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CHALLENGER -- Round 2

[Realism]
+ 1| ATTACK: Aimed to pierce Psyche's side

[Prose]
+ 1| Easy Read
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow

CHALLENGER -- Round 3

[Realism]
+ 1| DEFENSE: Drawing Psyche into the woods
+ 1| ATTACK: Kicking out after stopping suddenly
+ 1| ATTACK: Head turn to scrape her side

[Prose]
+ 1| Easy Read - very, very easy to read which was welcomed!
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow

CHALLENGER -- Round 4

[Realism]
+ 1| DEFENSE: taking kick to lower chest instead of in the middle
+ 1| ATTACK: horn to the leg

[Prose]
+ 1| Easy Read
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow

CHALLENGER -- Round 5 (defense only)

[Realism]
+ 1| Allowing Psyche to run off after piercing her side

[Prose]
+ 1| Easy Read
0| Emotion - not much in the way of his thoughts or feelings on the aftermath of the battle
+ 1| Flow


CHALLENGER

[Bonus]
+ 1| Very realistically uninjured
+ 1| Nice use of the forest to aide him

[Creativity]
+ 1| Very consistent, easy to read style.

Comments: I would focus on really connecting to the emotions of your character as well as focusing more on the details of the surroundings.

TOTAL
Challenger - 21





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