the Rift


The Tenth Month [October to Confutatis]

Confutatis the World Eater Posts: 179
Hidden Account atk: 5 | def: 8.5 | dam: 5.5
Mare :: Equine :: 16.2hh :: 9 HP: 65 | Buff: NOVICE
Mongrel :: Common Kitsune :: Dark Illusions wanda
#1
The tenth term,
Ensnared by a trepan,

Watch!
The shadows cloak us,
And the night is long,

I bid you return to my flank,
As is your rightful place,
Blood of my blood.

Let this be our eye-for-an-eye.

Confutatis the World Eater Posts: 179
Hidden Account atk: 5 | def: 8.5 | dam: 5.5
Mare :: Equine :: 16.2hh :: 9 HP: 65 | Buff: NOVICE
Mongrel :: Common Kitsune :: Dark Illusions wanda
#2
OCTOBER was sought.

The Tenth Month
October is the tenth month of the year.
The tenth term
The same as above.
Ensnared by a trepan,
Captured by a capturer- basically a hint that the horse she was seeking was stolen.

Watch!
The shadows cloak us,
October is black.
And the night is long,

I bid you return to my flank,
As is your rightful place,
Blood of my blood.
October is Confutatis' half-sister through the sire Oblivion.

Let this be our eye-for-an-eye.
October helped Confutatis escape (well, convinced her) when she was imprisoned by Kipp- now Confutatis does the same for her.

Rayo the Reindeer Posts: 18
Hidden Account
Mare :: Other :: 16.2 hh :: 21
Rayo
#3
I PASS this.

The tenth term
October is the tenth month of the year.
+1 | Pass.

Ensnared by a trepan,
Captured by a capturer- basically a hint that the horse she was seeking was stolen.
+1 | Pass.

Watch!
The shadows cloak us,
October is black.
+1 | Pass.

And the night is long,

I bid you return to my flank,
As is your rightful place,
Blood of my blood.
October is Confutatis' half-sister through the sire Oblivion.
+1 | Pass - but I feel that you could have done more with this section.

Let this be our eye-for-an-eye.
October helped Confutatis escape (well, convinced her) when she was imprisoned by Kipp- now Confutatis does the same for her.
+1 | Pass.

I felt that this was a really well-done stealth, and I had my suspicions about who it was for. However, I also think that there were a few small moments where you sort of lost the point a bit, or got a bit superfluous. With that being said, I don't feel that this detracted from the stealth at all, but I might be aware of it in the future.

Whit Posts: 2
OOC Account
Filly :: Other :: 5'7" :: 28
Whit
#4
I pass this, for the same reasons Rayo outlined above.


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