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10-05-2012, 01:32 PM

Paladin

CHALLENGER -- Round 2

[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: Dodge to the side to avoid Giselle's attack, yet still taking Psyche's attack.
+ 1| Attack: Horn attack on Delinne.
+ 2| Attack: Horn attack on Giselle + blood boiling magic on Giselle

[Prose]
+ 1| Easy Read
+ 1| Emotion: Remorse that Giselle's upbringing changed her into what she is.
+ 1| Flow

CHALLENGER -- Round 3

[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: Rearing to avoid being stabbed in the eye.
+ 1| Attack: Blood boil on Giselle while backing away to protect his belly.
+ 1| Attack: Stabbing at Giselle's belly rather than rearing with her.
+ 1| Attack: Kick at Giselle before running to interecept Delinne

[Prose]
+ 1| Easy Read
+ 1| Emotion: Sadness and confusion while attacking Delinne. Questioning the purpose of war.
+ 1| Flow

CHALLENGER -- Round 4

[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: Rearing to avoid horn swipe by Monster and taking injury to his cheek.
+ 1| Joining Ned for a double attack on Psyche.
- 1| You say Paladin leaped to the side to avoid Delinne's attack, but there is no mention of him coming down from his rear. It's hard for me to see how he could leap from a standstill on his hind legs.

[Prose]
+ 1| Easy Read
+ 1| Emotion: Beginning to lose control because of his anger.
+ 1| Flow

CHALLENGER

[Bonus]
+ 1| Checking on his warriors and thanking Kri for helping him.

[Injuries]
- 1| Stab wound to hip.

[Creativity]
+ 1| "Blood had a bitter tang, metallic almost. Everyone was a machine, a mindless slave to this world."
+ 1| Magic use.

Comments: Paladin is an absolute joy to read in battle. His emotions are always there and it adds to the experience of reading him.

TOTAL
Challenger - 25