the Rift


The Fatalist [JUDGE]

Birch Posts: 37
Windtossed Foothills Warrior
Stallion :: Hybrid :: 17.1 hh :: 84 Months
Adoptable
#1
Birch is wild but never free- the burden he bears is present in each heavy step he takes further from the forest. Where wood splintered, a dark and thick blood flowed. It stained the white coat red with the death of an arborun. Its base had shattered- the roots that sprouted from its trunk and then sank into flesh frayed outwards and created an image of dilapidation. What is left of a comrade now lies still upon the earth. Grass has grown over the body- vines have swirled over it and mushrooms have sprouted from open wounds. In respectful silence, Birch stood over the body of his father. He had shed no tears and betrayed no emotion; such weakness had never been the way of his family. He walks further from the scene now not because he cannot bear to see it any longer, but because there is nothing left to see. His father is dead- to honor a hollow corpse will bring him nothing with pain. And so, his father of the same name grows into the land once again.

He leaves the memory in the forests of his home. He leaves the pain behind and comes instead to this new land of deserts, snow, and oceans. The vast forest that stretches across its center is dead. The animals here have no voice, the plants no vitality. He is a strong representation of life in contrast to these weakened trees that have wilted in a too-long sumer. He stands still among other trees and sticks out in the shadows. The birch built upon his forelegs and withers rises high above many other plants here; the rippling roots that rest just beneath the skin of his legs seem to be the healthiest in this forest. Even the peeling bark around his ergots, the flakes of white that reveal the red of the blood and seemingly wooden flesh beneath, is healthier than that of many trees in the area.

If he were one to ever feel, he would miss home. Standing as he is in this shadowed wood, he is aware of the fact that he has left his homeland far behind, and left questioning only if he cares. He feels no attachment to the glens of his youth. Oh, his youth- how long ago that was. He feels so much older now- to witness the death of one's parent is to age one's mind several years. What was once strong, wise, and old, is now gone. One is expected to take their place. Whether they like it or not, they will someday. Unless, that is, they run.

He has run, run far and fast from the quickly fading recollection of his father's herd and family and his responsibility to keep them safe. Were his father alive, Birch knows he would be ashamed. He knows he should hate himself for his cowardice, regret his decision each day. And yet, he stands stolidly in an unfamiliar wood after months of travelling. It is too late now to turn back; for that he is almost glad.

He wouldn't ever want to anyway.





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Archibald the Dauntless Posts: 386
Absent Abyss atk: 6.0 | def: 9.5 | dam: 8
Stallion :: Equine :: 18.3 hh :: 10 years HP: 80 | Buff: SHIELD
Loretta :: Alaskan Malamute :: Time Slip Time
#2
Running his patrol Archibald chose to swing a final swoop of the Threshold before returning back to his herdland. The black's feet moved quickly, his three-beat gate sending him gallantly across the land. His hair danced, each strand growing longer and thicker with the coming cold. Orangemoon was high and Archibald sported the coat of an early winter horse, his ancestry running thick in his veins. The guardian grunted as his breaths grew tighter and quicker, Loretta matching his breaths with her heavy panting as she ran along with her bonded. The two were a force to be reckoned with, but merely came to the Threshold to invite new members into their herd--proving themselves as loyal and dedicated members.

Slowing, the giant blinked his eyes, turning his head to observe the things around him. His brain stopped thinking for a light second when his eyes set upon something that rattled its cells. Confusion made his eyes narrow as he trotted towards the being. It was large, white, and had a tree growing out of it. Another being, of the like, had mentioned what she was called at the herd meeting; something with an "L" that Archibald could not place. As the warrior drew closer to the newcomer he widened his eyes to their normal setting, composing himself to present a strong and sturdy representative of the Windtossed Foothills herd.

"Hello, vagabond," Archibald greeted the white stallion, eyes focused hard on his eyes as not to draw attention to the black stallion's questioning mind concerning the daunting tree, "Have you faired well? Your body hosts the evidence of long travels. I offer you refuge, if you so accept." Archibald nodded curtly, shoulders square and tail resting carefully against his hind pillar-like legs. Loretta stayed silent, hard eyes watching the newcomer from her bonded's side, ears pricked forward to catch his foreign words if he chose to speak any. The malamute's caution was easily seen, her muscles tensed in a position ready to assume any command given by Archibald.


Birch Posts: 37
Windtossed Foothills Warrior
Stallion :: Hybrid :: 17.1 hh :: 84 Months
Adoptable
#3
The white draft watches in silence as a stranger approaches. From his withers sprouts the massive tree that is his life. In the faint wind its dying leaves rustle and fall, just as they do each passing orangemoon. His thick, long coat, often a pink-orange hue that resembles a sunset, is now bleached to emulate the color of fresh-fallen snow. Only the blood-red stripes across his legs stand out against his coat. He is an image of power and unwavering strength, but in his heart he feels nothing other than a desire for the end of it all.

The stranger arrives with a bare back and a steady expression that even the pessimist can respect. There is some sort of determination there that he recognizes as something he had once seen in his father. He cannot make himself forget, not even now. He stands far from Prim'sylvia, takes root in the soil of an unfamiliar land, and yet he is haunted by the ghost of the stallion he allowed to die. How curious a concept that death is ever present, how dark a shadow is that which is cast by the reaper. Birch finds himself the encompassing black. He closes his eyes and sees nothing. He imagines that he is dying, and for a moment feels at peace.

But his lids inevitably force themselves open once more and his white lashes strike the air with a misleading fervor that suggests he has been reborn. Alas, it is simply a hatred of what he sees that brings such fury to his movements. The stranger offers him a place to stay, refuge- as if he would ever accept, especially from a stranger. "What have you to offer me? A life of contentment?" The massive creature asked mockingly. Surely the being before him did not believe in such folly, or at the very least that a stranger such as himself could be convincing enough to change Birch's mind.



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Archibald the Dauntless Posts: 386
Absent Abyss atk: 6.0 | def: 9.5 | dam: 8
Stallion :: Equine :: 18.3 hh :: 10 years HP: 80 | Buff: SHIELD
Loretta :: Alaskan Malamute :: Time Slip Time
#4
Archibald watched the tree creature before him carefully, his eyes carefully narrowed as his face hardened in a stoic, observant state. The black warrior contemplated what he would say to this creature, a standoffish brute who, without directly saying so, brushed off his offer of the Foothills. Flicking his tail to brush off his slight annoyance. However, he understood. When Archibald and Evers were approached by the three leaders on their arrival here Archibald was incredibly intolerant of nothing but what he thought would be the best for his family. Taking one step forward, not in a challenging manner but merely to shift his weight, the black spoke honestly. "I can never offer anyone a life of contentment, life is what you make it. You choose to be content, and I could not give it to you, stallion. However, the Foothills currently holds one of your own kind--her name is Willow."

Loretta wiggled beside Archibald, anxious around the large tree creature in front of her. The red dog whined slightly, lowering her body and narrowing her eyes. The malamute's hackles rose and Archibald swatted his tail over her in a manner to make her stop. It was an unacceptable manner to greet newcomers in and he looked back to Birch, hoping his reaction was minimal. "My name is Archibald, and this is Loretta." the giant finished, gesturing down to the young dog.


Birch Posts: 37
Windtossed Foothills Warrior
Stallion :: Hybrid :: 17.1 hh :: 84 Months
Adoptable
#5
The bitch growls at him and he is not afraid to bite back. He is not characteristic of his breed- peace does not run through his veins, family values do not take precedence. Birch could have cared less about loyalty; to see it before him in the cur defending her master was strange enough. What he did not have was not worth having- what he had would not remain for longer.

And so when Archibald mentions the Lignea mare residing in the Foothills, he feels nothing. For many their would have been a yearning for home or any who reminded them of it, but Birch is steeped in apathy. He seethes silently in solitude, views the creature and his love for his companion as an obstacle on the way to death. "Great," Birch says sarcastically, not caring enough to proffer his own name. "Good for you two."

He could not have cared less- he finds it strange that they insist on acting friendly towards him when he has made it clear that he has no affinity for the stranger. His eyes roll and he turns away from the massive stallion, not considering that it may be unwise to show discourtesy to him. "Now why don't you just fuck off?" Comes the retort, vicious and biting. His white eyes sparkle with annoyance, and the red flecks in them appear for all the world to be traces of blood.

[[WC: 237 || PC: 0/3 || N: Spar time! Teaching spar judged for VP, magic and companions allowed. 3 posts each + closing defense.]]

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Archibald the Dauntless Posts: 386
Absent Abyss atk: 6.0 | def: 9.5 | dam: 8
Stallion :: Equine :: 18.3 hh :: 10 years HP: 80 | Buff: SHIELD
Loretta :: Alaskan Malamute :: Time Slip Time
#6
With the giant's hope of a little reaction crushed Archibald felt complete disrespect fuel his anger. The warrior grunted and trotted in a wide circle, turning his body once he got past the tree creature before him. Archibald flattened his ears, "Do not disrespect me, whelp, unless you are ready to accept blood marring that pelt of yours." Archibald moved his less sharp sword first--his tongue. He sized up the male quickly. Archibald matched his size well, the black's withers rose above the white's but the tree that sprouted from his back brought Birch to seem so much larger. Undaunted, Archibald took to account that, for once, speed might be on his side in this fight. The tree looked awkward, sticking out of the back of the other. He doubted not that its branches would throw the white off balance.

Archibald raised his left fore-hoof and struck the ground, puffing up dirt much like a traditional bull would before charging a Matador. The black narrowed his golden eyes at the snide comment from the white stallion. Locking eyes with the bastard Archibald rose both front feet off the ground. His white feathers danced with the motion, his muscles tightened and ready for impact as his massive hooves struck the ground. Tremors shot out from the ground, shaking the footing beneath Birch in an attempt to throw him off balance.

Archibald snorted again, tucking his chin and arching his neck to protect his precious jugular and he advanced on the male, moving skillfully over the shaky earth to attempt to strike out at the white's legs and hopefully get Birch tangled up in his own legs enough to bring him to the ground. Loretta barked as she lowered her center of gravity after backing up to get out of the way of the anger stallions. The pup fed off of Archibald's pride and anger, fueling her small body with an intense passion to strike. Archibald was taught never to let anyone disrespect him, and if he had the power to, to teach the being who dared go against him a lesson. In this case, Archibald had all the right to go after Birch--the bastard deserved a good smack to teach him not to mess with someone he did not anticipate to be such a threat.




[ WC: 386| Archibald moved forward at a trot and turned when he was in front of Birch, hoping to block him from advancing forward. Archibald also used his magic to make the earth shake. As he did so he moved forward and used his front hooves to kick at Birch's legs to hope to aid his magic in knocking him off balance. 1/3 | Edited to fix word count. ]


[TEACHING: Birch's emotion is good. Archibald is furious that he disrespected him, which is exactly what Birch did. Birch turned his butt to Archibald which causes a lot of fights between stallions. ]


Birch Posts: 37
Windtossed Foothills Warrior
Stallion :: Hybrid :: 17.1 hh :: 84 Months
Adoptable
#7
All at once, Birch feels the tension between himself and the warrior behind him escalate to dangerous levels. He hears himself being called a whelp and hold in a chuckle. He is older, certainly wiser, than this stallion, and yet the stranger still acts as if he has the right to disrespect him? It is ridiculous, the entire situation is. But just as Birch had incited the equine's anger, he felt his own face growing hot with elicited rage. It is he who need not be treated with disrespect, he who deserves to be looked up to.

Just as the younger stallion had taken in his appearance, Birch does the same of him. The equine is taller, but they are evenly matched in build, and Birch is older. He has spent more years fighting than this arrogant fool before him, surely it will act in his advantage. It is only the unfamiliar forest and the young dog that put him at ill ease- Birch is in new territory and facing an unfamiliar creature. He blocks the mental handicap and focuses on what he does know, what the other stallion likely does not.

For instance, that Birch is endowed with a wonderful sense of balance. He looks awkward to the equine, with the massive tree sprouting from his shoulders; it is common sense to assume maneuvering with the growth would be difficult. But it is not simply a growth to Birch, it is his life. For six years he has lived in his own body, knowing nothing else, learning from the forests around him and teaching himself to live, to be strong. The earth has granted him the gift of confidence and unshakeable strength. Just as the roots of a tree stood firm, Birch does the same in the face of the unfamiliar warrior. The show of circling does nothing to phase him, the kicks and starts are nothing but mere distractions from one's true ability. He looks past such foolishness and into the heart of Archibald's movements- watches with red stained eyes the twitched of the carpals and triceps beneath the thick black hide.

But no amount of watching could have prepared him for the earthquake. The magic is unexpected and Birch finds himself quickly arching his neck and pressing his hind legs into the earth. He shifts his balance in an instant to its place behind the roots of the birch and tenses his deltoids to lift the shoulder and, in turn the forearm, further up and off of the ground. Still, while his balance improves, he is shaken by the movement of the earth, and feels tricked. Surely this cannot be considered fair play- an unexpected attack to begin with, but then one with magic?

The earth continues to shake and Birch begins to move his hind hooves quickly and firmly just to stay upright. "Bastard," Birch mutters angrily at the stranger. He shifts further back and lifts himself to avoid the first true physical attack completely and skillfully, but once the kicks have carried themselves and met only air, Birch lands immediately. He breathes deeply and growls all at once- the shaking of the earth is a new sensation, and it leaves him disoriented, even if he had managed to evade the stallion's first kicks. He mutters to himself, not words of encouragement, but insults to the enemy.

Birch knows he will not fall on this day- while he accepts the concept of death at any moment, he understands that the moment must be right. He knows this is not the right moment- it is too arbitrary, too loosely defined. Fate would have no part to play in this chance encounter... would she? No, surely it is not his time to die. With a faintly growing sense of determination he pushes himself forward, more slowly than he would have were the earth still, and lowers his poll. The roots beneath the flesh of his forearm ripple like tensing muscles, and the striping around his legs seems to ooze in the trick of the shadows. With eyes filled with a strong sense of pride he closes the gap between the pair and strikes out with the firm trunk of the birch that sprouts from his flesh. It falls at the level of the stallion's left flank, but as Birch moves to the right with neck coiled and an open mouth ready to bite, the tree draws dangerously closer. There is an instant where Birch wonders if this truly is the right thing to do. Is there no better way to spend these final days?

And then he snaps his white teeth down tightly near the thin flesh covering the stallion's knee, and swiftly thrusts to his right to try and sweep the stranger with his arbor.


[[WC: 799 || PC: 1/3 || AS: The earthquake succeeds in messing with Birch's balance, but he does his best to remedy the situation by lifting himself into a low rear. At the sight of Archibald's legs coming towards him he pushes into the earth with his hind legs and raises the height of the rear so that Archibald swipes the empty air beneath him. The attack misses and Birch falls to the ground. Birch then runs towards archibald's left flank. He lowers his body and then shifts quickly to the right, hoping to strike archibald with his tree while attempting to bite at his knee.]]

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Archibald the Dauntless Posts: 386
Absent Abyss atk: 6.0 | def: 9.5 | dam: 8
Stallion :: Equine :: 18.3 hh :: 10 years HP: 80 | Buff: SHIELD
Loretta :: Alaskan Malamute :: Time Slip Time
#8
Like walking into a dream, so unlike what you've seen
The ground shook underneath the males and Archibald thanked the Gods with a silent prayer. His magic was a great gift. Not only was it a great gift, but it worked for what he had imagined. Archibald noted Birch’s loose footing and his golden eyes glinted with a sense of accomplishment—it was a small accomplishment but one nonetheless. His glint of achievement was short lived, however, as his first strike rolled under Birch. The warrior grunted as his hooves met air beneath the white stallion. With a mouthful of annoyance Archibald tightened his jaw and let his hooves fall to the shaky earth. The black was undoubtedly skilled in moving across the small quake because of the practice he put in to be able to use the skill successfully in battle.

Turning on his heels quickly Archibald moved to his right and forward to get away from the tree trunk that narrowed in for a damaging blow. Archibald lowered his center of gravity, knees and hocks bending to help his balance. The earth stilled beneath the massive creatures as Archibald moved away from Birch, keeping his flank unscathed. With all of his focus on the tree Archibald missed the alien’s teeth aiming down. Archibald felt hair and skin peel off of his left leg’s gaskin area, leaving a small, stinging bite. The flesh, now raw, spotted with pin-sized droplets of blood as they pushed through the broken skin and into the air. The red liquid was not major and did not poor down his leg. The blood simply painted itself over the wound and within hours the bite would be hard and it would start to stab over. Had it been Tallsun Archibald knew the bite would have probably been deeper, but Orangemoon thickened his coat in preparation for Frostfall. He was thankful for the Orangemoon now—not only for his long coat but also because the flies hid in fright of the coming colder days. This wound and any others he may endure would be free of the pesky creatures that bothered him so highly during Birdsong and Tallsun.

With his hind end now facing Birch’s face Archibald threw his weight forward, strong shoulders and forelegs supporting the massive beast. Quickly and precisely Archibald thrust his back legs out, two hooves aimed for Birch’s face. His attack was instantaneous to the pain of the bite and Archibald only rationalized that Birch’s face would still be in close proximity. Archibald’s power was held mostly in his legs, as any horse’s was, and his kicks were powerful. The warrior used his legs skillfully in killing the fathers of his two younger brothers, Casimir and Knox. His legs had hammered down on Roanne the Sentinel. He remembered the sensation of his hooves cracking over his former leader’s body, breaking skin and bone and exposing weakness. The Sentinel had been a group effort, that was true, but Archibald had been the general above his brothers—as he usually was. It had been he alone, though, that killed Casimir’s father. He did not even know that stallion’s name; he could only remember the face of the poor brute as Archibald took his life. Something about fighting and killing gave Archibald a sense of pride, whether it be for his mother—as in the case of the Sentinel and the forgotten one—or for practice—much like his spars with Smoke or the unnamed unicorn(Leyra)—or whether it be for a sake of pride—in this case, his fight against Birch.

Archibald let his hind legs fall to the earth again, and back up quickly. Archibald tried to push as closely into the male as he could and sent out another driving kid, this time willing it to land on the tree-creature’s brachial tricep or brachial bicep muscles. Archibald hoped the male had not turned, as he was unsure of how his hooves would feel crashing into the tree that sprouted from Birch’s shoulders. It appeared to have bark, and he knew that kicking real trees was just unintelligent.


[WC: 675 | Archibald turned and moved away from Birch, causing the tree to hit nothing but for Birch's teeth to get a grip on his leg. In a quick defensive attack Archibald kicked out with both back legs, hoping to strike Birch's face. After those kicks he back up quickly to get as close to Birch as possible and kicked again, hoping to hit the area where his shoulder and chest meet or on his shoulder. (I didn't say anything about hitting Birch's roots if he did hit his leg because I don't really know where Birch's roots under his skin are.) 2/3 | Edited to add table.]

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[Teaching: Birch is really present in this thread. Alex, you have a talent for putting your characters into spars. Each one we have had I am incredibly amazed.

Your description is also very clear yet still eloquent. I understood Birch's low rear and you took the idea of it and made it something beautiful. Despite this, I did not understand Birch moving his hind hooves. It takes a great deal of balance for a horse to move when it is rearing, even when the ground is still. It makes sense for Birch to continue to keep his hooves firmly planted and raise his rear. However, I feel that if he extended his body into a full rear his balance would be thrown off even more. It is very easy for a rearing horse to lose their balance with poor footing.

I lovelovelove the fact that Birch is using his trunk as a battering ram! That is very creative--something I personally never would have thought of. It is a very realistic attack for such an unrealistic character. The bite to his knees was also a very good attack, as a horse's legs are so precious any hard attack to them is effective. Over all, a very good post where the positives outweigh the negatives.]

Birch Posts: 37
Windtossed Foothills Warrior
Stallion :: Hybrid :: 17.1 hh :: 84 Months
Adoptable
#9


The faint taste of blood brings the stallion no thrill- he is left with a dissatisfaction as his body swings hopelessly into thin air, and he is all at once resigned to his place in this battle. Birch knows he is a creature against the nature of his kind. No lignea before him has torn flesh with such readiness, broken into belligerence with such ease. His father was a peaceful sort, but how can he model himself after the former Birch when it was his unwillingness to fight that led to his demise?

When the kicks come he does not shy away as his mother would have done- he does not stand still to take it as his father did. He has nothing to protect but himself, and even this husk he treats with little care. What is the importance of a body's health when it will expire at any moment? To prolong the pain of life through care is to end a part of one's soul; to succumb to rash belief in hopes that it will bring the bearer of the burden comfort he does not deserve.

And so the kicks come flying towards him and he turns away but bears their weight and faces their unforgiving force. The black draft's hooves slide across the flesh covering his scapula with ease, leaving slight abrasions in their path that mix drops of blood with the thin coat of a creature who has lived too little in winter to face it as he should. He develops no coat to save himself from the cold- like the bark of his calling, he simply shifts colors to match the frostfall snow. Whatever protection Archibald has in a winter coat, Birch will never gain. The skin toughens and the roots seek warm nourishment- It is his roots that save him now.

They bulge beneath the flesh and mark the veins of his lifeplant. Like a living part of him they seem to react violently to the attack, pulsing and pressing against the force of Archibald's daggers. Their sap mixes with his blood and coats the wound. In the cold of Orangemoon it hardens against flesh- in the dim light his bright eyes, white and dangerous, flash with unresolved emotion. Birch twists away from the onslaught of a buck and it strikes just below the line of his back on his left. The pain is fleeting, the memory of it reduced to a dull ache and a possibility of a thick bruise. He knows better than to think he can run from such contact completely. The two drafts are locked in a contest of brute strength, speed will do neither of them any good.

With his own back now to the shadow, Birch too kicks out, mimicking the movements of the opposing force. Hooves aim low at the knees, hoping to force them in to buckle, and wicked intent forces them back down to the ground. He spares no time and shuffles back quickly. The massive form of his body twists and turns to face the stallion's back, and with a sudden heaviness, his weight falls upon the other stallion's hindquarters. Thirsty hooves strike at an enemy's spine, bared teeth nip at the flesh, and untamed eyes glint with flecks of red.

[[WC: 548 || PC: 2/3 || AS: Birch receives the first hit on his left shoulder. He turns and receives the second just below his lower back on the left side, but no blood is drawn. From there he bucks and aims low for Archibald's knees. He then turns and rears to sort of mount Archibald, all the while striking out and biting at him.]]


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Archibald the Dauntless Posts: 386
Absent Abyss atk: 6.0 | def: 9.5 | dam: 8
Stallion :: Equine :: 18.3 hh :: 10 years HP: 80 | Buff: SHIELD
Loretta :: Alaskan Malamute :: Time Slip Time
#10
Like walking into a dream, so unlike what you've seen
Aside from training spars with Vincent, Archibald had never fought with another draft before so close to his size. Most of his brothers had some type of draft blood in them, save for Evers, Wilder and Emerson, but not full like Archibald and Vincent. Vincent outgrew Archibald by a couple of inches, but even so Archibald had always been the most skilled fighter and most intimidating powerhouse in his family. Now, though, Archibald had truly met a match. Birch was a ferocious fighter, passion driving his muscles. Underneath the dominating part that fueled Archibald’s dislike for this new stallion there was a neutral admiration for the way Birch fought. The stallion truly knew his body and how to handle it.

Archibald feels contact on his first attack, but his happiness in the attack hitting was not lived to its full life. Archibald’s second attack also slammed on the white draft, a surge of power running through Archibald’s veins. Blood pumped in the warrior’s ears, deafening him to the barks and whines of his companion. Loretta stayed off to the side, her body moving furiously as she paced. Archibald pushed her away mentally, honing in on the fact that she was not ready for battle. Loretta whined still, pleading to have permission to protect her bonded.

Archibald moved forward once all four of his hooves touched the ground of the Threshold. In the dimming light the earth grew colder and Archibald’s muscles were growing tight with a full day of use. If he had not already preformed an entire patrol routine Archibald would have more stamina to force into this battle. Archibald cursed his dedication and pride, the two mixing in his battle so fervently. This encounter would leave the massive guardian tired. Archibald would accept refuge of the Foothills tonight with an open heart. He would have to find his mother and brothers, to assure their safety before he could rest, however.

Archibald clenched his jaw as pain rippled down his hind end. Birch had successfully landed his kick on Archibald’s leg. A bruise would form and Archibald would be sore and stiff from the impact of the large, powerful hooves. The pain radiated around his fibula, his body sending heat to the area attacked. With a head full of frustration and a heart full of pride Archibald turned his body just in time. The black stallion lowered his center of gravity, back legs bending. Pain surged through him and he knew he needed to finish this fight quickly. Feeling his chest swell with a giant breath Archibald opened his mouth and released a long, high pitched, screaming neigh.

Simultaneous to his advantage as a ranked warrior Archibald reared to match Birch. Archibald’s feathered hooves swung out to strike at the legs and knees of the white before him. With hard eyes Archibald prepared his body for the tangle of the two drafts, pit strength and tactic against strength and tactic. These two hurricanes were running full force, and they were colliding to become one megastorm.

[WC: 506 | Birch’s kick landed on Archibald’s gaskin area, affecting his fibula. Pain fuels his anger and Archibald turns as Birch does, using his battle cry and rearing to kick out at Birch’s legs.]



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[Teaching: I am so into Birch's head. I cannot say how much he is ever-present in your posts. I love it.

Birch's attacks are good, too. You focus on legs in your first attack and that is excellent. As I mentioned before it is incredibly effective to use leg attacks because legs are so vital in a horse's life. Also, back attacks are good too. Remember Chamryn and Roanne's spar? Even though Chamryn lost that spar Roanne took a lot of damage from it because of Chamryn's back attacks.

Something I also fall victim of is thinking about how much effort it takes for a draft-type horse to turn completely around and rear. With this spar, being that there is two drafts, rearing would probably be minimal and more kicks would ensue. ]

Birch Posts: 37
Windtossed Foothills Warrior
Stallion :: Hybrid :: 17.1 hh :: 84 Months
Adoptable
#11


With the loss of his enemy's support comes a loss of a desire to strike. There is no fervor behind the arborun's bites and kicks, only chilled apathy. But at the same time his attitude is not that of a soldier, but a calloused, uncaring miser. He is selfish and somehow unintentionally wicked. He has no intent to murder, no intent to hurt, he simply wants the thrill for himself. He starts fights to keep the adrenaline pumping, to force some sort of action into his dull, seemingly never-ending life. Maybe he thinks he will find something worth living for in that moment before death, that moment when he can still be saved. Perhaps this is why he fights.

But the reasons remain locked inside the stallion's mind as it focuses on the turn of events around him. He still feels the pounding pressure of the opposition's gaskin against his hooves, still feels the sensation of pain haunting his own shoulder and back. As Archibald's body falls away from his and the black stallion places himself in a steady rear, Birch grits his teeth and lets himself fall. The earth rises to meet him and the draft's hooves fall to do the same. Pressure hits him from both sides, all while the piercing sound of a warrior's neigh rattles the bones and increases the pain. Birch lowers his poll and protects his neck with a gentle, natural curve, but his withers are not so lucky. The larger stallion's body crashes upon the left side of his withers and pummels the very same spot where he had been previously injured, scraping bark and skin as his hooves fall across flesh.

There is only one clear advantage, and Birch intends to use it. White eyes shut for a moment and lids press down upon sturdy cheek bones characteristic of a heavy breed. He contemplates death in the brief second that Archibald continues to batter his side and he focuses on whatever absence of pain is left. He grows tired of this life and this fight, feels throbbing, bruised flesh and muscle pound alongside his still beating heart, and he readies himself.

And then in a moment he iss lifting his poll once more and angling his body backwards into a rear heavily supported by the presence of the stallion beside him. His hooves strike out at the untouched abdomen and the lifeplant sprouting from his withers leans towards the opponent like a battering ram. Birch lets himself fall to the left, hopefully onto the stallion's unsuspecting and unprepared form. This is the end of the fight, the white stallion can sense it. As the whites of his already snow-tinted eyes appear and dominated his orbs, he feels a dizzying rush. For a moment he thinks it is satisfaction, perhaps borne out of a confidence in his performance.

He realizes seconds later it is the strips of bark torn from the base of his arbor, the scent of his own prickled drops of blood, and the kicked up dust clouding his vision. No, there is no thrill, only disorientation. Once again, Birch reminds himself that he has no control- life is but a whim, to end it no heinous crime. But to start it? Perhaps the worst crime of all.

[[WC: 547 || PC: 3/3 || AS: Birch falls back down to the ground when Archibald moves to rear. Birch is shaken by the battle cry, and thus does not avoid Archibald's hooves as they strike down at his withers to the left of his tree. Birch rears and leans to his left, trying to kick at Archibald's abdomen with an extended hoof and knock him over with his tree.]]


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Archibald the Dauntless Posts: 386
Absent Abyss atk: 6.0 | def: 9.5 | dam: 8
Stallion :: Equine :: 18.3 hh :: 10 years HP: 80 | Buff: SHIELD
Loretta :: Alaskan Malamute :: Time Slip Time
#12
Like walking into a dream, so unlike what you've seen

It all seemed to end so quickly. Archibald's massive fore hooves drove into the side of the stallion before him, their accuracy driven ferociously by the battle ability he held because of the Foothills ranking him so respectively. This battle had taken its toll and Archibald was glad as he felt his pride’s endeavor coming to a close. After his attacks landed Archibald let his weight sink back, his body prepared to land back on the ground and his teeth ready to snap at Birch's heels as he drove him off angrily. With his muscles tight and mind focused on driving Birch away Archibald was not prepared for the white draft's tree to come slamming in his direction. As the branches collided with Archibald's body he stumbled backwards, legs flailing to find proper footing. With this quick backwards movement Birch’s hooves struck only air. Dust piled up around the drafts as the black shuffled his hooves and spread his legs to finally stabilize himself. Snorting, Archibald backed up, his breaths coming in hard puffs that racked his chest.

In this moment Archibald was not representing his herd well, but he always had a duty to himself and there was no way imaginable that the warrior would stand to take such disrespect. Archibald had offered refuge only to have it thrown in his face. "The Foothills could have used your skills in battle effectively, now, as far as I am concerned you are not welcome." Archibald snorted, eyes hard as he stood as strong as he could. Archibald was sure that if Paladin had been watching this ordeal the unicorn would not be pleased but the idea of pleasing anyone, at this point, was beyond his level of tolerance.

With that Archibald looked down at Loretta, the red malamute already at his side poking her nose on his legs and whining with worry. He could feel her emotions were mixed between worry for his wellbeing and anger for him not letting her fight. Reaching down Archibald touched his nose to the red dog’s back and lifted his head once more to look at Birch. ” If I see you again, especially near my home, mark the promise that I will end you.” Swishing his tail in annoyance Archibald turned and headed towards his home.




[ WC: 386 | Closing. Birch's branches knocked him off balance and made him stagger back. However, Birch's final frontal hoof strikes missed. Archibald is going to be sore in the morning :| || Edited to add table ]

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[Teaching: Birch reacted to the battle cry magic in a way that was completely realistic. Basically, an already shut-out character with a stroke of anger completely became a hollow wall. However, once the effects were through Birch's personality came back into swing.

It was nice to see Birch using his tree in effective, realistic ways. You really have been able to work through him and have his tree be an extension of his being and not just a part of his anatomy. Snaps and claps to that.

With all of these good comments I just wish you would have incorporated some of Birch's travels and maybe bringing up a spar he might have had in his vagabond days. You mention that Birch is not like other lignea and I think if you had mentioned more fights or violence from his past it would have given more support to that claim.

You work so well with putting your character's personality into fights. I would say now to focus on attacks and watch some videos of playing or fighting horses. I know it is hard to imagine lignea fighting but you did it extremely well. Excellent fight, I enjoy every one we have. =] ]

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#13
Archibald +1 VP for teaching spar & +1 VP for winning





C h a l l e n g e r | D e f e n d e r
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By my verdict ARCHIBALD is the winner.

ARCHIBALD -- post 1 (attack only)

[Realism]
+ 1| Attack: earth tremors.
0| Attack: striking with legs. Although striking at Birch’s legs is a good attack, your second part about possibly tangling their legs up and bringing Birch down makes no sense. It would affect both of them for starters, and there would need to be more speed and momentum mentioned for it to be plausible.

[Prose]
0| Easy read. A few typos.
+ 1| Flow.
0| Emotion. I could feel you attempting to give motive and heart to Archibald, but nothing really felt powerful.

BIRCH -- post 1

[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: steadies against earth shake magic.
- 1| Defense: if he had to steady himself from the earthquake he can’t rear without more consequence.
+ 1| Attack: tree slam
+ 1| Attack: biting.

[Prose]
0| Easy read. Some mild confusing parts.
+ 1| Flow.
0| Emotion. Again I feel the attempt to inspire emotion but I don’t get a true sense of it, I make no connection.

ARCHIBALD -- post 2

[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: escape the tree blow.
+ 1| Defense: take the bite.
+ 1| Attack: bucking.
+ 1| Experience: thinking of killing Roanne & fighting Smoke.
+ 1| Attack: bucking.

[Prose]
+ 1| Easy read.
+ 1| Flow.
+ 1| Emotion.

BIRCH -- post 2

[Realism]
- 1| Defense: taking the buck is plausible given their closeness, however since Archibald was aiming for his head I would have thought it placed higher as you gave little reason to it landing on his shoulder, and although I loved you injury description, to fully take a buck is very severe. A buck is a horse’s strongest attack.
+1| Defense: avoiding this buck, but incompletely.
- 1| Attack: bucking at Archibald’s knees could not work based on their position, it would be his hocks instead, seeing as Archibald had just kicked at Birch so they were butt to butt more or less.
- 1| Injury: there is no effect of the large injury sustained to his shoulder from the buck effecting his movements. This would make his ability to buck very difficult.
- 1| Powerplay: “The massive form of his body twists and turns to face the stallion’s back, and with a sudden heaviness, his weight falls upon the other stallion’s hindquarters.” You cannot assume Archibald took your weight.
+ 1| Attack: pawing at Archibald’s spine.
+ 1| Attack: biting.

[Prose]
+ 1| Easy read.
+ 1| Flow.
+ 1| Emotion.

ARCHIBALD -- post 3

[Realism]
+ 1| Experience: thinking of spars with Vincent.
+ 1| Defense: taking the kick to his leg
- 1| Injury: taking an entire buck to his leg should be incredibly disabling and it is not described as such.
- 1| Defense: avoiding Birch’s hoof and bite attacks needs to be more detailed, I nearly thought you ignored them.
0| Attack: neat to see battle cry used! However it wasn’t made very clear that it was being used without the summary.
+ 1| Attack: rear attack.

[Prose]
+ 1| Easy read.
+ 1| Flow.
+ 1| Emotion.

BIRCH -- post 3

[Realism]
-1| Defense: there seems to be no effect from the battle cry.
+ 1| Defense: takes the rear to his withers
+ 1| Attack: rearing strike/fall into Archibald
+ 1| Attack: tree stab

[Prose]
0| Easy read. Some confusing parts, had to re-read one section three times because I wasn’t sure if Birch had fallen to the ground or not.
+ 1| Flow.
+ 1| Emotion.

ARCHIBALD -- post 4 (defense only)

[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: taking the tree attack.
+ 1| Defense: avoiding the hoof attack.
- 1| Injury: you should not have been able to back up quickly considering your hind leg took a full buck.


ARCHIBALD

[Bonus]
+ 1| Breed.
+ 1| Health – although taking a buck to your hind leg is bad, overall you had the least severe injuries.

[Injuries]
None.

[Creativity]
+ 1| Loved you including how the seasons affected the injuries you sustained.

Comments: You had a lot of great attacks and you took your attacks well, being very descriptive of placement and exact names of body locations for the most part. I would like to see more differentiating between left or right sides however, and to remember to include how an injury would affect your future movements. I loved your inclusion of the companion on the sidelines as well as considering the experience you gained in other fights, it helped provide some emotion and I enjoyed the pride you showed Archibald held for his work and his herd. I would like to see more incorporation of terrain effects from you – you did fantastic including breed! Overall you have a great sense for fighting, but need to be a bit more specific with some of the attacks and defenses, as at times they could be mildly confusing or seemed too open for interpretation (such as avoiding Birch’s rear at his spine) and to remember not only to describe an injury, but how it will influence your character from then on. Great fight.

BIRCH

[Bonus]
+ 1| Breed.

[Injuries]
None.

[Creativity]
+ 1| Very interesting to see a Lignea fight, loved the inclusion of the tree for attacking and the sap as bleeding :3

Comments: I really started to see more of Birch coming out with each post, so I saw a great improvement with emotion, but I never got fully connected as you were still very mechanical about attacks and defenses. Similarly you had a good feel for realistic attacks and defenses, just sometimes your positioning/aim would seem off or not well described for what you did. I thought the injuries you took were good, but you also need to remember to include how an injury sustained will affect the character for the rest of the battle. Because of the nature of this character I would expect more inclusion of the tree on his backside, as to how it will affect his speed and balance in every post, but I really enjoyed you using it as a weapon, however sometimes that wasn’t always entirely clear. Again fantastic job including breed, but don’t forget about terrain! Overall you have a good fighting sense, just remember to be accurate about where an injury is and how it will influence your future movements, and to be a bit more clear and descriptive about giving and attack or defending one, as sometimes I was confused as to what was happening (such as being influenced by the battle cry). Good fight!

TOTAL
ARCHIBALD - 68
BIRCH - 64





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