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05-09-2016, 03:11 PM
Since when is an ocean only inches away from a Desert?
Appearance Ref :: one eye is Blue one is light brown
0 - "Desert" capitalized is giving it a proper noun, so I was convinced that this was a Dragon's Throat character. While it is not misleading, it is still substantial.
Red rivers roaring with whitecaps fill this odd world.
Appearance Ref:: Red Roan
+1 - Very clever!
The wild crazy storms take over the lands sometimes,
Personality Ref:: Says he is “Wild” in his profile
+1 - Great
Sooth calm nights allow the storms to roll off the creature’s backs without a second thought
Personality Ref::"Calm- He is very laid back and lets most things just roll off of his back"
0 - Already have a personality reference.
The landscape is bare,
Species Ref:: Equine
+1 - I thought about this!
Leaving the creatures alone and fighting for themselves
Rank Ref: Outcast
0 - The way this reads you need to have the line before it to make sense, so this does not pass. I almost marked this as a -1 because the use of "Creatures" as plural suggests that there is more than one character here: a twin, or companion(s), etc.
3/3 Pass from me.
Appearance Ref :: one eye is Blue one is light brown
0 - "Desert" capitalized is giving it a proper noun, so I was convinced that this was a Dragon's Throat character. While it is not misleading, it is still substantial.
Red rivers roaring with whitecaps fill this odd world.
Appearance Ref:: Red Roan
+1 - Very clever!
The wild crazy storms take over the lands sometimes,
Personality Ref:: Says he is “Wild” in his profile
+1 - Great
Sooth calm nights allow the storms to roll off the creature’s backs without a second thought
Personality Ref::"Calm- He is very laid back and lets most things just roll off of his back"
0 - Already have a personality reference.
The landscape is bare,
Species Ref:: Equine
+1 - I thought about this!
Leaving the creatures alone and fighting for themselves
Rank Ref: Outcast
0 - The way this reads you need to have the line before it to make sense, so this does not pass. I almost marked this as a -1 because the use of "Creatures" as plural suggests that there is more than one character here: a twin, or companion(s), etc.
3/3 Pass from me.
