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By my verdict KRI is the winner.
KRI -- post 1 (attack only)
[Realism]
+ 1| Attack: front hooves
+ 1| Attack: bite
+ 1| Attack: hind kick
[Prose]
+ 2| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
+ 1| Easy read
SVETLANA -- post 1
[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: took the bite
- 1| Defense: no mention of her front kicks?
+ 1| Defense: took the hind kick
- 1| Injury: did not describe injury of hind kicks
+ 1| Attack: dive
[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
+ 1| Easy read
KRI -- post 2
[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: evade the dive
+ 1| Attack: hooves
- 1| Attack: bite – how can she push off Svetlana but also reach out to bite at the same time? Opposing directions.
[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
0| Easy read – some confusing areas
SVETLANA -- post 2
[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: evade with barrel roll
- 1| Attack: collision – how can you collide if you rolled away? If you rolled towards, just the nature of it, as you said, drops you in height so you two should have missed each other.
[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
0| Easy read – some confusing areas
KRI -- post 3
[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: rump bruise
+ 1| Attack: magic air pressure
+ 1| Attack: ice crystals
+ 1| Attack: body slam
+ 1| Attack: tail slap
[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
+ 1| Easy read
SVETLANA -- post 3
[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: air pressure magic slowing
- 1| Defense: no mention of the ice crystals
- 1| Defense: evade by dropping – just dropping wouldn’t evade as Kri is also dropping and she is so close to you, you’d have to also be moving away from her.
- 1| Injury: slam – you don’t state if you avoided or took her slam
- 1| Defense: no mention of her tail slap
0| Attack: biting forelegs – you and she were both falling, and as far as you know, she still is. So you flew up to bite the front legs of someone who is falling down on you and could easily kick or bite.
[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
+ 1| Easy read
KRI -- post 4
[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: avoid teeth with attack
- 1| Injury: bite – you don’t state if you avoided or took her bite
+ 1| Attack: rear kick
+ 1| Attack: front kick
+ 1| Attack: bite
[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
0| Easy read – a few confusing parts with the attacks
SVETLANA -- post 4
[Realism]
- 1| Defense: no mention of her hind hooves
- 1| Defense: no mention of her front hooves
- 1| Defense: avoid wing bite – you don’t say how they avoid the bite.
- 1| Defense: flip over – if you are falling down, with a pegasus on top of you, and try to open your wings upsidedown, the pressure would likely not allow them to open or function very well. Not to mention just flipping over doesn’t mean Kri is any less on top of you.
+ 1| Attack: ram
- 1| Powerplay: “and my wing comes slipping down under hers so it would hit her flank…” only she can decide where you wing goes or hits on her bodt, you can only aim/hope/target/try etc.
+ 1| Attack: wing bite
[Prose]
+ 1| Emotion
+ 1| Flow
- 1| Easy read – confusing because Kri was only going to drag you down if she bit your wing, which you said she did not
KRI -- post 5 (defense only)
[Realism]
+ 1| Defense: avoided slam
+ 1| Defense: Slapped in head
+ 1| Defense: bite to ass
KRI
[Bonus]
+ 2| Surroundings
+ 2| Breed
[Injuries]
None.
[Creativity]
+ 1| Reflecting on Adalwulf fight
Comments: You are an experienced fighter and its shown in the grasp you have for the fighting mechanics. Your only deductions within realism were for minor wording or confusion with wording regarding evasion or injury. I think in some cases you were pressed for word limit or assumed the movement you explained to be enough, but it always needs to be clear of an injury was avoided or taken for each attack. Otherwise I have little input as for how to improve, you did great utilizing your surroundings (lightning flash to spot Svetlana, clouds to hide you, rain in your face) and breed (her large wings helped you find her) as well as putting emotion into every post, although I definitely felt it more in the first. Excellent job!
SVETLANA
[Bonus]
+ 2| Surroundings
+ 1| Breed
[Injuries]
None.
[Creativity]
None.
Comments: You had some good ideas for attacks and defense in this fight, but aerial fights are incredibly difficult to imagine and explain realistically, so this is a hard placing you put yourself into. The biggest issue you seemed to have was not so much with an attack or defense being plausible (although in some cases that came up), but that you didn’t seem to fully read your opponent’s thread and would respond with something that wasn’t intended or different, or would just seem to miss responding to an attack altogether. I know this fight started and ended rather quickly, so I would urge you to read thoroughly and take more time next fight to ensure you are not missing anything. Many of your point deductions could have been avoided with more attention to detail and clarity – like Kri, you need to make it apparent if an attack was taken or avoided for each attack. However you did very good with using your surroundings! I would like to see a bit more emotion, there was some but I still didn’t feel much of Svetlana’s presence in this fight, you used a lot of your words on describing the setting every post instead.
TOTAL
KRI - 81
SVETLANA - 57
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Nothing to Lose [Kri Challenge]
