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G o s s a m e r | P a l a d i n
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By my verdict PALADIN is the winner.
GOSSAMER -- post 1 (attack only)
[Realism]
+ 1| Attempting to fool Paladin with slow movements.
+ 1| Attack: biting at his shoulder
+ 1| Tail whip to prevent biting
[Prose]
+ 1| Easy read
+ 1| Good emotion
+ 1| Flow
PALADIN -- post 1
[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: Jumping to avoid her bite and tail whip.
+ 1| Circling Gossamer to end up with the light shining from behind him, giving her poor lighting to see.
+ 1| Attack: Bite to the crest.
+ 1| Attack: kick with front leg for her cannon
[Prose]
+ 1| Easy read
0 | Emotion - Paladin is very technical in this post, and I would like to see him be more emotionally present.
+ 1| Flow
GOSSAMER -- post 2
[Realism]
+ 1| Entering paladin's mind to know his actions and prepare
- 1| Defense: lunging forward to avoid attack. While Gossamer would naturally have a speedier build than Paladin, he also has a speed buff, making his movements either as fast or faster than her own. I don't think it's plausible for her to escape unscathed in such a tight time frame, as she had paused to allow him to commit to the attack.
+ 1| Attack: biting at his stifle.
+ 1| Attack: pawing toward his back leg.
[Prose]
+ 1| Easy read
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
PALADIN -- post 2
[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: Kicking out in response to her bite, getting a scrape to the leg.
+ 1| Attack: pivoting to bite her back.
+ 1| Attack: using his blood boiling magic
+ 1| Experience: mention of a previous spar with Boudicca.
[Prose]
+ 1| Easy Read
+ 2| Whoa damn Paladin is angry.
+ 1| Flow
GOSSAMER -- post 3
[Realism]
+ 1| Recoil from the bite.
- 1| While I appreciate the recoil, a horse is kicking upward, when the head is low as well as a leg sticking out, and she garners no other injury. This seems highly unlikely.
+ 1| Defense: pivoting away from Paladin and taking the bite to her side.
+ 1| Attack: Biting at his left side.
+ 1| Attack: Lazulli breathing fire toward Paladin.
[Prose]
+ 1| Easy Read
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
PALADIN -- post 3
[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: took bite to the bony back.
+ 1| Excellent reaction to a "no escape" dragon attack. Made me chuckle.
+ 1| Defense: tucking his head to protect himself while taking hot fire.
+ 1| Attack: stabbing at her shoulder with his horn.
+ 1| Attack: throwing his front legs toward her injured side.
[Prose]
+ 1| Easy Read
+ 2| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
GOSSAMER -- post 4
[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: pivoting to have his horn jab become a swipe.
+ 1| Attack: mercifully biting at his hips.
+ 1| Having the pain slow her movements.
[Prose]
+ 1| Easy Read
+ 2| Gossamer's saddened and merciful tone is great.
+ 1| Flow
PALADIN -- post 4
[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: sharp turn to a damaging bite.
0| Attack: biting at her is the only plausible attack I see. However, you did not clearly define where his aim is, which I assumed was somewhere near her hip because of the former figure eight analogy. You should still mention it here.
+ 1| Attack: using his blood boiling magic to escape from her side.
[Prose]
+ 1| Easy Read
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
GOSSAMER -- post 5 (defense only)
[Realism]
- 1| Defense: avoiding the bite. This is listed so vaguely that I'm not sure what she does to avoid it.
+ 1| Facing the blood boiling with a stubborn attitude this time.
[Prose]
0| Easy Read: overly vague, but not hard.
+ 1| Emotion
0| Flow: in comparison to your other posts, this one was disjointed and felt rushed.
GOSSAMER
[Bonus]
+ 1| Good use of mind reading magic.
+ 1| Good use of dragon.
+ 1| Mindfulness of your opponent's experience and build.
+ 1| Health
[Injuries]
None of note.
[Creativity]
Nothing of note.
Comments: Overall, Illu, I think you did a good job handling this fight spacially. The only thing that seemed to nag at me was the fact that Gossamer never really took injury except in the case of unavoidable magic. Compared to Paladin, she is definitely better for wear, but this doesn't seem completely plausible and led me to stretch my imagination in some cases a lot more than I would like. Still, you used your magic effectively, and I think it really paid off in the long run. Good fight!
PALADIN
[Bonus]
+ 2| Good use of blood bending magic.
+ 1| Breed comparison and analysis of Gossamer.
+ 1| Mentioning how past lands have strengthened him (Tides, Ultima).
[Injuries]
- 1| Serious burn.
[Creativity]
Nothing of note.
Comments: Jesus, Paladin is beat up. He is going to need to see a healer soon. xD Anyway, I think you handled this fight really well. You took a lot of damage, but avoided extremely crippling attacks to the legs. Burns are typically superficial and more of a problem later with infection, but you handled the pain well in this fight. I loved the allusions to his past and the emotion you showed later in this fight. Paladin is definitely fighting a monster, and I love it. Good fight!
TOTAL
Gossamer - 79
Paladin - 81
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