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[JUDGED] Stupid Never Wins [Ricochet]

Kahlua the Sunshower Posts: 662
Outcast atk: 5.5 | def: 9.5 | dam: 4.5
Mare :: Equine :: 15.3hh :: 9 [Orangemoon] HP: 65 | Buff: NOVICE
Khan :: Common Blue Dragon :: Frost Breath Sevin
#1
[Setting: Heavenly Field, one lamptree near the south edge lighting the area but otherwise flat and free of obstacles; dead and dying grass, cold air and occasional wind but no storm as they are above the cloud level.
Rules: 3 posts each with closing defense, judged]


"I warned you,mare. NOW LET'S SEE JUST HOW BEAUTIFUL YOU ARE WITH SCARS OF YOUR OWN! The stallion's screaming filled the slightly thin air of the Heavenly Field. Her ears went back and she took two fumbling steps to the right as he shoved his shoulder against hers. A collie dog, which she hadn't noticed at all until just now, bit roughly at her right front heel. A sharp sting from the fleeting bite rushed up her leg and she withdrew the hoof quickly. She didn't notice any blood, for now. It all happened so fast she hardly had time to process it. She couldn't believe it. She, of all horses, was being attacked. Her instinct was to run- she was not a fighter. The thought of scars to mar her pretty hide practically made her shudder. Beauty was all she had going for her; there was nothing to be admired about her brains. However, a look to her left and right told her all she needed to know. Where would she run? The field was small. The only path down was small and wrought with danger. She could still hear the storm raging below. To attempt the path with an angry pursuer would be suicide. Even she knew that. That left one option then- to fight.

This was her first fight. Still, the story of life-loving, flirtatious mare cannot always be filled with happy chapters. Knowing what must be done, Kahlua quickly assessed her position relative to the stallion. He was located one pace before her and two paces to her left- a result of her stumbling when he shoved against her. Letting her ears raise off her head, Kahlua took a deep breath. She was scared. Wide eyes showing their whites and pinned ears told a story that words would hardly suffice to tell. “Then we fight, Ricochet.” She laughed, it was a nervous sound. The tones of joy and humor that normally filled her voice and laugh were erased, replaced with obvious fear. Her words came only two to three seconds after his screams but it had seemed like an eternity. She took one step backwards, increasing the distance between them to two paces. Angling her head to the left 45 degrees, she looked at him once more and took a deep breath. She must defend herself, could she find the courage?

She considered shoving her shoulder into his as he had just done to her but a look at her opponent's frame told her that this was likely not a good idea. They were nearly even in height, but his stout build would likely not be affected by a push from a lighter frame such as her own (especially when she was even thinner than normal due to a lack of food). Breaking into a canter, Kahlua had to trust that her body knew what it was doing. If asked, she would not have known what drove her actions. Fear was blinding sometimes, although perhaps a good motivator as well. The path she took was angled the her left, towards the stallion. If he did not move, two strides would put her mouth within distance of the rear end of his rib cage. Lashing out with her mouth, she attempted to tear at the skin on his side. It would likely not do much damage, but it would at least serve as a warning that she was serious about this spar.

As she bit at the stallion, she curved her path to the right 90 degrees. After taking a stride at this new angle, she kicked out with her hind hooves. It was a low kick, intended to hit on the lower portion of his torso near the place where his ribs met his sterum. Two more strides placed her at a distance she deemed safe and she halted abruptly, turning on her forehand to face where he should have been located. As she did this, she lifted her ears up and searched for any hints of the border collie. She knew he couldn't have gone far, but where he was now she could not say. The darkness would make his black coat difficult, if not impossible, to see until he was upon her. Looking to the stallion with her eyes, the painted mare took a deep breath. She had attacked him. She could hardly believe it. This was going to be a long adventure for her.


[Post: 1/3, 741 words; summary: Kahlua runs in arch, coming in to bite the stallion's side then kicks at the sternum/rib junction as she finishes her arching path]
.KAHLUA


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for any reason to any degree, with the exception of killing her.

Please do not tag Kahlua unless it is in an opening post

Ricochet the Incendiary Posts: 133
Deceased
Stallion :: Equine :: 15.2 hands :: 5 years Buff: BULK
Blu
#2


R I C O C H E T - - raise your GUN and it's over

The Incendiary had been expecting the dainty mare to flee at the sound of his raging screams, but instead he was met with rebellion. He didn't know whether he was disappointed or excited. His blood began to boil as the brute worked himself into a frenzy, his battle-marred hide aching for the touch of a determined warrior to flesh out new scars. The fact that the challenge in his voice had not gone unheard told him that Kahlua was daring, albeit lacking any intelligence (Who would dare strike out at him?), but the warlord was momentarily displeased that his threats had not sent the lithe dancer running. He would have much rather liked to have watched her ass as it sped away from him than feel her blunt teeth run across his ribs, but all was forgotten when the leaner, more agile vixen charged at him.

What does she think she’s doing? He wondered during the moments that it took for him to brace his stocky architecture, and for her to snap at his flank. Ricochet almost shook his head disdainfully when her whites met his bony hide. There was barely any meat there for her to sink her teeth into – he, too had found it hard to locate food in this dark winter – and her cutting utensils grazed harmlessly along his side, receiving a mouthful of his hair as a parting gift. Turning his head slightly – and into a passing gale – to watch what she was doing, teal eyes narrowed at her tensing hindquarters, his mind for battle anticipating that she was preparing herself for a kick. Stocky forelegs took on the whole of his bodyweight as the dethroned king swung his hindquarters to his right, swiftly performing a front-heavy spin to avoid the painted lady’s hooves. Unfortunately for the Incendiary, the time that he had taken to watch what she was doing had slowed his dodge considerably, and he did not escape her airborne hooves completely. His buttermilk hide twitched with the impact of hooves on flesh, and although her striking hooves did not find much purchase on his evading form, she was quick to administer a numbing ache and developing bruise.

“Who would’ve thought you had it in you?” His tone is mocking and he lets loose a dark laugh, but the tyrant has no time to make conversation. Those few words have given his opponent enough time to face up towards him again. Teal eyes rake over the mare’s splashed pelt before he makes any hasty decisions. The equine is searching for weak spots that he could exploit, and he is surprised to see that the pair of them actually have many similarities. Their matching height and hollow bellies put them each on an equal playing field, but whereas her build was constructed more for speed, his was built for power. She lacked the muscle that his father had worked – and bred – into him, and although they were composed of similar breeds, he was no mixed-breed mutt.

Hooves bombarded the frozen earth as the fearless beast charged across it, sending bits of dead or dying grass flying as the daunting steed charged towards the frail vixen. Gold ears flick backwards at the memory of the collie ripping at the flesh on her right fore, and Ricochet shifts his lead to his front left leg to provide his left shoulder with more power upon impact. His head is lowered and his legs come up high; he knows that his forward motion could present an opportunity for his opponent to strike, and he wants to increase the odds that any flying hooves or gnashing teeth will land on someplace safe. This isn’t his first outing in the wild, after all.

Sparse moments have passed since the dun lurched forwards in a charge, and it takes only a few swift steps for him to position himself on a path to Kahlua’s left shoulder. If the mare was as ‘slow’ as he had made her out to be, then she would hopefully had no time to react his sudden gallop, and he attempts to drive his left shoulder into her own left shoulder as he had before, in the hopes of forcing her weight in her right fore and weakening it even further. Swinging his head to the left with the momentum, Ricochet tries to bash it against her frail ribs and lets his soft fur slide against her own, bringing his head up to her bony withers where he can attempt to grab hold of her mane. If his hold on her is successful and she is forced to stay close to him, then the Incendiary will try to stomp on her left heel with his own left hoof, his shoulder and neck pushing into her all the while.

{800 words| Attack 1/3 | Companion 0/2 | Magic -/- | Defense 0/1| Battle Buffs: Swift and bulk
Summary: Ricochet takes Kahlua’s bite to his flank, tearing out some hair in doing so, and he shifts his weight onto his forelegs so he can swing his hindquarters to the right and away from her kicking feet. She still manages to smack a hoof against his flank, but his dodge away from her lessened the impact considerably. After studying her for a moment, he leaps forwards in a charge, swapping leads halfway through, and tries to barrel into her left shoulder like he did in Dullness, Danger, Delivery, to try and injure her right foreleg/knock her down. He attempts to smack his head against her ribs to cause her some pain, and uses the soft fur of her hide to slide his head up to her wither. He tries to grab hold of her mane there to keep her close to him, and stomps down on her left heel (Coronet band, if you want specifics for your post).}

"Whistle"



HP: 49.5
We want you for the Equine Empire.

Kahlua the Sunshower Posts: 662
Outcast atk: 5.5 | def: 9.5 | dam: 4.5
Mare :: Equine :: 15.3hh :: 9 [Orangemoon] HP: 65 | Buff: NOVICE
Khan :: Common Blue Dragon :: Frost Breath Sevin
#3
What she thought she was doing was a question for the ages. Even the painted mare could not say. She was disappointed that she had not managed to grab the stallion's skin; still, first tries were rarely perfect. Her kick was much better placed and she smiled when her hooves met skin. Although it was not exactly as intended, she was happy to have made a mark at all. She was not surprised the stallion had anticipated her movements. He was clearly the veteran here. The many scars on his hide shared a history wrought with violence. As she swung around, she flared her nostrils in irritation at his words. In this moment, she hated nothing as much the stallion. To take her beauty via this fight was a crime against humanity in her mind. As he laughed she did too, her voice thick with fright. The momentary happiness over her kick was not maintained beyond that instant. His laughter gave her a moment longer to search for the dog, to no avail. The blackness was too thick and the breeze was of no use either. The dog's scent was in the air but the swirling winds made it impossible to pinpoint his location.

Before long, the stallion burst into action and swiftly closed the distance between the two of them. Her erect ears filled with the thundering of his hooves. Despite his bulky frame, he moved quickly. She imaged it was due to his years of practice. As his head came even with hers, she took the opportunity to lash out with her teeth. She was aiming for his ear, to tear a chunk off as he flew by. Still, his speed and her inexperience meant that her accuracy was inherently low. She closed her teeth but could not tell if she was successful. Although her attack was well intentioned, she would have been smarter to prepare. The full force of his weight was driven into her left shoulder and her weight was shifted suddenly to her right. She squealed in pain and anger as she stumbled right a step. Although the hit on her shoulder was dispersed enough that there would be only minor bruising, the repeated damage to her fetlock was problematic. A dull throbbing commenced and the combined injuries initiated some swelling. The process was slow but she would have to guard the hoof carefully throughout the spar.

While she stumbled, the stallion swung his head in an attempt to batter her side. Luckily, the increased distance between them caused his head to just graze her side. Unfortunately, she did not anticipate his next move. Attempting to relieve her right hoof of some weight, she shifted her weight back to the left. His teeth grabbed her mane roughly and his hoof descended to her heel. His sharp hoof tore away some of the skin at her coronet, a slow trickling of blood traveling down the back of her hoof. The pain was harsh and she grunted again in discomfort. Although the injury would have quickly clotted in any other location, the constant movement of the pastern joint would keep it open throughout the fight. She was lucky the hoof had limited blood supply, causing a slow bleed. She would have to be careful about the placement of her left hoof, though. Wherever she stepped, the ground was sure to be slippery.

With little thought or planning, the mare attacked. She hoped to use her lighter frame to do some quick maneuvering. In an attempt to do him some injury and relieve her right forelimb of some weight, the mare reared up. The stallion still held her mane so she could not rear very high, but she didn't need to. As she reared, she thrust her left front knee up forcefully. She hoped to use the momentum to slam the lower portion of his ribs again. If he had not moved, his left front hoof should still have been placed just behind her own rearing form. Using this knowledge, the mare then attempted to slam her left front hoof into the back of the stallion's left front fetlock. If hit as intended, significant pain and injury would occur as she would strike the bone and several important tendons that ran over it. Unfortunately, to accomplish these attacks the mare had to land with all of her weight on her right front hoof. The pain radiated up her limb and she flinched visibly. The speed of the swelling would increase slightly due to the repeated assaults. Quickly, she placed her left hoof on the ground and shifted her weight to it before taking a deep breath with flared nostrils. The thin air this high up the mountain was causing her to breath rather hard despite her limited efforts.

[Post: 2/3, 800 words; summary: Kahlua bites at Rico's ear as he passes. His slam pushes her weight to the right and her right limb is injured again. His head just grazes her side but he grabs hold of her mane and is able to scrape his hoof across her heel and cause bleeding. Kahlua half-rears because her mane is being held, trying to slam her knee into Rico's ribs and then tries to slam her hoof onto Rico's fetlock. She lands on her right hoof and injures it again, increasing the speed at which it swells]
.KAHLUA


Permission granted to use magic or physical force with Kahlua at any time
for any reason to any degree, with the exception of killing her.

Please do not tag Kahlua unless it is in an opening post

Ricochet the Incendiary Posts: 133
Deceased
Stallion :: Equine :: 15.2 hands :: 5 years Buff: BULK
Blu
#4


R I C O C H E T - - raise your GUN and it's over

Ricochet’s momentum had carried him too far past the mare’s gaping jaws for her to close them around his ear, but she was determined, and she did manage to tear at the tender flesh behind it. His crest, now bereft of hair and revealing the bloodied skin underneath, was on fire. His defensive maneuver to keep his neck arched had made the skin there taut, however, and the dunskin would be happy to find that he wasn’t missing as big a portion of him as he should be. Now, at least, whenever he curved his neck it would not stretch the wound any further.

Successful in his strategy to keep the fighting close at hand, Ricochet grasped at the dark tendrils of mane and struggled to keep his rearing prisoner nearby, his head pounding after his using it as a club. The force of her withers driving into his muzzle as she reared brought pain to the stallion’s clamped jaws, and he grunted in discomfort. It had jarred his blunt tools and slammed them deeper into his gums, causing his teeth and the upper portion of his jaw to let out a rush of blood. His teeth, coupled with the constant ache at his crest, fueled the fires that burned bright inside of the warrior. He was no longer enraged by the insolent femme who had been horrified at the sight of his scars; he was furious. The impact of her knee against the bruised portion of his barrel did not aid in quelling those flames, either.

Momentarily winded by the assault, the seasoned warlord stumbled away from his adversary, unknowingly redirecting her descending pillar so that it scraped against the coronet band and wall of his left hoof instead. The force of her weight on his tender coronet drove the stallion further away from her in pain, and he released his hold on her thick mane to stumble a few steps to his right.

The area afflicted was split and although it wasn’t deep, a steady flow of blood seeped sluggishly from the wound. If it had not been for his faltering steps, the damage dealt to his precious foot would have been much worse, and Ricochet knows that he must not let it come to any more harm. Shifting his weight so that his front right leg carried the most of it, the stocky quarter horse rocks his bodyweight forwards, lifting his hindquarters into the air. The frozen ground beneath his hooves causes them to slide a bit, but the dunskin uses the slippery earth to his advantage, swinging his bodyweight slightly to the left to redirect his strike. His powerful hinds reach out towards the painted damsel in a quick buck and, if his hooves struck true, would deliver a staggering blow to her left shoulder.

When his hooves touch the ground again, the Incendiary lurches forwards, his tail slapping the air behind him, and pulls a tight turn to the right to face up to the fae again. Ricochet’s left fore shudders a bit as he hesitates, but the pain has become more bearable now. His tender barrel convulses from the trauma that had been dealt to it previously, and his breathing comes out in short bursts so as not to lace his belly with stabs pain.

The battle is far from over, however, and as hard as it is for him to admit, the stallion’s weary body is beginning to tire. Blood trickles down from his neck and his hoof, and when he parts his lips to bark out a command more of the crimson liquid departs from his body. His gundog had only made one appearance as of yet, and it was time for the supporting members of the cast to play their parts. The Incendiary needs only to speak one word, and then the curtain can go up. “Attack.”

Together they charge, each as determined as the other to enter the – nonexistent – spotlight in the darkness that surrounds them. The boy lunges to his target’s right side (regardless of where she has moved to, if at all), his lead set on his right fore to keep his aching left off the ground as much as possible. His dark maw, slick with his own blood and glowing faintly from the distant lamptree, shoots out towards the frightened creature’s nape, his jaws aiming to take a chunk out of the thickest part of her neck. After his intended bite, Ricochet lifts his upper body into a rear, his heavy hooves striking towards the mare and aiming for the area between the right side of her neck and front portion of her right shoulder. While the stallion performs this maneuver, the collie bounds behind the mare, his powerful jaws aiming to clamp onto her right gaskin.


{800 words| Attack 2/3 | Companion 1/2 | Magic -/- | Defense 0/1| Battle Buffs: Swift and bulk
Summary: Due to Ricochet's forward momentum, Kahlua's bite misses his ear and she snags the crest of his neck instead. Receives a headache from clubbing her with his head, and when she rears it jars his teeth, causing them to bleed. Her knee manages to smash into his barrel, and he is winded and stumbles a bit away. His stumble redirects her striking hoof so that it clips his coronet and hoof wall, and he stumbles further away when the pain hits him, releasing her from his grasp. He lurches forward and turns to face her again, and after taking a quick moment to rest, he calls to Guns to attack and the pair charge forwards. Ricochet aims for Kahlua's right and tries to bite her neck, then rears up to try and slam his hooves into her neck/shoulder area. Guns runs behind Kahlua and tries to latch onto her gaskin.}

"Whistle"



HP: 49.5
We want you for the Equine Empire.

Kahlua the Sunshower Posts: 662
Outcast atk: 5.5 | def: 9.5 | dam: 4.5
Mare :: Equine :: 15.3hh :: 9 [Orangemoon] HP: 65 | Buff: NOVICE
Khan :: Common Blue Dragon :: Frost Breath Sevin
#5
The bite gave her taste of blood in her mouth. She hated it. Everything about this was stressful. She couldn't think fast enough. Every time she moved it was like being controlled by strings through someone else. She was glad she had never fought before; she hoped to never again have to. She wasn't smart enough for this. When she reared she felt a sticky wetness begin to drip down her withers and shuddered. The blood was going to stain the bleached portions of her coat and she was pissed. The physical pain would never hurt her as much as knowing that her beauty was fading with each moment- even if some of the ugliness was only temporary.

As the stallion released her mane the mare sighed in relief, keeping her ears glued to him in fear. She wanted to move but the pain in her right forelimb was so intense she practically forgot what she was doing. She was no seasoned fighter, forgetting pain was not easily done. Her emotions were so confusing she wanted to cry. There was no time for crying, though. In seconds the stallion was moving again.

She watched, amazed, as he lifted his body with ease into a buck and twisted on the icy ground. In a frenzy, she tried backing away but her left front hoof slipped in blood that had pooled around it and stiffness from swelling in her right front limited the bending that her fetlock and pastern joints could do. She barely managed to move a half step backwards before his hooves met her left shoulder's flesh. The thick muscles there protected her bones, but the bruising was swift and painful. She couldn't stop another scream as pain rushed upward and she winced. At least her weight had been on her left hoof, preventing her from stumbling to the right and damaging her right limb further.

Before she could think, he was gone again. As he turned, Kahlua shifted her weight to her hind end, relieving her forelimbs of some pressure. She could feel stiffness settling into the swollen flesh of her right pastern, the cold air hardening the muscles. In fear, her eyes widened. The whites of her eyes showed and her pupils were dilated to counteract the terrible darkness, the icy blue of her iris barely visible between. “Attack.” She stiffened. The fear was paralyzing. She could only imagine what was coming.

The stallion charged ruthlessly and she could only think to protect her front half, it being badly damaged already. As her weight was already on her hind end, she guessed she would be able to use her lighter frame to her advantage. As he came within striking distance she lunged forward a step. His bite met with the right side of her croup, bruising the area and causing her to tense. The bite would cause some stiffness, but was negligible compared to her other injuries.

Seeing him rear, the mare swung her hind end to the left, his hooves scraping down her right thigh and tearing flesh. With all her attention on the stallion she had forgotten the dog. His teeth dug viciously into her right gaskin as she finished her 90 degree turn. “NOOOO!” She screamed before violently kicking her right hind. She hoped her hoof would hit the dog. She hated that dog. The movement of her limb caused the stallion's hooves to tear up more flesh than they would have otherwise and the sting was painful. Blood began to trickle down her right hind from both bites. The injuries would sting as she moved her hind limb.

If the stallion had not moved, they would be standing in a T, her facing his right side. Frustrated, the mare reared lowly again. She attempted to slam her left front hoof towards his right gaskin. At the same time, she lowered her head and tried to bite his stifle just above where she was aiming her hoof. She made sure to let her left front hoof bear the weight of her body as she landed, protecting the right from further pain. Limited by pain in her front end, the mare was confused and fear forced her into irrational choices; though, perhaps, they would confuse the stallion. She could only hope. Rocking her weight back onto her hind end, she lunged forward. She hoped he had not moved far. If he hadn't, her chest would slam into his right rib cage. Simultaneously, she bit again. She knew bites caused little damage, but she was neither war minded nor creative. She tried to grab his withers then landed again on her left front. All of the motion caused increased bleeding at her coronet band. “I HATE YOU,” she screamed, her chest heaving as she fought for air.

[Post: 3/3, 800 words; summary: Kahlua is kicked in the shoulder. She moves forward as Rico charges, getting bit in the croup. As he rears and the dog bites she swings her hind end out to the left, taking the full dog bite but only getting scraped by Rico's hooves. She kicks at the dog, then rears and tries to attack Rico's right hind gaskin while biting at his stifle. She then lunges forward, trying to hit her chest into his rib cage.]
.KAHLUA


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for any reason to any degree, with the exception of killing her.

Please do not tag Kahlua unless it is in an opening post

Ricochet the Incendiary Posts: 133
Deceased
Stallion :: Equine :: 15.2 hands :: 5 years Buff: BULK
Blu
#6


R I C O C H E T - - raise your GUN and it's over

Success! Although his foe had sprung forward to redirect his bite to her rear, the stallion had still managed to cause harm to her. His lips closed around the bone of her croup and with a ferocious jerk of his head, Ricochet’s mouth departed from his adversary with a mouthful of her ebony hair. The rear that he had performed had not been as lucky, although his hooves did drag their blunt edges down the paint’s hind leg. The buckskin had not thought to protect his foot when he had performed the move, however, and upon impact with the ground – and with his foe’s bodacious ass – waves of pain stemmed from his coronet, causing him to stumble as he landed.

The Incendiary’s invisible audience had fallen into a hushed silence at the sound of one of the actor’s cries. The painted mare had struck out towards the collie as his nimble body turned to flee, but he had not been fast enough. Like a snake – coiled and patient – Kahlua’s merciless weapon had waited for the best moment to strike, embedding itself into the flesh at the dog’s collar. A mangled bark slipped past the canine’s dark lips and he stumbled away from the clashing equines, gasping for air. The warlord’s ears snapped back at the sound of the strangled cry, but the Incendiary gave no pause to tend to the wheezing dog. He had his own wounds to lick, but he would save all that for later. His attention was focused on an angry woman, after all.

Not liking the position that the mare had forced him into – or the rear she was preparing herself for – Ricochet spun on his hind legs, pushing his chest and right shoulder closer to his foe as he twisted his front end to his right. The pale stallion quickly backed away from his assailant, his hind legs slipping on the uneven ground, rendering him unable to block the oncoming attacks completely. Her hooves slammed down on the right side of his chest, tearing at the mass of muscle and flesh, and her gleaming teeth ripped at the skin on the right side of his neck. The pain wasn’t nearly as bad there as the scrapes on his leg, but his chest stung just as much as any other surface wound. He knew that every movement he made from that moment on would cause his pectoral muscles to burn, but it wasn’t as if he could just stop moving; the duo-toned mare was flying towards him, and he lacked the space to move out of her way. Even though his mind was struggling to keep up with the situation – and her words – his body knew just what to do.

And just like that, he met her in the middle.

Fueled by his masculine desire to conquer, the buckskin propelled himself forwards, tears stinging his eyes as pain laced through his breast. Although the pair of the equines were similar in height and build, Kahlua had been making much lower rears than normal, and Ricochet tried to use this knowledge to his advantage. His hooves went flying as he tried to raise his upper body so that it towered over hers, aiming for the femme’s breast and throat before her body slammed into his. Trying his best to force the whole of his weight on top of her, his naves laboring with the effort to breathe at this point in the battle, the brute made a few exhausted attempts to tear the flesh on the left side of Kahlua’s neck with his teeth.

The stallion’s blurred blue gaze roamed the darkness that surrounded them, unsure of what they were looking for. It took a few moments for the warrior to regain his mind, but they were all that he needed to realize that he was not alone in this fight.

“GUNS!”

He knew that the anger in his voice would have been enough to make the wounded dog flinch, but he also knew that his loyal servant knew better than to ignore his commands. He watched the dog limp behind the mare, the white of his collar showing purple from the distant glow of a lamptree, and waited with giddy anticipation for the dog to make his move. Becoming more determined in his attempt to send his foe crashing down the hill, the Incendiary attempted to batter her shoulders with his hooves and arched his back to try and lean more weight against her. The tyrant knew that he was putting himself in a dangerous situation, too, but he was placing his bets on the state of her right gaskin. If the Gundog’s attempt to tear at the extensor muscles there was successful, then perhaps he had a chance to take the lady down after all.

{800 words| Attack 3/3 | Companion 2/2 | Magic -/- | Defense 0/0| Battle Buffs: Swift and bulk
Summary: Guns is kicked in the throat and then stumbles away from the battle, gasping for breath. Ricochet follows through with the attacks that managed to hit Kahlua from his last post, and upon landing from his rear his leg experiences some trauma. Turning on his hind end and swinging his front end to the right, – and into Kahlua’s rear/hooves – Ricochet backs up a bit, slips, then gets battered on the right side of his chest by her hooves and her bite tears the flesh from the right side of his neck. Now face-to-face, Ricochet meets her leap in the air, his hooves churning to try and get a few quick hits in before their chests slam into each other, where the two are locked together as he tries to lean his weight against her. He then tries to tear at the flesh on the left side of her neck with his teeth. Realizing that Guns was still around, he calls to his companion, who moves behind Kahlua to bite at her right gaskin again. During the time it takes for Guns to perform the move, Ricochet tries to push against Kahlua more and attempt to scrape her shoulders with his hooves.}

"Whistle"



HP: 49.5
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Kahlua the Sunshower Posts: 662
Outcast atk: 5.5 | def: 9.5 | dam: 4.5
Mare :: Equine :: 15.3hh :: 9 [Orangemoon] HP: 65 | Buff: NOVICE
Khan :: Common Blue Dragon :: Frost Breath Sevin
#7
The stallion turned as she aimed for his hind limb. She had not been prepared for it at all, but of course he would move. He seemed fast for his size, she had not counted on it at the beginning of the fight. There was no slow motion moment of understanding. Everything whirled before the mare’s eyes in flashes of color and thrashing bodies. Still, she was lucky and her hooves met flesh. She almost cringed at the feeling. She should have been happy that her attacks were landing at all, but she couldn’t manage it. Not while the wounds in her limbs ached, the scratches and bites down her hind right were oozing and throbbing, bruises were forming and her withers were stained red. She was a mess and she couldn’t believe what she had gotten herself in to- and all this for running her mouth so stupidly.

As she bounded forward in her confusion, something she never expected to happen… happened. Instead of trying to move away from her or turn to avoid her charge, the stallion launched himself towards her. Her low level lunge was no match for the stallion's rearing and he towered high above her. Too invested in her forward movement, the mare could do little but take the stallion’s flying hooves as he battered her chest. He beat mercilessly against her left pectoral muscles as she threw her head to the right to avoid having her face thrashed. She was glad for the thick winter fur that covered the area and deadened the blows slightly. Still, the bruising the stallion left was nothing to be ignored. Just moments later the full weight of the stallion's body slammed against her chest, completing his assault. Swelling would quickly tighten the muscles in this cold.

The stallion's mass added onto her own as he locked his forelimbs around her and pressed onto her body. An instant flash of pain rushed up her forelimbs as the extra weight further damaged the already injured soft tissues. Now came that moment- the moment where everything slows down and time ticks slower. The pain was great and terrible and lasted an eternity. It overrode any sense of awareness she had and she momentarily forgot to react. The few bites of the stallion at the left side of her neck went rather unnoticed, despite the fact that they would leave more bruises on her already battered frame.

GUNS! The screaming of the stallion was just what she needed to awaken herself from the flaring pain that traveled hoof to head. She didn't waste a moment more letting him thrust his weight onto her shoulders. To avoid putting pressure on her right front and because her head was still turned to the right, Kahlua swung her hind end to the left violently. The sweat covering her body helped her slide from between the stallion's grasp. Additionally, his constant pushing had shifted her weight to her rear and helped with the rotation. As her turn ended, they were again at a 90 degree angle.

The mare practically forgot the word the stallion had spoken just seconds ago, having little chance to think as he fell from his hold and redoubled his efforts to push against her. His right hoof batted against her left leg a few times as he dropped, but the hits were mild and only afforded a few scrapes to the limb. His body pressed against her left shoulder and her front end was easily pushed to the right due to the fact that her weight was still on her hind end. The stumbling motion once again put pressure on her constantly damaged right front limb, but at this moment it was one of the luckiest things that could have happened.

As her body rotated farther to the right, the dog's bite was redirected to the front of her gaskin. Again, a stabbing pain rushed up her body and she instinctively withdrew her leg. The stupid motion caused the dog's teeth to tear at the muscle. A new wave of blood trickled down her limb, covering it with sticky redness. Beaten and battered she made no motion to return for more. Whatever had been driving her mindless flailing had failed her. She looked once more upon the stallion's face as she breathed heavily and her lungs worked tirelessly to feed her aching muscles with oxygen. The burn scars she found upon the left side of his visage made her shudder once again before she looked away to the ground and lifted her right front hoof. “Leave me alone,” she begged him, the words falling from her mouth with a pleading tone instead of the anger that had fueled her prior shouting. Both her body and soul were wounded.

[Post: Closing Defense/3, 797 words; summary: Kahlua's chest is battered by Rico's hooves and then he falls upon her, successfully locking his forelimbs around her shoulders. He bites successfully at her neck before she rotates her hind end to the left, sliding from his grasp because she is sweaty. As he falls his hoof scratches her left front limb. He pushes against her, causing her front end to rotate around to the right. The dog bites the front of her gaskin and she lifts her leg up, causing more tearing of the flesh to occur.

All OOC posts above Rico's can be deleted. We were going to delete them, but didn't notice that we weren't able to.]
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K a h l u a | R i c o c h e t
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By my verdict TIE is the winner.

KAHLUA -- post 1 (attack only)

[Realism]
+ 1| Attack: bites at rib cage area
+ 1| Attack: low kick

[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
0| Easy read: a couple typos
RICOCHET -- post 1

[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: teeth barely damage - that area she described is a difficult place to grab ahold of so I thought you responded great to that attack.
+ 1| Defense: glancing kick
+ 1| Attack: shoulder ram
0| Attack: head to ribs hit - I like the idea of this attack, but in this instance he’s coming at her too fast to be able to pull this off realistically.
- 1| Attack: mane grab - I’m not even sure how he can grab her mane if his head was just trying to hit her ribs? Much less with the speed he was described as using coming into her (fast gallop) with no description of slowing or stopping, I don’t see how he could pull this off.
- 1| Attack: heel stomp - Same as above in regards to his speed. Overall I just think you have too much going on at one time in one place which has made it a bit of an attack overload and difficult to understand what is happening when and where and to/from whom.

[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
+ 1| Easy read
KAHLUA -- post 2

[Realism]
- 1| Attack: biting for his ear - he stated he was galloping towards her, not sure how she’d have the time or speed to grab his ear, especially while being slammed into.
+ 1| Defense: slammed into
- 1| Injury: she should have taken a lot more pain or been off balanced significantly more considering Ricochet galloped into her and she was just standing there. If she’d at least been in motion it would have helped defuse some of his energy.
+ 1| Defense: head graze
0| Defense: mane grab - it’s barely mentioned (it also would not stop her from being able to rear. Horse’s actually don’t feel through their mane like in their tails. of course if a large chunk is ripped out that’d hurt, but I mean they’re not as sensitive as if someone grabs our hair so she probably wouldn’t really notice/be aware of it until she jerked up and it ripped out)
+ 1| Defense: coronet stomp
- 1| Attack: rear - you air your knee at his ribs as you lift up, but say he has a hold of your mane, so based on position his ribs should not be close enough for her to do this. Otherwise I like the idea of this attack - though she’d have much more force going down than up.
+ 1| Attack: fetlock slam
+ 1| Injury: bringing up how her injured fetlock was affected from her attack and landing of the rear, excellent!

[Prose]
0| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
+ 1| Easy read
RICOCHET -- post 2

[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: grazed bite
+ 1| Injury: hurt by your own attack, using your head to strike her
+ 1| Defense: ribs kneed
- 1| Injury: barely described her hit on his ribs which you said landed
+ 1| Defense: hit on coronet
- 1| Attack: buck - bucking after just having an injured front hoof that he said he would have to take care of it more and you immediately shift all your weight onto it right after, doesn’t seem realistic.
+ 1| Attack: neck bite
+ 1| Attack: rear to shoulder strike
+ 1| Attack: gaskin bite from Guns

[Prose]
0| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
+ 1| Easy read
KAHLUA -- post 3

[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: struck on left shoulder - not sure there’d be enough blood to slip on, especially considering the cold, which causes there to be less blood right beneath the surface especially in the lower legs/extremities.
- 1| Defense: neck bite to coup - you say you take only one step but the attack lands on the complete opposite end of her body.
+ 1| Defense: glancing kick to thigh
+ 1| Defense: dog bite
+ 1| Attack: cow kick
+ 1| Attack: low rear to gaskin
+ 1| Attack: biting stifle while rearing - for a normal rear this would be too low to do at the same time and off balance her, causing her face to slam into his body if he didn’t move away. It’s still a bit overall awkward.
- 1| Attack: lunging to ram his ribs - she was aiming towards his hind end earlier, so would have to be turning to aim back at his ribs, which you do not describe - and this is all assuming he didn’t move. Plus there’s no distance between them for her to get momentum to really cause an impact, and having the lighter frame would probably get injured from doing this.
+ 1| Attack: biting

[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
+ 1| Easy read
RICOCHET -- post 3

[Realism]
- 2| Powerplay: “His lips closed around the bone of her croup and with a ferocious jerk of his head, Ricochet’s mouth departed from his adversary with a mouthful of her ebony hair.” - You cannot go back and add in that you ferociously jerked your head, as this was not something you had described before and would cause more damage to your opponent after she’d already described the injury and moved forward in the post.
+ 1| Defense: dog kicked
+ 1| Defense: kicked in chest
+ 1| Defense: neck bitten
+ 1| Attack: rears at her
+ 1| Attack: bites
- 1| Defense: you do not mention how her lunging ram affects him.
- 1| Defense: you do not mention her trying to bite him again.
+ 1| Attack: leans his weight on her more
+ 1| Attack: dog bite

[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
+ 1| Easy read
KAHLUA -- post 4 (defense only)

[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: struck on chest from rearing
+ 1| Defense: bitten
+ 1| Defense: swings away, hit on his way down
+ 1| Defense: jerks away from dog bite

KAHLUA

[Bonus]
+ 2| Breed
+ 2| Terrain

[Injuries]
None.

[Creativity]
None.

Comments: You do incredibly well at remembering you injuries and using them throughout the fight which I love. You also take injuries pretty accurately and consider breed and terrain throughout. However, despite your focus on realism so much in the fight which left me wanting a lot in regards to emotion (although I loved the moments when Kahlua’s fear and inexperience did shine), you still have a ways to come with the flow of a battle. There should be more movement - often you were standing still - and things need not go in exact order one by one. Things can occur together, you can counter attack and that can sometimes be a defense. I would suggest watching some fighting horses and read more spars because overall this battle felt stiff and at time was hard to imagine - you did a great job at trying to always describe sides, but sometimes I still struggled figuring out where her head was and his head was, if they were parallel or perpendicular, whereas information like the exact degree of the angle does not help me. I think you have great potential though because your writing was very nice, you just need a bit more practice making it all come together and be real.
RICOCHET

[Bonus]
+ 2| Breed
+ 2| Terrain
+ 1| Health

[Injuries]
None.

[Creativity]
+ 1| I really loved you describing shifting leads to give a certain shoulder more power. Very realistic and something I haven’t seen done before.
+ 1| I loved seeing you take injuries from actions that weren’t always attacks, such as his teeth being hit when she reared.

Comments: You fought in a similar fashion as Kahlua, having a good eye for remembering breed and terrain references (loved all the slipping), and that you remembered injuries at times and especially that you took injuries that weren’t direct attacks which is very real. However sometimes I think you also get a bit stiff with having all your attacks and defenses happen in a line rather than as a continuous flow, and I think you tend to get a bit overzealous with the number of attacks you make in a post. I’d love to see more of those words put towards emotion and description, as the posts were rather dry with the technicalities of fighting. Otherwise I also think your writing is very good and has a lot of potential for growth with more exposure to fighting!
TOTAL
KAHLUA - 74
RICOCHET - 74

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