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[ Judge ] Bodies to the test

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L a c e | A z z u e n
- - - - -
By my verdict AZZUEN is the winner.

LACE -- post 1 (attack only)

[Realism]
+ 1| Attack: rear

[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Easy read
+ 1| Flow

AZZUEN -- post 1

[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: avoid rear
+ 1| Attack: wing distraction
+ 1| Attack: spear
+ 1| Attack: wing off-balance
- 1| Powerplay: “The dark steed now used the bony edge of his wing to wrap around the underside of lace’s neck.” – you’re assuming too much of their positioning and trapping Lace into this maneuver. Remember you can only aim/attempt/hope for actions on another character.

[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Easy read
+ 1| Flow

LACE -- post 2

[Realism]
- 1| Defense: no mention of wing distraction
+ 1| Defense: ribs hit by spear
+ 1| Defense: back away from wing
- 1| Attack: shin scraping – if you’re backing up you wouldn’t be able to utilize your front hooves. Even if you did lift them higher than normal there’d be no power behind them as you’re using your front end to push you back.
+ 1| Attack: wing nip
+ 1| Attack: dragon to rump

[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Easy read
+ 1| Flow

AZZUEN -- post 2

[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: coronet stepped on
+ 1| Attack: hoof flailing
+ 1| Defense: wing bite
+ 1| Defense: dragon bites
+ 1| Attack: repel magic
+ 1| Attack: buck

[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Easy read
+ 1| Flow

LACE -- post 3 (defense only)

[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: struck cannon
+ 1| Defense: Fajira tossed into sky
- 1| Defense: leaping forward/left – you running into Azzuen would likely hurt him as well, which attacks are not permitted in this post, and I’m not understanding how you would have avoided the kick? If you land so Azzuen is on your right side, the kick would have gotten you at some point on your right ribs/flanks. It doesn’t make sense you’d be side by side with Azzuen when he did 2 points of turning to angle away, and neither can you be out of reach of the kick, but close enough to run into Azzuen when you landed. I’m just confused and it doesn’t seem to make sense for the situation.


LACE

[Bonus]
+ 1| Breed
+ 1| Health - tied

[Injuries]
None.

[Creativity]
None.

Comments: You did a really fantastic job, I loved the emotion in this post and how well you used your companion, even with the bond block. Your biggest point deductions were some attacks/defenses that didn’t seem physically realistic, so focus most on that and don’t forget to include surroundings!

AZZUEN

[Bonus]
+ 1| Breed
+ 1| Health - tied

[Injuries]
None.

[Creativity]
+ 1| Wing choke hold was neat!

Comments: This was a great fight, I definitely get a good sense of Azzuen’s military mind, but you still manage to inject motive and emotions in. You had some great attacks and defense reactions, but don’t forget your surroundings next time!

TOTAL
LACE - 62
AZZUEN - 68


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Messages In This Thread
[ Judge ] Bodies to the test - by Ázzuen - 12-07-2012, 10:36 PM
RE: Bodies to the test - by Lace - 12-08-2012, 07:57 AM
RE: Bodies to the test - by Ázzuen - 12-08-2012, 09:07 PM
RE: Bodies to the test - by Lace - 12-25-2012, 06:36 AM
RE: Bodies to the test - by Ázzuen - 12-27-2012, 11:05 PM
RE: Bodies to the test - by Lace - 12-28-2012, 06:10 AM
RE: [ Judge ] Bodies to the test - by Official - 01-06-2013, 12:12 AM
RE: [ Judge ] Bodies to the test - by Official - 01-06-2013, 04:36 PM

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