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#14

10-05-2012, 01:37 PM

VIKRAM

CHALLENGER -- Round 2

[Realism]
- 1| DEFENSE: Shouldering ice hard without mention of pain seems very unrealistic
+ 1| DEFENSE: Clever way to avoid getting a wing torn by ice
+ 1|Attack: Aim to bite Korra's neck

[Prose]
+ 1| Easy Read: Your posts are always easy to read, and that is very refreshing
0| Emotion: I felt very little emotion here from Vikram
+ 1| Flow

CHALLENGER -- Round 3

[Realism]
+ 1| DEFENSE: well written withdrawal of the bite attack
+ 1| DEFENSE: rearing to avoid antlers to the neck was realistic given his size
+ 1|DEFENSE: realistically took the antlers to the scales
+ 1| ATTACK: tail swing at Korra
+ 1|ATTACK: tail lash at lucuid and lloyd
+ 1|ATTACK: attempting to careen through Cinne

[Prose]
+ 1| Easy Read
+ 1| Emotion - much better emotion from Vikram
+ 1| Flow

CHALLENGER

[Bonus]
+ 1| Firemagic use
+ 1| Excellent use of physical descriptions

[Injuries]
+ 1| Remarkably unscathed

[Creativity]
+ 1| Very easy to read style with consistent, great flow

Comments: Very clear and well written as usual, but not enough emotion for such a chaotic battle.

TOTAL
Challenger - 28