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[Judge] Come Forth into the Storm and Rout [Faelene]

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T o l i o | F a e l e n e
- - - - -
By my verdict TOLIO is the winner.

TOLIO -- post 1 (attack only)

[Realism]
+ 1| Attack: charge
+ 1| Attack: horn to chest
+ 1| Attack: bite to foreleg

[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
+ 1| Easy read

FAELENE -- post 1

[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: dodges to the right to avoid charge
- 1| Defense: no mention of the horn
- 1| Defense: no mention of the bite
+ 1| Attack: bite at neck
+ 1| Attack: stomp at legs

[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
+ 1| Easy read

TOLIO -- post 2

[Realism]
- 1| Defense: moves hooves from her stomp – if this all happened as fast as it seems to and he is sliding/had aimed to collide into her meaning he’s still moving forward, I don’t see how he could lift his forelegs up. All his balance is on those forelegs in his sliding position.
+ 1| Defense: bite to neck
+ 1| Attack: bucking

[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
+ 1| Easy read

FAELENE -- post 2

[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: buck glances
+ 1| Attack: feint
+ 1| Attack: buck

[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
+ 1| Easy read

TOLIO -- post 3 (defense only)

[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: lowers horn at feint
+ 1| Defense: clipped by buck


TOLIO

[Bonus]
+ 1| Breed
+ 1| Surroundings

[Injuries]
None.

[Creativity]
None.

Comments: You have a very strong grasp on fighting! I was really appreciative of how well you described your character’s positioning and attacks/defense, making everything very easy to understand. I very much enjoyed your emotion you displayed in every post, although I think you could do more as I never felt truly wrapped up or awed. I have little to say, I’d love to see more fights from you.

FAELENE

[Bonus]
+ 1| Breed
+ 1| Health

[Injuries]
None.

[Creativity]
None.

Comments: A very close fight, you two are very well matched with your writing and fighting mechanics. Similarly you do well with placing your character and attacks/defenses and knowing timing and positioning. Same as Tolio I enjoyed the emotion you displayed but would have liked even more. I did see you try to use the surroundings a bit, but they were so minor and brief it wasn’t quite enough. Again can’t wait to see more fights from you.

TOTAL
TOLIO - 64
FAELENE - 62


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RE: [Judge] Come Forth into the Storm and Rout [Faelene] - by Official - 12-17-2012, 07:26 PM

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