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[OPEN] Monster of the Multitude [Invasion]

Deimos the Reaper Posts: 527
Deceased atk: 7.0 | def: 12 | dam: 6.5
Stallion :: Unicorn :: 16.1 :: 7 HP: 72.5 | Buff: NUMB
Heather
#1


Hostility brewed in the etchings of twilight, a burdening, blistering, smoldering concoction of malice, contempt and loathing, slithering in a sinuous synapse of ferocity and villainy. Animosity sparked, incited, invoked the perilous scrape of his cold-hearted, cretin predilection, scorn twisted into savagery, wrath writhing into fury. Livelihoods cast into darker reaches, where the grasping, gnarled fingers of raptorial hands caught at his brethren, seized at his comrades, struggled to snatch and disappear into the dusk. How many had he protected? How many had he lost? The answers were left lying in the dismal layers of eternal gloom, surfaces unexplored and rendered unknown, children sullied by avaricious grasps of enemies and opponents. What did the Dragon’s Throat and the World’s Edge hope to achieve by their sneaky, furtive measures? To pull the Basin’s hatred into action, to spur their enmity into bedlam, mayhem, discord? Did they yearn for violence, for villainy, for desecration upon their palaces, their kingdoms and empires? For surely, it was only prize they’d obtain. Why poke at a bed of thorns? Why prick at a nest of hornets? Why dabble in the scope and scrape of the vicious, the merciless, the relentless? He’d forced himself into wide corridors of darkness, guarded and blocked, torn and dismayed, but couldn’t capture the foes’ fortitudes, the reasons for their absconding, the treacherous snares wrapped around young, foolish hooves. Instead of chasing and clambering, screaming and sneering, howling and screeching, he silently began to court the vehement tirades of his chilling ire. Laced into his blood, beating against his eardrums, consuming the doldrums of his seditious vows, he helped carry the wayward path of their brethren as they united in one remorseless assault. A ceremonious plunge into hellish, chthonic pathways fueled the intimidating figurine ghosting through the shadowed drifts of ice, curtains of frigid walls turning into steep dunes and vicious sand. Deimos followed the breadth and breath of southern wind, the channels of sea breeze wafting into his nares, allowed them to fill his seething soul with more vivid abhorrence, scorn and derision; hate lacquered upon brutality, barbarity, and belligerence.

The Reaper, molded anarchy and sculpted malignity, drew his solid, stoic skeleton across the barbs of hot, turbulent sand, where the earth gave rise to a wall, staunch and stalwart against the shadowed, cloudy sky. How they yearned to conquer these demons, these creatures spouting worthiness and peace where they merely whispered of hushed chicanery and deceit, wondered what it would be like to crush the fine bits of their fortifications to the ground. He stood outside its depths and cast his overbearing presence upon its side, wished to seize its immobile parts and witness its crumbling shards and fragments splinter into the shadowy abyss. The piercing blue juncture of his stare stared directly into the chambers of soot and dirt, and craved, coveted, the fall of its bestial torments. Perhaps – with luck, precision, prowess and supremacy, their vengeance would savor the bite, the taste, and the relish of the Throat’s ambrosial collapse.


[Dragon’s Throat borders, sandy footing, midnight, cloudy.
503 words. Deimos awaits a defender.
Deimos is using buffs SWIFT and BULK.
0/4 invasion duel system. Time frame to start an invasion or defense is until 8/22.
0/1 + 0/1 additional Basin Champ magic used. SWP applies.]





Andromeda Posts: 91
Dragon's Throat Healer
Mare :: Pegasus :: 16.1hh :: 5 (Tallsun) Buff: NOVICE
Lauren
#2
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It had been a week or so since Andromeda first returned with a heavy heart, weighed down by the knowledge Kri could not be found anywhere. If only she had been more careful; if only she had kept a better eye out. She put the blame upon herself, even though her leader was more than capable and strong as dark diamond. It was not her fault, precisely, Kri had been stolen. But she flew nearly nonstop above the desert, always watching, always wary, of the force that took her leader coming back for more.

At first, time passed peacefully in the welcoming velvet of the star-strewn sky.

She was flying when she saw them, the many members of the Aurora Basin swarming like oh-so-many ants over her beloved home embraced in the welcoming presence of night. It broke her heart, and steeled her mind. For a long time Andromeda had believed their enemy was great in strength; but she had not thought they would be so audacious as to roam down from their winter halls to the hot palaces of the Throat. For a moment, the graceful woman continued her flying, her ills eased by the familiarity of this sky, the rustle of her wings beating against the wind. But even as she flew, her gut wrenched and twisted. No, she could not let them down, her dearest family and the mighty Kri. Andromeda is not a coward who flees at the sign of battle, the Sergeant tells herself. Courage is doing the terrifying acts, no matter how afraid you might be, no matter how your heart flutters like a startled bird and your mind cannot quite collect its fragmented thoughts.

The stars gleam and glisten, on her ebony coat and dark velvet wings, and in the sky. How the mare wishes the Sun God was here, strong of heart, to be able to steel her faith. But what if... what if he has truly abandoned them? Does she go to fight for a land without its patron? Where is Kri, the mighty and strong? It is she who would rally them, sing her battle cry. But the Resolute is gone. Where is Midas and Hector? They are needed here... to rally the troops when Kri is missing. But in the writhing mass of dark bodies, she does not know if they are there.

Andromeda pulls in her wings, and tips forward into a swift dive, even as the cold clouds cover the wisp of a moon at its highest point. The wind roars in her ears, and she is fearful that the darkness is an ill omen as she prepares for battle. But even with her mind nervous and on edge, she realizes that her obsidian coat will blend in quite well with the darkness. How lucky she is to have camouflage! The element of surprise is on her side today. As she plunges downwards, her eyes pluck out a shape amidst the many, one unadorned by a defender. Even as she falls, two hundred feet, a hundred feet, she takes in his details swiftly. He is a unicorn; she will have to be careful about the sword on his head. Of course they are all unicorns. She is a pegasus, winged and one of the sky, light and agile. The gray, the Reaper, though she knows his legend not, is smaller than her tall, graceful and muscled build. It is this staunch build that forewarns her he is a formidable opponent; it is his darkness, the hardness in his empty eyes.

Falling, falling, falling.

Closer, closer, closer.

Her wings snap open, the pressure on them enormous as she extends them to full length, the wind shrieking about the edges of her sleek feathers. Bracing her legs, she hopes to land on his very back, with her head gripping his horn and hooves snapping on delicate spine. She would rather take him out in one blow than have to go through the fight, so she may be able to help the others of her herd not faring as well.

If he moves- which the Sergeant prays he will not- her legs might crumple beneath her on the sand at the border of the Throat. At least the sand will cushion her maybe-fall.

Get out, invader, Andromeda thinks; this is our home, and you will not steal it without fight; for the Dragon Throat will fight to the last bloody breath before relenting hold to your damned Northern hooves.

They cannot win.
They WILL NOT win.
Andromeda
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1/4 Attack + 0/1 Defense
Magic use not applicable for Andromeda.

Drops out of sky, hopes to land on his back and grab his horn with her mouth, wrenching it back.
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Deimos the Reaper Posts: 527
Deceased atk: 7.0 | def: 12 | dam: 6.5
Stallion :: Unicorn :: 16.1 :: 7 HP: 72.5 | Buff: NUMB
Heather
#3


Simmering, scalding darkness surrounded the dunes and forced him to rely on other senses; his piercing eyes did nothing to puncture the pervading gloom. The essence of battle heightened the Reaper’s awareness, and his frame sought every drifting sound, from nearby comrades to pending enemies, each incensed body driven to brutal whims and turbulence. Villainous, violent yearnings pulled and distorted anarchic minds into infernal splendor, brought him further into the shaded abyss of desecration and ruin, to conquer, to divide, to terrorize and undermine. He wanted to show the world their power, their prowess, their strength and ardor, the results when one threatened the edge of their glacial walls, their frigid, chilling boldness. He yearned for the Throat to fall to pieces, little bits of shards broken in their sea glass and shore, forgotten, forlorn, and obliterated. What they dared to touch, what they dared to seize, could also hold a knife to their jugular and scorch the remains of their inane pursuits.

However, this treacherous camouflage worked both ways, from their drifting edges of shadowed cover to the balanced actions of their opponents. So at the flutter of wings, at the svelte stroking of wind against feathers, the damned behemoth realized a gliding rat pressed for him, aimed to strike, craved to folly their anticipated upheaval, his audacious sedition. Auds twisted, turned, captured the snippets of nearly inaudible resonance, caused his cranium to rise, gestured sword to the skies, gaze to narrow, and his body to react. What he snared of the challenger’s appearance was minimal, mostly ferocity, underbelly and hooves, but the startling notion and images of his broken spine, his splintered, snapped back, segmented into his ardent mind and forced his carcass to move in rapid momentum.

Deimos swerved immediately to the left, dug deep into the sand and forged swift beats of sideways contortions. The movement saved his spine, but her daggers still beat down upon his right shoulder and barrel, a grinding, perilous, bruising affliction crackling against his vicious sentiments; a painful grunt exuded from his lungs thereafter. The General felt his muscles stiffen immediately, taut and scorned from the blunt impact, but his sword remained liberated, thankfully, from the former, twisting left motion. Her mouth missed the sharpened edge of horn, although her teeth came to siege the right side of his face, tearing hair and pelt away from his cheek, burning sensations carving their way over his argent features, matching older, chaotic scars.

Her surprise over, completed, finished, he allowed the gestures of frustration to sweep into his core, building and looming into abhorrence, into scorn, into barbarity. Protection of her home was admirable, but his malicious, carnivorous contemplations and calculations ignored these looming desires, these honorable sentiments, and drove to malign her valor with his wicked machinations. The close proximity of the Pegasus allowed him opportunities to bestow his own assaults and sieges, and as she seemed to grow closer to earth, to drift towards land and become a part of her sandy kingdom, he maneuvered his frame closer, albeit a bit slower. Grunting once more at the rancorous, sore ailments of his right shoulder and barrel, he aimed to use his lithe bulk to ram into her left side (Were they so similar in build? Could he make her falter, stumble, crash, wings akimbo and flailing? Would she fall? Would she scream? Would she roll into the dunes and cover herself in the earth of her pending grave?). At the same time, he wielded his sword, sharp, keen, razor-edged, and tried to maim the left side of her neck, to puncture, lacerate, and pierce tender flesh.

[605 words.
Deimos is using buffs SWIFT and BULK.
1/4 invasion duel system.
0/1 + 0/1 additional Basin Champ magic used. SWP applies.
Deimos moves to left to avoid the slam of hooves upon his back. Andromeda’s hooves impact his right shoulder and right side of his barrel, bruising tender muscles and impairing swift motions. Due to his movement to the left, she also misses his horn, but ends up scraping her teeth down his right cheek, taking away hair and pelt.

At her close presence, and possible landing, Deimos moves to slam his right side into her left side, hoping to render her unbalanced. During this movement, he also aims to stab his horn into the left side of her neck.]





Andromeda Posts: 91
Dragon's Throat Healer
Mare :: Pegasus :: 16.1hh :: 5 (Tallsun) Buff: NOVICE
Lauren
#4
What anger burns in her heart, a hunger to hurt him. Andromeda is not vicious and cruel, wild and wicked; but something she does not know has scalded her heart, urging her forwards, demanding her to battle to her last breath for the sake of her sweet family, even as the Edge of the World fought their own war. If only Midas had not sent aid... but, he did what was right at the time. It is not his fault the Throat was not being invaded- invaded!- at the time.

Her hooves rake down his right shoulder and barrel, emitting a snarl of pleasure from her. It surprises her, the rage in her voice, and she wonders apprehensively if always she had this raw brutality inside her, so unlike her quiet self. She loves it, rejoices as her hooves scrape on hard muscle and the salt on her lips as she draws blood from his thin-furred cheek.

Then in a flurry of wings she is stumbling most ungracefully into a clumsy landing, balanced too heavily on her right side, left wing closing to her flank awkwardly to avoid the stallion, while her right gives one last miserable beat to try to keep her balance. Twisting ungainly, her head reeling from the hardness of the sand on her hooves, the strain on her slim legs, as she tries to keep Deimos in sight. Where has he gone?! The sergeant cannot see the Basiner's silver form against the black night. Then he hits her, ramming into her side so hard she's sent airborne, falling with an audible thump onto her right side. Luckily, this toppling of Andromeda is what lets the horn jab miss entirely. Yet something she learned as a child, just a hatchling learning to fly, returns to her. Roll, and you will not be badly hurt- bruises instead of broken bones. Roll she does, away from him, in a tangle of long legs and huge wings, sand in her mouth and gritty on her skin, every muscle moaning in protest. One roll she does, then two, and then she gets to her hooves, dust pouring off her flanks like water. No time to shake, get rid of the sand in her ears and eyes and wings; she bugles her battle cry, a clarion declarance that she will not give way.

The breath is short in her lungs, and she aches with a ferocity she has never had. When she fell, the wind was knocked out of her, leaving her weak about the knees. Still, she summons her strength, for what else can she do but fight, as is her duty to the herd?

Around her, war wages. Blood paints the Throat red, red, red. Their screams ring out over the battlefield, gristly wails and moans, cries for help, help that is not coming to the Throat. Are they losing right now? The smack of meat on meat is not familiar sound, not this many. This is no skirmish. This is war. Will any survive the sudden onslaught? When will the carrion crows descend? Already the black scavengers begin to gather on loud wings, settling on trees and watching the savagery and brutality, the monstrous nature of the Basiners and the desperation and righteous anger of those defending.

What if she dies, leaving her people?

She drops her head, ears pinned tightly to skull, and barges forward, wings clamped tightly to her sides. Every muscle screams a protest; a protest she ignores. The dust is thick, making it more difficult to see, yet she hopes she runs head-on to him, to ram his right shoulder (her left) with her right wing, which could throw a good buffet when needed. As she lopes forward, she would reach to bite his spine, in the center of his back, and attempt a smack at him with her long tail to his head, to discourage him from biting her haunches.

For a moment she is swept back to fighting Murdock. Where are the mercenaries of the Foothills? Would they come if aid was sent to them? She remembers their dance.

Then she's back, with blood burning a permanent smell in her nostrils, fear and rage with it. Both the scent and terror sickens her. There's a presence around this stallion, a shadow that obliterates all else.

But she will not let being afraid stop her. Especially not of this stone stallion the same size as her, whose only advantage in breed difference is the sharp needle on his face.
Andromeda
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2/4 + 0/1
WC of 771

As she lands off-balance, when Deimos pushes her she falls, evading the attack with his horn completely. She rolls twice to disperse her momentum, then rises. Coming back for more, she charges to his right sides, aims to smack his shoulder with a wing and bite at his spine, while swishing her tail towards his face.
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Deimos the Reaper Posts: 527
Deceased atk: 7.0 | def: 12 | dam: 6.5
Stallion :: Unicorn :: 16.1 :: 7 HP: 72.5 | Buff: NUMB
Heather
#5


The General had fought in dimness before, but there had always been some ambience, some twitching sparkle of light his eyes could grasp, could use, could frame a picture of landscape and opponent – with Richochet in the heart, bleeding its crimson force into their raw ichor, with the mare in the marsh, fueled by fire. The gloom was an overpowering curtain, a veil shading adversaries, cretins and infidels, but he would have lavished an image of the faltering Pegasus’s tumble into sand, dirt and dune. He would have yearned for an opportunity to gloat, to preen, to witness a gliding fortress forced to land and earth, and then to pummel her carcass deeper into the ground, to bury her in the archaic ruins of her home. But the Reaper was not rewarded or bestowed this gift, and all he’s granted within the dank shadows are the sounds of her plunge, the rolling resonance of her body. While the assault is successful, she captures the reign of shadow again, and he’s forced to listen for movement in the soft, unforgiving silt, coercing his plagued muscles to move, for the tightened limbs to remain aware, eager, ready for the incoming siege.

Ears captured motion amongst the loam towards his right, and he craved more information from the source, shifted his body towards the left and forward in hopes it prevented a huge tangle of the mare’s prowess upon his flesh and bones. The minor motion saved him shortly thereafter; a sudden onslaught of feathers shoved across his right side, managing to hit and smack his haunches instead of the already battered right shoulder. The Reaper clenched his jaw at the stinging ache, the shoulder hissing from his motions, the hind now smarting with a dull, muted contortion from the wing’s slap. Her teeth sank towards his right hind, the momentary alteration of direction had once more saved his spine from menace, dipped into the haunch, bruised, and inspired further outrage. The swish of her tail was a nuisance, stinging at his cuts, and for a moment he thought to capture it in his ivories, rip and pull, tear and sever, but another machination crawled into his devilish mindset.

He knew how to wind these aches and pains away from his frame, how to untangle the mess of his right side, how to glorify the moment of close proximity. Like an age-old tradition, he felt for the cold sentiments of his blood, the deadly enchantments savoring his wrath, his malice, his distortions and chaos. They answered with a chilling bravado, laced and layered their heinous contortions into his skin, into his touch, into the empire he waltzed upon – even her finely chiseled earth could betray her. Perhaps now he’d be able to see her writhe and wither, decay and falter, scream and screech as agony conquered her presence, as she became the vessel for his vexation, pique and animosity.

Deimos moved with absolute certainty, with abhorrent purpose, with brutalizing intentions. Vehemence turned with his body, cast the shining gleam of his sword as he twisted his neck, his rapier, towards her right haunches, longing to lacerate again, for the rush of blood and pain to cross over her form. The second assault was silent, an inaudible, unleashed torrent of his heresy. Invocations drove into the soil, into the sand, where their long fingers could reach and grab for her body, for her life, for her blood, for her breaths and heart, where they longed to cease the beating adornments of her entity, force her energy into his aching barbs.


[596 words.
Deimos is using buffs SWIFT and BULK.
2/4 invasion duel system.
1/1 + 0/1 additional Basin Champ magic used. SWP applies.
Moving slightly forward and to the left, Deimos avoids the wing slap on his shoulder, and it ends up stinging his right haunches instead. Due to the earlier movement, her teeth miss his spine, but end up bruising the flesh of his right hind. Her tail hits at his face and serves as stinging nuisances.

In response, Deimos twists his neck to the right, hoping to pierce her right haunches. He also unleashes his death magic into the ground and allows it to coast towards Andromeda, hoping to steal some of her lifeforce for his own.]






Andromeda Posts: 91
Dragon's Throat Healer
Mare :: Pegasus :: 16.1hh :: 5 (Tallsun) Buff: NOVICE
Lauren
#6
Family. It was, technically, a unit bonded together through blood; but friendships could be forged stronger than what blood might dictate. This is what she was fighting for- for the Throat, their sweet home. How many have already been lost to the Basiners' spears thrusting forth at the citizens of the dragon's maw? Where were the mothers, and the children? Oh gods, was that their screams? Was that bellow Midas? Was that shriek from Gaucho's mouth? Her heart was pounding too loud, too frantic in her chest. War was no pretty place. Still, she strove onwards. She could not give in, not as long as she was still standing.

However, she may not be standing for much longer.

There is courage in her heart, but she's afraid, especially of this stallion. You are not a coward. You are not a coward. Andromeda was not. Stand fast. The roan's wing buffets his hip and the smallest of smiles curl her lips. She's glad, glad for the small victory, and hopes that a stronger blow will land upon the stygian, one that can put him out of here for good. With determination burning in her heart, a hope lighting her from inside that she might be able to land another on the Reaper, her teeth snag on his right hind leg. Salt stings her lips and tongue, a sour tang about as sweet as drinking ocean water. For once, Andromeda does not mind. It is like drinking wine (though she knows not what wine is)- she could get drunk off delivering blows, off fighting someone away from her beloved herd. She knows not if her tail stings his eyes (though she hopes it does) due to the lack of nerve endings in her hair.

It is then Deimos' horn pierces her haunch, plucking a few primaries as his horn catches her deep and hard.

Andromeda cries out in pain, wings unfurling from her flanks in hope to take to the skies and return to the earth to battle him after a moment of recovery in the familiar stars. There is no such luck for the bird today; death sings it's sweet song, thrumming through her veins and whispering in her ears. Her hooves lift off the earth, her wings flaring, trying vainly to catch the wind. Today she will not fly. There is panic, and she thinks she might die. She feels as vulnerable as a leaf in the autumn wind, as if her very soul might be swept away at any moment, taken to some other hall than where she lived. How sick she feels. How everything is draining, the world is going black, spotty around the edges. The sergeat's eyelids flutter, her wings thrashing once more.

How hard she strives to stay awake! No! She can't fail. She just can't. This is her herd. She can't go so easy into the night. But the stars are so quiet.

Then she falls from the sky, a fall from high enough to break several bones, and hits the earth, wings crumpled, eyes closed, and breathing shallow. One of her wings is caught askew beneath her, the fragile bones crushed and broken. Perhaps it was the overexertion that had her respond so strongly to his magic. Maybe it was the touch of his horn in her haunches. Or mayhaps it was simply because Deimos was kissed by Death and Satan and sent back to earth, the devil wrapped in black robes and a long horn, with empty eyes and a hard heart.

The little bird is silent and still as the war wages on.

Andromeda
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WC: 610
Summary: Horn catches her in the left haunch, and the magic does the final blow. While she tried to take off, the magic caught her, and she was unable to handle it while trying to fly, and so she fell to the ground from five or six feet probably (so, pretty serious fall for a many-pound horse
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#7

DEIMOS | ANDROMEDA
- - - - -
By my verdict DEIMOS is the winner.
Deimos recieves 1 VP and unlocks the Battle Buff DANCE


ANDROMEDA -- post 1 (attack only)

[Realism]
+ 1| Attack: Attempting to strike Deimos' back with her hooves
+ 1| Attack: Bite to his horn.

[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion.
+ 1| Flow.
+ 1| Easy Read

DEIMOS -- post 1

[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: Dodging to the left - taking her hooves to his right shoulder.
+ 1| Injury: Bite to the right side of his face
+ 1| Attack: Deimos' right shoulder to Andromeda's left
+ 1| Attack: Horn attack to the left side of her neck.

[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion.
+ 1| Flow.
+ 1| Easy Read

ANDROMEDA -- post 2

[Realism]
0| Injury: Deimos' shoulder pushing her right, no mention of pain.
- 1| Defense: The fall + rolling away to avoid his horn. I found it unlikely that, even unbalanced, that Deimos would be able to push her over. Regardless, a 16.1 hand creature with wings, would not be able to simply roll away with any sort of speed. I haven't read ahead to see what Deimos does next - but if you've see horses roll before, you know that it isn't a quick process, much less rolling twice. In that time, Deimos could easily kick at her neck and head, or stab her with his horn.
+ 1| Attack: Charging into his right side with her right wing.
+ 1| Attack: Bite to the spine
+ 1| Attack: Tail flick to his face
+ 1| Previous Experience: Recalling the spar with Murdock.

[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion: I liked this line: It surprises her, the rage in her voice, and she wonders apprehensively if always she had this raw brutality inside her, so unlike her quiet self.
+ 1| Flow.
- 1| Easy Read: Lines like this were confusing to ram his right shoulder (her left) with her right wing - her left, what? I think you meant that it was straight on, but she would be veering slightly to the the left, in order for their right sides to meet, but as this sentence had to do with where they would collide, it was confusing. Also this: with her right wing, which could throw a good buffet when needed - is her wing open? Closed?

DEIMOS -- post 2

[Realism]
+ 1| Previous Experience: Recalling the lighting in other spars.
+ 1| Defense: Moving to the left - taking her wing to his haunches, instead of shoulder.
+ 1| Injury: Bite to his hind end.
+ 1| Injury: Tail to his face.
+ 1| Attack: Spinning and trying to slash her right hind end
+ 1| Attack: Magic attack.

[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion.
+ 1| Flow.
+ 1| Easy Read

ANDROMEDA -- post 3

[Realism]
+ 1| Injury: Deimos' horn to her right hind end
+ 1| Injury: Fall from Deimos' magic.

[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion.
+ 1| Flow.
+ 1| Easy Read

ANDROMEDA

[Bonus]
+ 1| Breed Comparison.
+ 2| Surroundings.

[Injuries]
- 2| Broken Bones/Fainting in battle: Deimos magic: Drains energy from opponent, approximately the amount used in one fight post, and can also revitalize Deimos by the same amount. I'm really not sure (especially in the middle of an Invasion) you decided to have Andromeda take this attack so hard. You describe her lift off as being fairly unsuccessful - yet you act like a 5-6 foot fall would be devastating - although I imagine her falling back down directly on her hooves, not on her back in such a way as to crush her wings. I've seen eventing horses get caught up and crash from heights that high, so I don't think it would have been unreasonable to have her continue, which is why her fully passing out seemed uncalled for. Taking injury is great in fights, but this many broken bones/fainting would be a death sentence.

[Creativity]
Nothing of note.

Comments: Really great fight, until Andromeda's final crash. I really like that you incorporated the fact that others would have been fighting around them, as well as using the darkness to Andromeda's advantage.

DEIMOS

[Bonus]
+ 1| Breed Comparison.
+ 1| Surroundings.

[Injuries]
+ 1| Least Injured

[Creativity]
Nothing of note.

Comments: Deimos is so beautiful to read, and many times I found myself thinking "Oh no!" when I would read his attacks :P Really great writing!

TOTAL
Andromeda- 65
Deimos- 69

image credit to Paulo Brandão


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