Deimos | AndyxArab | 9.5VP
Strength: 5 + 1 = 6
Speed: 4 + 1 = 5
Agility: 7
Endurance: 6 + 1 = 7
Offense Item: 0
Defense Item: 0
Amulet: 3
Magic: 1
Companion: 0
HP: 29 x2 = 58

Defense: 9.5
Attack: 7 (Includes +2 for warrior)
Damage: 6.5

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Artemis | Irish Draught Cross | 0 VP
Strength: 9
Speed: 3
Agility: 5
Endurance: 6
Offense Item: 0
Defense Item: 0
Amulet: 0
Magic: 0
Companion: 0
Total HP = 46

Defense: 7
Attack: 5 (+2 added for being a warrior)
Damage: 7



First time stat rolling battle - let me know if I've erred in some way! :D

Character Name: Deimos
Attack Number: (1/3)
Attack: 1d20 rolled for a total of: 11 (11) + 7 (character's attack stat)
Damage: 1d6 rolled for a total of: 1 (1) + 6.5 (character's damage stat)

If Attack > than opponent defense, attack hits.
If d20 = 1, critical miss: take 1/2(damage) to yourself
If d20 = 20, critical hit: opponent takes 6 + damage

18 > Artemis' defense of 7, so the attack HITS.
Artemis takes 7.5 points of damage from Deimos.

Deimos HP: 58
Artemis HP: 46-7.5= 38.5

CORRECTED STATS
Deimos and Artemis were using the old version of the battle stat formula, this is adjusted with the new version.

Artemis | Irish Draught Cross| 1VP
Strength: 9
Speed: 3
Agility: 5
Endurance: 6
Offense Item: 0
Defense Item: 0
Amulet: 0
Magic: 0
Companion: 0
HP: 23 x 2 = 46

Defense: 7
Attack: 5.5
Damage: 7

Deimos | Andalusian x Arabian | 9.5VP
Strength: 5+1= 6
Speed: 4+1= 5
Agility: 7
Endurance: 6+1= 7
Offense Item: 0
Defense Item: 0
Amulet: 3
Magic: 1
Companion: 0
HP: 29 x 2 = 58

Defense: 8.5
Attack: 6
Damage: 6

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Character Name: Deimos
Attack Number: (1/3)
Attack: 1d20 rolled for a total of: 11 (11) + 6 (character's attack stat)
Damage: 1d6 rolled for a total of: 1 (1) + 6 (character's damage stat)

17 > Artemis' defense of 7, so the attack HITS.
Artemis takes 7 points of damage from Deimos.

Deimos HP: 58
Artemis HP: 46-7= 39

Character Name: Artemis
Attack Number: (1/3)
Attack: 1d20 rolled for a total of: 5 (5) + 5.5 (character's attack stat)
Damage: 1d6 rolled for a total of: 2 (2) + 7 (character's damage stat)

If Attack > than opponent defense, attack hits.
If d20 = 1, critical miss: take 1/2(damage) to yourself
If d20 = 20, critical hit: opponent takes 6 + damage

17 > Deimos' defense of 8.5, so the attack HITS.
Deimos takes 9 points of damage from Artemis.

Deimos HP: 58-9= 49
Artemis HP: 38.5

Character Name: Deimos
Attack Number: (2/3)
Attack: 1d20 rolled for a total of: 15 (15) + 6 (character's attack stat)
Damage: 1d6 rolled for a total of: 2 (2) + 6 (character's damage stat)

If Attack > than opponent defense, attack hits.
If d20 = 1, critical miss: take 1/2(damage) to yourself
If d20 = 20, critical hit: opponent takes 6 + damage

21 > Artemis' defense of 7, so the attack HITS.
Artemis takes 8 points of damage from Demos.

Demos HP: 49
Artemis HP: 38.5-8= 30.5

Character Name: Artemis
Attack Number: (2/3)
Attack: 1d20 rolled for a total of: 14 (14) + 5.5 (character's attack stat)
Damage: 1d6 rolled for a total of: 1 (1) + 7 (character's damage stat)

If Attack > than opponent defense, attack hits.
If d20 = 1, critical miss: take 1/2(damage) to yourself
If d20 = 20, critical hit: opponent takes 6 + damage

19.5 > Deimos' defense of 8.5, so the attack HITS.
Deimos takes 8 points of damage from Artemis.

Deimos HP: 49-8= 41
Artemis HP: 30.5

Character Name: Deimos
Attack Number: 3/3
Attack: 1d20 rolled for a total of: 8 (8) + 6 (character's attack stat)
Damage: 1d6 rolled for a total of: 3 (3) + 6 (character's damage stat)

If Attack > than opponent defense, attack hits.
If d20 = 1, critical miss: take 1/2(damage) to yourself
If d20 = 20, critical hit: opponent takes 6 + damage

14 > Artemis' defense of 7, so the attack HITS.
Artemis takes 9 points of damage from Deimos.

Deimos HP: 41
Artemis HP: 30.5 - 9 = 21.5

Character Name: Artemis
Attack Number: (3/3)
Attack: 1d20 rolled for a total of: 12 (12) + 5.5 (character's attack stat)
Damage: 1d6 rolled for a total of: 6 (6) + 7 (character's damage stat)

If Attack > than opponent defense, attack hits.
If d20 = 1, critical miss: take 1/2(damage) to yourself
If d20 = 20, critical hit: opponent takes 6 + damage

17.5 > Deimos' defense of 8.5, so the attack HITS.
Deimos takes 13 points of damage from Artemis.

Deimos HP: 41-13= 28
Artemis HP: 21.5

I made an error when copying formatting for the HP from a post before the correct stats (she went from a 39 to a 38.5 near the top of this thread). Artemis has a +.5 to her final hp.

Deimos HP = 28
Artemis HP = 22

DEIMOS
Realism [+3]
Overall you have a good mind for the reality of attacks, defenses and injuries, but it never seemed that things happened simultaneously. Instead everything occurred in order one after another, when at times it would have been most realistic and smooth for things to happen, if perhaps not simultaneously, very quickly back to back, which I didn’t read here.

The scenery was mostly left out, although you did mention the heat of Tallsun when the setting was Birdsong.

I really enjoyed how well you remembered your injuries throughout the fight and how you used your costume constantly though!


Emotion [+2]
I definitely got a strong sense of Deimos wanting to kill things, and certainly enjoyed his endless irritation at the costume which continually came into play every post, through you or your opponent; it left me laughing. So I wanted things to die, and was happy about it.


Prose [+4]
You are simply a lovely writer and have excellent flow and imagery.


Readability [+2]
Everything was clear.


Finally tally: 28+11 = 39 HP


ARTEMIS
Realism [-2]
Although I think you played your attacks and defenses well, I similarly felt a loss of correct timing and flow between them at times.

I especially saw that you didn’t have your character impacted by your injuries (I did notice you mention it in the last post though!) and that at times you took too much damage (deep gash from Deimos’ first attack), which especially should have affected you. That or you did not consider the impacts of the damage on your character’s reactions - such as after Deimos’ death magic, which the damage roll was very low so you took appropriate injury, but feeling death however brief and light most likely would have made her more wary of touching him, where as she went up to his face to grab his costume and kick him, which also put her in perfect range of his horn. However I did see she hesitated in memory of the death feeling, but at the very end after she’d already done everything.

Similarly you left out much of the scenery and your costume, which really could have played better into your score had you utilized it more.

I certainly saw improvement as the fight progressed though, so I believe with more exposure to fighting you will continue to excel!


Emotion [-1]
I caught brief glimpses of the mention of emotion, such as her original frustration at Tharos and the costume, but I was never shown it. Remember that fights are often very emotionally chaotic events that can really impact a character and a reader. You did get into more emotion in your last post, such as the memory of her mother, but I would love to have seen more.


Prose [+2]
You started off really strong with your writing, having great organization, flow and interesting imagery. However as the fight progressed it began to feel more rushed and scattered, although I did not notice anything significantly wrong with it in terms of typo or grammar, just that it was not as strong as before.


Readability [+2]
Easy to read.


Finally tally: 22+1 = 23 HP