the Rift


Either victory, or else a grave [Graveyard Champ]

Deimos the Reaper Posts: 527
Deceased atk: 7.0 | def: 12 | dam: 6.5
Stallion :: Unicorn :: 16.1 :: 7 HP: 72.5 | Buff: NUMB
Heather
#1


Ominous and forbidding, the room he’d managed to become sequestered within held a disturbing, sinister atmosphere to it – and had he been the one concocting and orchestrating such a manifestation, he likely wouldn’t feel so unnerved. The Reaper should have felt at home within the disturbing machinations, breathing in the nefarious arts and the dubious intentions, piercing the malevolent air with his own potent persecution. Instead, an eerie feeling crept up his spine, the notion of being watched, of shadows shifting beneath the blinking, blinding lights, the piercing blades glistening from foreign, metallic tables. He dealt and wielded death, the quiet, unholy, lethal demise, but this strange expanse didn’t offer the solitude of a timely tomb, and only invoked sentiments of torture, scourges, torment and agony. Unsettling and agitating, he attempted to consume the moments of this entrapment by observing the quivering rays of luminescence flashing and flickering, enlightening dismal shadows before tarnishing them back to the Stygian abyss. An aperture further down the length of the threshold seemed to offer no divine sentiments either; barbaric screams and shouts echoed off the hollowed chambers, and he attempted to ignore the unearthly din pervading from its halls.

Something ensnared his attention, bristling along another corner, and he attempted to follow the swift motion, to no avail. Only a shift of fabric, like the tails of an ivory coat, before it lapsed into the murky ducts of corners and walls, and the Lord yearned to exploit the mystery, the enigma, to distort meaning from this ridiculous place. Another presence lurked within the darkness, and the lights failed to provide the necessary ambience to fully decipher the creature. Was it the one he’d seen moments ago, entrenched in nefarious, cackling design? Should he create his own, unfurl and uncurl his dangerous armaments, his fiendish munitions, his callous disregard, to remove one more demon from the arches of this bizarre, uncanny realm?

Without considering the true identity of the figure, the monster advanced. He’d changed from his previous garments, no longer an embodiment of his title, currently woven into a strange creature painted in crimson and sable, plastic horned, maw elongated into a plastic muzzle resembling some doglike cretin (another Huyana creation, but at least this one could be taken off with a simple string detachment). Chains rattled as he moved beneath the layers of fabric, swift and strong, not as hampered or hindered from his prior shroud, content to find his hooves striking upon the floor with enough traction to enable his necessary speed. The opposing creature, Deimos noted as he neared, appeared to be of the same height as he, a similar build and construction – so he needed to embody opportunity where he saw fit.

He twisted towards the shadowy figure’s right, and quickly proceeding, lowered his horn towards the other’s shoulder. Would a laceration, a puncture, a deep, loathsome gash cause the beast to sway, to quiver, to be chased off into the abyss? Would success and triumph mean there’d be a moment to escape this uncanny maelstrom, where even the darkest depths of his soul wondered, pondered, rustled and discomposed? But, despite these thoughts, as he was drawn into the depths of desecration, as he fumbled for assault and sieges, the Reaper’s eyes widened, shock and surprise registering along his features for the briefest of moments. He was attacking his Weaver, Crowley, and failed to notice (distracted and perturbed), the ambling scientist roaming closer.

[@[Crowley]
574 words. Graveyard Champ spar. 1/3 + 0/1 defense.
Deimos is dressed as Houndoom. Fake dog muzzle. Black and red fabric. Plastic horns on head. Chains along lower legs.
Believing the appearance of the Crowley to be the shirking, scuttling scientist, Deimos advances to ward off his new enemy. He proceeds towards Crowley’s right shoulder, lowering his horn to pierce flesh. Only thereafter does he register shock and surprise when it turns out to be Crowley. He doesn’t see the scientist getting closer.]





Crowley Posts: 166
Outcast atk: 4.5 | def: 8.5 | dam: 5.5
Stallion :: Unicorn :: 16.2 :: 12 HP: 62.5 | Buff: NOVICE
Talbot :: Common Hellhound :: Acid & Name? :: Caracal :: None Dingo
#2

We build cathedrals to our pain
Establish monuments to attain



Apparently, a mammal such as Crowley was not often gifted with the ability to speak nor the even more precious gift of horns on his head in this place. Where he was, he did not know, but he had seen his fair share of strange sights during his short stay. His captors had stood upright, looking and acting much akin to primates as they milled about outside of his enclosure. All that Crowley could remember was darkness and then a heavy thud on the ground as he hit it, and in the next moment, he was waking up in an all too bright enclosure. Worry had plagued the Weaver, but it was not appointed to only himself, but to the welfare of Talbot as well. Thankfully, with a quick glance around the room, he spotted the horned pup just as he began to wake with a groan.

"Smells bad," the hound commented as he came to, wrinkling his nose in a disgruntled manner as he pushed himself up to his feet and shook himself off. Indeed, this place reeked of unknown substances strong enough to give the bonded pair a sharp, splitting headache, but such a thing was the least of their worries at this moment. Where they were, how they had gotten here, who had taken them, why, how they were going to get out, and what in Goddess' name were they wearing were among the first things they needed to assess. Talbot looked out of this world in his apparel, a grey body suit that resembled machinery, complete with a headdress that bore a small tank-like appendage on either end. Crowley was covered in simple white cloth, and draped over it was a heavy brown material that connected across his chest and around his forearms to stay in place. The cloak was also adorned with a hood which lay back uselessly due to his angled horns. To top it off, a leather belt was placed just in front of his flanks, making him all the more uncomfortable.

No matter how ridiculous they looked, their focus was on the task at hand; despite how hard they pushed, kicked, pulled and bit at the cold metal bars, they would not give, assuring that they were secured firmly within their barren prison. However, as luck would have it, one primate look-alike strode past at one point, the ring-cling-clanging of keys catching the Weaver's attention almost immediately. With a mischievous grin, the brindle conjured the magic coursing throughout his veins, casting a bit of bad luck towards the unsuspecting dolt. Almost immediately after, the poor man slipped upon the tile he had just been walking upon, apparently not seeing the small, inconspicuous puddle of water that seemed to have appeared out of nowhere... The sound of his skull hitting the floor was admittedly unpleasant, causing both hound and stallion to cringe, but at least they were a step closer to freedom.

It took some time and patience, but eventually, Talbot was able to pull the man's keys loose from his pocket with the use of his spaded tail before wedging a paw beneath the door and pulling them in. With some trial and error, Crowley was able to find the correct key and get it turned fully within its lock, and with a single click, the pair made their grand escape.

Going room to room, they were ever careful to avoid the strange two-legged creatures that populated the building, but upon entering one seemingly harmless(albeit dark) room, they were proved terribly wrong. Upon stepping foot in, the door slammed shut behind them to prevent escape, and a figure as massive as Crowley came lunging straight at them. Unprepared for such a swift attack, all that the brindle could do was rush forward in an attempt to dodge the behemoth, which he figured out to be Deimos all too late.

The harbinger of Death was successful in plunging his horn straight into his left shoulder, causing a startled, agonizing scream to leave his lips as it cut through skin, flesh, then muscle. Due to his motion, it didn't cut quite as deeply as it could have, and made more or less of an ugly, jagged cut that began to bleed instantaneously, the pain unlike any Crowley had ever felt before. Out of instinct more than tactics, the Weaver swung and twisted his head to the left in an attempt to drive his Lord away, dancing to the right and away from the spear-like horn until he could feel it dislodge. Talbot was the one to attack at that moment, sounding an enraged snarl as he ran at the Reaper's right side, leaping up with teeth poised to sink into his tender forearm.

[800 words. 1/3 attacks. Crowley is Obi Wan Kenobi, and Talbot is dressed like this. ;D]

"Talk talk talk"


Freedom from all of the scars and the sins
Lest we drown in the darkness within

Deimos the Reaper Posts: 527
Deceased atk: 7.0 | def: 12 | dam: 6.5
Stallion :: Unicorn :: 16.1 :: 7 HP: 72.5 | Buff: NUMB
Heather
#3


Like a cornered beast in a cage, Deimos had unleashed an attack upon a fellow companion, a patriot, a comrade, and nearly felt the sting of humiliation sear into his skin. Had this been a normal spar, wallowing in their icy valley, christened by education, instruction, methods and enhancements, he wouldn’t allow the streak of guilt to wash over him, the uncertainty, or the incited rage that had emboldened him to assail the Weaver. Locked in this strange, unearthly oubliette, he’d unraveled into ferocity, into feral barbarity, and even now, in the midst of dungeons and liberation, where another door could open wide to the stars, to the sky, to the threshold of freedom, he wondered how to enact further damage upon the other behemoth. What if this was an illusion, a hallucination, brought on by the bizarre atmosphere, drugging and dragging him into delusions? What if Crowley was another cretin blocking his path to release and salvation? What if this was a test, an opportunity, he could potentially waste, holding back because he knew his newfound opponent? Would he forgive himself for any of these pending ages, stuck and mired to the root of conviction, of creed, of loyalty or paranoia, suspicion, specious interludes and disappearing openings?

Conflicted, the Reaper attempted to wind his frame away from the Weaver as he swung his head towards the reticent’s frame, swerving towards the left in some wavering haze. He’d forgotten Crowley’s companion, the hellhound, and as it strove towards his right side, a blinding anomaly of silver and further peculiar accouterments, he aimed to hasten over the floor once more, to the left, at a distance, apart from the visions, mirages, and chimeras. The creature still ensnared its teeth over his right shoulder, biting and digging into flesh, and the searing pain caused him to clench his jaw, shake away the canine with several agitated convulsions of his undulating frame, and shirk into the confines of shadow to conspire.

Then, the scientist reappeared.

Slowed down by the raw, bleedng injury, he had no opportunity to dance away from the strange beast with two legs, layered in ivory cloth. A sharp prick laced into his left hind, and almost instantly he felt the weary effects of the poison injected into his skin – the world became a blur, winding around him, slow, laborious, arduous, his head heavy, and he stumbled towards a silver table, fixed and covered with pointed utensils, razor, serrated edges. Amidst the abnormal realm, he grew frustrated, vexed, incensed, enraged, wishing for annihilation, yearning for a twist in the maelstrom, in the schism, in persecution and entropy. The circumstances were overwhelming: to be lost in the tirade of delirium, assaults and wounds, and the wicked machinations of his infernal mind only hastened the glory of a fatal blow, of a hedonistic demise delivered to his enemies.

The table sparked his Machiavellian schemes, and once he’d regained his stance, he swiftly allowed the plot to develop. Using his left side, he sculpted as much power as he could muster, favoring his right front, plowing into the light surface, watching as it reeled on squeaky, fragile wheels towards Crowley’s frame, to the right, where he’d last seen him flee. Would he ghost and dance away, would he never see it coming in the reeling shadows and fettering light?. Would it strike the abomination of his friend? Would the sharpened instruments fly towards the heathen and his dog? What if it wasn’t enough?

The culminating answer flowed through his veins, hastened by the dark arts, by the loathing, by the contempt of these molten, infuriating circumstances, and his necromancy pulsed amongst the runes of his frame, tirelessly, relentlessly fueled by the weight of animosity. It followed the table in a feverish coil, surrounded and pervaded, brewed and built as he stood in the corner of the room, longing to brutalize, torture, maim and maul just as he’d been torn asunder. He didn’t forget the scientist either, aiming one more hasty assault of magic towards the creeping specter, so that, maybe, if this were the true Crowley, he wouldn’t be poisoned as the Reaper had been.


[689 words. Graveyard Champ spar. 2/3 + 0/1 defense.
Talbot manages to bite Deimos’s right shoulder, causing searing pain and bleeding flesh. He shakes the dog off and goes towards the left, where the scientist manages to plunge his needle into his left hind. Groggy, Deimos stumbles towards a silver table, and using his left side to plow into it, sends it towards the right side of Crowley’s frame. At the same time, he allows a heavy dose of his deadly magic to follow after the table, aimed towards Crowley, and some amount towards the scientist lurking nearby.]





Crowley Posts: 166
Outcast atk: 4.5 | def: 8.5 | dam: 5.5
Stallion :: Unicorn :: 16.2 :: 12 HP: 62.5 | Buff: NOVICE
Talbot :: Common Hellhound :: Acid & Name? :: Caracal :: None Dingo
#4

We build cathedrals to our pain
Establish monuments to attain



Much to his dismay, his attempted swing towards the dark Lord was in vain, for they sliced through nothing but air. Jerking his head back around to face forward, the brindle dropped his hindquarters to some degree to aid him in stopping, but the tile flooring was foreign to his hooves and was more slick than anything he had ever walked before. When he did stop several feet later, a sharp snort of utter annoyance left his nostrils as the Weaver straightened himself back out. His shoulder throbbed painfully, as though Deimos were lodging his horn within it, pulling it out, and then repeating the action every few seconds.

Speaking of the Reaper...

When Crowley recognized the feral growl that could only be Talbot's, he snapped his gaze to the hound and the other behemoth just in time to watch his partner successfully sink his teeth into a black shoulder. Golden eyes widened as he watched the scene unfold; parting his mouth, Crowley was about to call the hound off and demand that he stand down, but he was dislodged from the Lord's hide with little difficulty.

Back on the ground just seconds later, Talbot gave a shake of his head and exchanged a short look with his master. Through the invisible line of their bond, the horned pup could feel that Crowley didn't wish for him to give chase to the Reaper. In Crowley's mind, this had all just been one big mistake, neither of them intending to purposefully bring harm to the other. Already knowing one another, they could put their heads together and come up with a scheme that would get them out of here alive - but a sudden crash of metallic cut his thought short.

Barreling towards him was a table set upon wheels, and on top of it was an impressive collection of sharp instruments ranging from scapels, needles, knives, and even a saw or two. Beneath the flickering lights, their deadly gleam was intensified, drawing closer and closer with every blink of the flourescent bulbs. Seeing as his previous thought of working together with Deimos was terribly flawed, Crowley dug his hind hooves into the flooring, fighting for purchase and cursing himself for standing still for so long in this strange place. Even if Deimos hadn't continued his attack, it was a foolish move.

Unable to get a solid grip, the table crashed full force into Crowley's left haunch with nearly enough force to completely send his feet out from under him. Meeting the end of their ride, the various sharps flew from the table, some hitting the floor and sliding across the slick tile in a deadly mess, while others found a new home right in the Weaver's hide. A terrible, agonized scream broke from his jaws as he carried himself forward, bucking and kicking out in a fit of rage and pain, but it did little to dislodge the knife settled just behind his flank. If anything, it only magnified the pain and his wild movement almost sent him straight to the floor; but, luckily, it had aided him in moving just in time out of the way of Deimos' deadly magic.

Turning to face the death dealer, Crowley caught a glimpse of one of the strange two-legged creatures just as it scuttled away from Deimos, but his full attention stayed on that of the other stallion standing in the corner of the room. Taking advantage of the Reaper's ill placement, the brindle pushed himself onwards to close the short distance between them, straining his eyes against the incessantly flickering lights. Right now, it didn't matter if Deimos was his Lord and leader or not; he was in very real danger, and now was no time to try and talk the steed out of his attack.

When the distance seemed right, Crowley turned his body abruptly to the left, hoping the tile would do as he thought it would and keep him coming at the Reaper. Though he struggled to keep himself standing in those last few feet, his aim was to plow his entire mass right into Deimos' side, unaware that his Lord had just been laced with powerful poison. At this same time, Talbot came dashing forward from where he had been bitten Deimos earlier, a feral snarl squeezing from between bared teeth as he went around Crowley and made haste for Deimo's front, claws clicking against the floor as he pushed himself up and off of it, aiming to close his acid-rittled teeth somewhere along the stallion's face.

[760 words. 2/3 attacks.

Hit by table, takes a knife into the skin just behind his left flank, avoids the death magic.
Runs at Deimos and then turns to the left, using the tile to help him slam himself forcefully into Deimos while he's in the corner.
Talbot comes running to Deimos at this time(at Crowley's rear) and jumps up, biting for his face.]

"Talk talk talk"


Freedom from all of the scars and the sins
Lest we drown in the darkness within

Deimos the Reaper Posts: 527
Deceased atk: 7.0 | def: 12 | dam: 6.5
Stallion :: Unicorn :: 16.1 :: 7 HP: 72.5 | Buff: NUMB
Heather
#5


The Weaver’s hallucination, garbed and emboldened, ceased to fade away into the abyss, failed to be destroyed, distorted, in the flickering light, and Deimos felt the embers of his escape slowly dying, withering away, embraced in purgatory. Like the days of his capture amongst the Edge, fleeting, turbulent tirades flourishing against his malicious intentions, the reel, the feel, of liberation, before it was taken away, dampened, ruined, wrecked and ravaged. Was he to forever sequestered here, locked and encased amongst the gloomy atmosphere, scorched and scorned, twisted and maligned? Would it take the defeat of Crowley, of one of his comrades’ images, shapes and figures, to extricate his form from the scraping edges of probing instruments, of scathing, creepy entrails and upheaval? He watched from the dregs of the shadowed corner, attempted to regain his vision amongst the groggy, blurry haze, to find the strength that seemed to have left his limbs, to collect the fibers of his pain and sear it to the unholy bombardments, the pursuit and intentions of leaving this vile oubliette. The table crashed, the deadly implements found hide, and the necromancy of his nefarious, wicked heart seemingly disappeared, receding, vanishing amongst the unearthly throngs – and still, Crowley came.

Deimos had a few moments to waver away from his current space, taking the opportunity to usher minute steps away from the wall before the shadowy stag found his figure beneath the quivering luminescence and the bizarre shadows. Due to his slow, arduous movements, instead of ensnaring his entire side in a binding, ensnared collision, Crowley hit the Lord’s left hind in a potent display of ferocity. The Reaper’s haunches were forced against the enclosure, ground against plaster, sore, aching, bruised, and immediately thereafter, the beast’s dog was once again leaping for him. Were he another monster, not impacted by warfare, not resolute and determined in his intentions and sentiments, perhaps he would have panicked, screeched and snorted, crashed to the ground in an infernal display of anxiety and torment. But he was terror, horror, annihilation and unholy corruption, and couldn’t be dismayed by the tact, gall and assault of pain, of his comrade’s armaments. He shifted the front portion of his body left, felt the grind of the canine’s teeth puncture the right portion of his nape and slide downward along the front of his chest in an elongated laceration, the burn, the ache, the anguish laced and languished into his cranium, into his movements, and still, he plunged onward and towards Crowley’s left, to annihilate, to persecute, to unravel.

Close proximity warranted a barbaric opportunity, a heavier dose of his enchantments, of his fiendish arts, of his diabolical opus careening back into the strange terrain, across the eerie room. Not only did it mean he wouldn’t have to move far, and in his current, scourged state, speed was not going to be granted, but it could also yield a fruitful opulence of ravaged chimeras and images, delusions finally dimming, flailing, extinguished. He wanted to demolish everything in his path, the walls, the doors, the enclosed thresholds, the mirage of his crafter and the resolute dog. He wanted to massacre the hands binding him, he yearned to slaughter, shatter, and devastate the chains rattling against his ears. Driven by animosity, incensed and ignited by acrimony and entropy, he unleashed the nefarious invocations again, pressing their intertwining grasp, wildly, decadently, brutally, towards Crowley and his companion, lofting in a sinister vicinity, longing to absorb the energy the crafter still possessed, restore his troubled, afflicted form, blight the ruins of this desecrated parlor until it fell around him. Perhaps, with Crowley’s defeat, with the death of the strange two-legged creature slinking around, he’d be bestowed his heinous liberty.


[620 words. 3/3 + 0/1 defense post.
As Crowley charges towards him, Deimos moves forward a few steps in order to allow the brunt of Crowley’s attack to hit his left hind. During this set of circumstances, Talbot finds purchase along the right side of his nape, causing a long laceration along his neck and chest before Deimos shifts towards the left, along the left side of Crowley. Using the close proximity, he aims his deadly magic towards Weaver and companion.]





Crowley Posts: 166
Outcast atk: 4.5 | def: 8.5 | dam: 5.5
Stallion :: Unicorn :: 16.2 :: 12 HP: 62.5 | Buff: NOVICE
Talbot :: Common Hellhound :: Acid & Name? :: Caracal :: None Dingo
#6

We build cathedrals to our pain
Establish monuments to attain



It all happened so fast.

Talbot's bite found it's mark, his teeth creating a satisfying, jagged mark from what seemed to be the Reaper's neck all the way down to his chest. The hound released the stallion when his feet found the floor again, and he was only a little disappointed that the Basin Lord had minimal interest in him. But he did not falter nor give up, instead scurrying out of the way of the two males and moving towards the middle of the room before coming to a stop, eyes calculating as he waited for the next opportunity for an attack.

Although not quite to the effect he'd been hoping for, Crowley's ploy had worked. His body slid right into that of Deimos', and he could feel the other stallion's hips go smashing into the wall nearest to him. It was a shame that his height difference played little to no role in the attack, for what would have happened if Deimos was held by a smaller, frailer body? A sinister grin threatened to pull and stretch across his face in that second - whether at the quick thought or the mere fact that he had pinned Deimos for a moment, he didn't know - but the threat fled when he felt the dark brute moving against him and heard feet behind him.

Moving into action in way of forward motion, the clothed adversary who had silently watched while he recovered from his own dose of the Reaper's magic, made another move. This time it was not on the harbinger of death, but on him. Just as soon as he had realized the man's presence, the scientist was successful in plunging a needle past the hide and thick sinew of his gaskin, injecting only Goddess knew what into his system. The stab was quick and sharp with minimal pain, but the effects of the drug were almost instant. As the brindle tried to force himself forward against the already difficult, smooth ground in an attempt to gain distance from both Deimos and now laughing, surely half crazed two-legged, any sort of counter attack was futile. The entire situation was beginning to look that way. His hooves scraped and grabbed for the floor, but it seemed little purchase could be found. With the concoction flowing through his veins, his vision blurred and wavered in a way that mimicked the lights above them. Time seemed to drag for those few moments, and he swore he could hear Talbot letting off a horridly long, drawn out snarl at their two-legged foe...

Time caught up, however, when Deimos unleashed his magic once again. Already slowed and dumbfounded by the scientist's drug, the Reaper's push of life-draining magic found him with ease and hit him full force, quite literally knocking him off his feet. His front knees buckled as his waning energy was drained from him, and as his face grew closer and closer to the solid floor, he scrambled hopelessly in a poor attempt to regain his balance and footing. Thanks to the slick tile, all hope was lost and he was sent careening into a stand-alone shelf which, as luck would have it, was free of anything but books. They came tumbling down as he collided into it, knocking him in the head and crashing across his back, spilling across the floor and onto his splayed out cape. Dazed and groggy he was, but otherwise, the Weaver was unharmed.

Seeing that his master was still fighting the effects of what all had been flung at him, and currently unable to recompose himself Talbot kicked himself into gear and once again charged forward, as if reliving the life of a valiant war mount going into battle. His claws clacked against the tile as he ran, golden eyes teeming with rage. He intended to come up at Deimos' left, and only when he was close enough did he leap one last time, acid-laced jaws seeking out the stallion's thick neck. He would not allow the hulking beast of death to take his master today.

[681 words. 3/3 attacks.

Injected by scientist, then seconds later, Deimos' magic. Falls forward and crashes into a shelf of books, where he stays.

Talbot charges forward and leaps one more time, going to Deimos' neck.]

"Talk talk talk"


Freedom from all of the scars and the sins
Lest we drown in the darkness within

Deimos the Reaper Posts: 527
Deceased atk: 7.0 | def: 12 | dam: 6.5
Stallion :: Unicorn :: 16.1 :: 7 HP: 72.5 | Buff: NUMB
Heather
#7


The cruel contrasts and collisions of the sequestered skirmish left him twisted, distorted and confused: to be proud of the way Crowley fell to his knees, to be satisfied and content as he slammed towards the odd shelving, or alarmed, dismayed, and unnerved that he’d yearned for the Weaver’s destruction? Whether it was a trick, a ruse, a play of the lights, a sickening effect of the groggy, hazy, eerie atmosphere, the culmination remained the same; the Reaper had been fully capable of attacking, mauling, and maiming his comrade. Was his loathing so deeply embedded, were his satanic forces so lacquered and varnished along his heart, his mind, his soul, that he’d commit the same actions again and again, over and over, no matter what the hallucination, chimeras, and images provided? No matter who came to face him? Where was his lonely virtue of loyalty now? Had it dissipated and disappeared, to fester, to wither, in the building, brewing, infidels art of his sins?

The sentiments were nearly sickening, but with the resurgence of Talbot, who seemed completely unharmed by the maelstrom Deimos had bestowed upon the canine’s bonded, forced him away from the heinous thoughts and back into the final strands of the fray. Plagued by his prior wounds, his right, lacerated shoulder and chest, bleeding and searing, his left hind bruised and marred, and the groggy effects still immersed and pulsing through his veins, his motions were slow, loathsome, and listless. He scrambled against the tile in an attempt to escape the pending bombardment of teeth again, swerving to the right as the beast arrived to conquer his left. The dog’s siege landed along the edge of his left shoulder, tearing the cloth of his costume, casting another lengthy puncture that scorched and burned against his senses, against his sight, and he limped towards the right again in an attempt to evade another assault.

The Reaper’s stare cast a deep, melancholy glow as he hobbled towards a nearby corner, as he gazed across the dim room, with its flickering bulbs and its haunting screams, its tormenting, troubling fixations, and the Weaver flat against the tiling. Deimos had deigned to escape, to liberate himself, and deliverance could only have been found in the desecration of a companion. In the midst of silence, he uttered one hushed apology, permitted the strange notion to simmer within his mind, and rest among the vile, blinding wounds and ailments. I am sorry.



[409 words. 3/3 + 1/1 defense.
Deimos attempts to shift toward the right, but due to his prior wounds, cannot pull himself swiftly away from Talbot. The hellhound manages to tear his costume, and then inflict another laceration across his left shoulder.

Thank you for the fight, Dingo! :D]





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#8
By my verdict: DEIMOS is the winner!

No VP is awarded

DEIMOS
Realism [+3]
Throughout the whole fight you really played to the surroundings, for instance I loved you using the operating table to attack, and helped the setting motivate your character the entire time. Your responses to the attacks and defenses were all good, but I would have liked to see more of the effects of the sustained injuries in the posts prior. I would have also liked to see more mentions of the costumes, but I do understand with a word limit that costumes are the easiest thing to brush aside. Overall great grasp on realism!


Emotion [+3]
I adored the constant conflict Deimos was having at fighting Crowley, and how he had to realize for himself the depths he’d sink to in order to obtain his freedom. Really well written the whole fight, especially loving the surprise in that first post.


Prose [+4]
Your writing is just beautiful. You maintain a specific style and it is consistent throughout, and it just helps add to the character and seemed very fitting for this type of fight/setting! I saw no typos or other glaring errors, so I really enjoyed reading this.


Readability [+2]
Easy to read throughout!


Finally tally: 17.5+12= 29.5 HP

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CROWLEY
Realism [+2]
You definitely have a clear grasp on creating attacks and dodging them. All of your timing and injuries were well taken, although similarly I would have liked to see those injuries continue to affect you in each post. Like you even said you had a knife stuck in your flank, but then never brought it up again - which by the way i really loved your response to that table crashing in to you! Throughout the fight you described as slipping on tile though, when the surroundings stated it was a concrete that provided traction. Additionally in the first post you took Deimos’ attack on your left, when he had stated as aiming to the right, I think you just got confused but it made all your responses and turns there after a bit confusing since it didn’t follow where Deimos’ position was. You seemed to forget the costumes as well after the introduction post, so I would have liked to see more mention of that, especially Talbot’s (adorable picture by the way haha), but again I understand they’re easy to forget and probably the first to get cut for word count. Overall you have a great eye for attacks and defenses, just perhaps take the time to pay more attention to the little details.


Emotion [+1]
This one was difficult to score because you were kind of in-between a 1 and a 2 over all your posts. I did see some emotion, especially with the companion, but it wasn’t as pronounced as I’d like. I never felt really drawn into the character or his feelings. There was confusion and some anger, but nothing more than those surface emotions.


Prose [+4]
Good flow and transitions the whole time, I saw no typos or grammatical errors and I enjoyed your opening post’s story line a lot :)

Readability [+2]
Easy to read all throughout!


Finally tally: 9+9= 18 HP


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