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12-19-2013, 04:09 PM
- - - - - By my verdict HISTE is the winner. Histe received 1 VP. Histe -- post 1 (attack only) [Realism] + 1| Attack: Foreleg attack. + 1| Attack: Bite. [Prose] + 1| Emotion. + 1| Flow. + 1| Easy Read. Circuta -- post 1 [Realism] + 1| Injury: Taking the bite to her chest. - 1| Injury: You already said that she moved backwards to avoid Histe's legs - that attack occurred before her bite, but you're responding to it as if it happened after. + 1| Attack: Bites towards Histe's nose 0| Attack: Striking out towards Histe's shoulder. Not only would she have to raise herself more than 'a minuscule amount off the ground', but there's no indication of which shoulder she's aiming for, or if it's both. [Prose] + 1| Emotion. 0| Flow: The timing of injuries was off. + 1| Easy Read. Histe -- post 2 [Realism] + 1| Injury: Bite to her nose. 0| Injury: No mention of pain from Circuta's rear + 1| Attack: Turning to the side and cow-kicking toward's Circuta's legs. + 1| Attack: Acid rain! [Prose] + 1| Emotion. Haha. She's so creepy. :P + 1| Flow. + 1| Easy Read. Circuta -- post 2 [Realism] + 1| Injury: Histe's kick. + 1| Injury: Acid rain! + 1| Defense: Pretending to give up. + 1| Attack: Using her hooves to try and attack Merikh's head. + 1| Attack: Horn attack towards Merikh. [Prose] + 1| Emotion. + 1| Flow. + 1| Easy Read. Histe -- post 3 [Realism] + 1| Injury: Attack on Merikh's paw. + 1| Injury: Horn attack at Merikh. - 1| Borderline PP: ...releasing his paralyzing ability on the mare who had just attacked him 0| Attack: Histe running towards Circuta.: no mention of direction. [Prose] + 1| Emotion. + 1| Flow. + 1| Easy Read. Circuta -- post 3 [Realism] + 1| Injury: Being paralyzed. + 1| Injury: Being knocked over by Histe. [Prose] + 1| Emotion. + 1| Flow. + 1| Easy Read. CHALLENGER -- post 5 (defense only) [Realism] + 1| Injury: Owe. Knocking another horse over. Histe [Bonus] + 1| Breed Comparison. + 1| Surroundings. [Injuries] + 1| Least Injured. [Creativity] + 1| SHE IS SO CREEPY. I like how you really intertwined her abilities, and her personality. Comments: HGGGG. I wouldn't want to meet Histe in a dark alley...or...anywhere! Really great spar. Circuta [Bonus] + 1| Breed Comparison. + 1| Surroundings. [Injuries] -- [Creativity] + 1| I loved reading Circuta - how she viewed Histe and Merikh, and her thoughts about the Asylum. Comments: Really great job. I especially liked how true you stayed to her injuries during the spar. TOTAL Histe- 70 Circuta- 69 |
image credit to Paulo Brandão
