Coward. YOU'VE GOT THE WORLD ON ITS KNEES YOU'RE TAKING ALL THAT YOU PLEASE |
Spelling/grammar/prose - Again, I love how you write Arah and I really enjoyed reading this post. You've got a lovely flowing writing style and I didn't find anything particularly jarring in it.
I noticed another couple of typos, but again nothing major. Just try to cut as many of them out as possible to avoid deductions for prose/readability :D
'Her ivory coat because stained by the crimson red' - I guess this should have been 'becomes' not 'because'?
'Arah's nose packs up the scent of blood' - Picks up
'Now it is truly to late to back out' - Too late
Emotion - I loved it again, you wrote her emotions really well and I definitely don't see any issues here! :) I especially enjoy the bond between her and Wynter, and the fact she's fighting because of her dead children.
Attacks - I liked the idea behind her attack, spinning around and rearing to try and hit his hocks. Be careful with sentences like these though: 'her petite figure stopping once she is facing the stag's rear'. This could be taken as PP as you're assuming she is able to move around and face his rear without giving him chance to react. Make sure you mention 'attempt' even if it's just a movement and not an attack, just to make sure the judge can't deduct for GM/PP c:
Like I say though, the attack itself was good and well-written. I love strikes to the joints, they're very effective if they hit. I liked the balance of your attacks too, one from Arah and one from her companion. That's definitely better than risking overmoving by throwing in attacks with just the character themselves.
Damage taken - You did well taking the damage I thought. With Vol's high damage stat, for a 2 dice roll you probably want to be taking some light-ish bruising or cuts. You described the pain well, and I think you took a good amount of damage considering the roll.
Be careful here, though: 'blood pools in the grooves made by his teeth until they fill and spill over. Her ivory coat because stained by the crimson red' - Bear in mind that horse teeth are blunt, not sharp. It would be very unlikely that Vol's teeth would make her bleed, more likely they'd just leave some decent bruising.
Other - I liked how she mentioned their differing weights and used that to her advantage to twirl around him, it was a good use of the surroundings as well!
[ you can't stray from what you are, you're the closest thing to hell i've seen so far ]
[ use of force/magic on him is permitted aside from death/maiming ]