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Creepin' round my back stairs

Tamme the Tempting Posts: 140
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Bruised papoose // Lakota is black and blue like a bruise. "Papoose" is a North American Indian baby child, referencing 'Lakota' as a Native American tribe.
[+1] - I actually got that this was a blue roan coloration of some sort of native american based character

Viper in the mist // "A sharp mind is paired with an even sharper tongue" and she "has a way with words", mist refers to her magic where she can summon fog/mist.
[0] - I did this because the 'in the mist' clause immediately made me think of mist magic, but the viper part gave me no clue as to a personality trait

Fraternize with your allies // Double: her mate is Ktulu, of the same herd (an ally), and her brother ('frat' of fraternize) is Alleo which is a form of the Italian verb alleare which means to ally/league
[-1] - if you had broken this up, it might have worked, but as it is, it does not read as a clue at all. What it reads as is that she is chatting with those of her own social group, which everyone does anyway. If you had intended to make use of the root word 'frat', then you should have used a noun, like 'fraternity' since fraternize is more about communication.


Over all 0/3
This is a Fail from me


Messages In This Thread
Creepin' round my back stairs - by Satanic Silk - 09-14-2014, 05:14 PM
RE: Creepin' round my back stairs - by Quilyan - 09-15-2014, 08:06 PM
RE: Creepin' round my back stairs - by Tamme - 09-16-2014, 10:46 AM
RE: Creepin' round my back stairs - by Kahlua - 09-16-2014, 08:52 PM
RE: Creepin' round my back stairs - by Kahlua - 09-17-2014, 06:24 PM
RE: Creepin' round my back stairs - by Blu - 09-17-2014, 09:13 PM
RE: Creepin' round my back stairs - by Tamme - 09-17-2014, 09:43 PM

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