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01-20-2013, 06:51 PM
Fail
You need no governing.
You are already ruled.
- Mandrake brainwashed him and controls him.
+1 It states in Archi's profile that Mandrake has brainwashed him.
By love of course, but is it true?
- Fluff
-1 As Boom stated, fluff can't be directly misleading. This is.
Your ruler is off.
Ruler needs time.
Mandrake is offline. I was also pointing towards him relationship with her.
-1/+.5 - How could we have known Mandrake wasn't online when you made this stealth? That isn't a valid clue. But referring to Time, is a good clue, however, I know I use the name of the Rper in my stealths, but the rules clearly say you need three clues to the character, so .5
She fancies the powerful.
Does she fancy you?
Haha, no.
I think she hates you.
-1 Again, your fluff can't be misleading. Mandrake doesn't hate Archi.
Awrangler does so, but to you he wants.
Rope you down and cage you up.
Caged? No, I broke the lock..
Hell yes you are now free.
I understand you know, but was it unnecessary to just run away..
Fluff.
"Boy, just get your ass over here." Muttered aloud.
All I need is a word with you, dark mangled boy.
He is black which is a dark color. He is a stallion which is a boy.
Ladies, here the runner is.
"Dude! He don't look like one to me!" The stupid rolled and chanted.
Archibald is a draft horse and drafts aren't built to be runners.
The first letter of each line combined spells Archibald.
+1/-1 - Same with Boom's critique. +1 for spelling his name, but -1 because most of that is misleading.
You are wrong, you'll see.
I will just place this cat behind him.
I was again referring to Mandrake controlling him, but through her big cat form.
+1 Reference to Mandrake's 'cat' form, as being 'behind' him, in terms of manipulating.
We will watch him run like Nathaniel.
When you search Archibald on google a guy named Nathaniel "Tiny" Archibald comes up.
Again with Boom - I googled Nathaniel, which brings up a race horse. I thought that was where you were going. So no points added or taken.
Be warned he has rarely lost...
I, along with most, consider him a warlord, but he lost his Jackal fight.
+1
= .5/3
You need no governing.
You are already ruled.
- Mandrake brainwashed him and controls him.
+1 It states in Archi's profile that Mandrake has brainwashed him.
By love of course, but is it true?
- Fluff
-1 As Boom stated, fluff can't be directly misleading. This is.
Your ruler is off.
Ruler needs time.
Mandrake is offline. I was also pointing towards him relationship with her.
-1/+.5 - How could we have known Mandrake wasn't online when you made this stealth? That isn't a valid clue. But referring to Time, is a good clue, however, I know I use the name of the Rper in my stealths, but the rules clearly say you need three clues to the character, so .5
She fancies the powerful.
Does she fancy you?
Haha, no.
I think she hates you.
-1 Again, your fluff can't be misleading. Mandrake doesn't hate Archi.
Awrangler does so, but to you he wants.
Rope you down and cage you up.
Caged? No, I broke the lock..
Hell yes you are now free.
I understand you know, but was it unnecessary to just run away..
Fluff.
"Boy, just get your ass over here." Muttered aloud.
All I need is a word with you, dark mangled boy.
He is black which is a dark color. He is a stallion which is a boy.
Ladies, here the runner is.
"Dude! He don't look like one to me!" The stupid rolled and chanted.
Archibald is a draft horse and drafts aren't built to be runners.
The first letter of each line combined spells Archibald.
+1/-1 - Same with Boom's critique. +1 for spelling his name, but -1 because most of that is misleading.
You are wrong, you'll see.
I will just place this cat behind him.
I was again referring to Mandrake controlling him, but through her big cat form.
+1 Reference to Mandrake's 'cat' form, as being 'behind' him, in terms of manipulating.
We will watch him run like Nathaniel.
When you search Archibald on google a guy named Nathaniel "Tiny" Archibald comes up.
Again with Boom - I googled Nathaniel, which brings up a race horse. I thought that was where you were going. So no points added or taken.
Be warned he has rarely lost...
I, along with most, consider him a warlord, but he lost his Jackal fight.
+1
= .5/3
HP: 45.5
