ 1: grammar
[+ 1] Ease of Read:
I had to go back and read a few times to understand Mirage's positioning and her actions.
[+ 5] Realism:
+ 1: Noticed the lack of shadow from Belial's maze
+ 1: Taking note of the smells of the maze
+ 1: Mentioning of Akaith and their mental bond to help her
+ 1: Turning into her dragon form instead of using her other magic
+ 1: Swooping through his maze to scare Belial as a dragon

BELIAL - POST 2
[+ 3] Prose:
I loved how you made Belial react to having his maze crumble. The reaction to Mirage during into a dragon and coming down to get him was very real, and I liked how you added emphasis on his illusionary copies of himself.
+ 1: emotion
+ 1: flow
+ 1: grammar
[+ 2] Ease of Read:
Everything was very clear. I always knew where Belial was and what was going on.
[+ 4] Realism:
+ 1: Dismay at seeing his illusion crumble
+ 1: Splitting into three versions of himself
+ 1: Taunting her with which one is him
+ 1: Taking care to pay attention to the rain and the details


MIRAGE - POST 2
[+ 3] Prose:
Very beautiful. I loved the emotion and the descriptors. This was a very well done post.
+ 1: emotion
+ 1: flow
+ 1: grammar
[+ 2] Ease of Read:
Very easy to read. Everything was very linear but still artistic.
[+ 4] Realism:
+ 1: Her irritation at watching Belial's illusions was both realistic and very well done
+ 1: Turning her dragon form into a mirage
+ 1: Very well done descriptors of how the storm and shadow changed her into a blur
+ 1: Laughing and taunting at Belial as a blur
0: I was confused by Mirage lowering her dragon's neck and closing her eyes. I did not see why that was used as it didn't not appear later on in your post.

BELIAL - CLOSING DEFENSE
[+ 2] Realism:
+ 1: Uses the rain and the blurry atmosphere as a reason to not see Mirage's blurred form was very realistic and pleasant to read
+ 1: Getting a headache from Mirage's... mirage.

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BONUS
[+ 3]BELIAL:
+ 1: "In the instant she claws the ground, six hooves leap away, six small figures retreating from her imposing form, six pairs of heterochromatic eyes gazing at her with dark defiance, with a cold question of guess who?"
+ 1: Continuous and lovely mentioning of the weather
+ 1: Very clear and good descriptions of the differences between Mirage and her older age and Belial's young figure and experience

[+ 2] MIRAGE:
+ 1: Clear descriptions of the difference between herself and Belial, especially in dragon form
+ 1: Continuous and lovely mentioning of the weather


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TOTALS
BELIAL: 33
MIRAGE: 29


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