KRI the resolute one cannot stop the wind from blowing, nor refuse the falling rain.
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[ OOC Commentary:
There were some improvements in this post, but there was also some ground lost as well.
The first big mistake that will cost you points is that you never mentioned if any of Kri's attacks landed or not. I was left to assume that they did not, but since you made no mention of it anyway or the other, I was not certain. The judge will not know either, and you will lose points. Even if the attack misses, you have to dictate that. Everything must be accounted for. I sort of have a formula that I run through in my head. List out their attacks, decide how you want to take them or if you want to at all, what damage would be done and pain would be felt or how do you justify missing the attack. If you go through those for every attack your opponent launches, you will get it all in there and you won't lose points!
Next, your rearing to avoid a charge. Kri easily could have reguided her charge toward Aisha's leg, and horses are extremely unbalanced when rearing! Aisha would have toppled like a Jenga tower, and that would be good for no one. So, while your mechanics were fine, it was not a smart choice and a risk you didn't need to take. Pivoting or even just lurching to the side would have been enough to dodge it, and that would have kept her from being a target for getting knocked over.
Lastly, your flow in this post was not good. Your first paragraph is totally irrelevant from your second or at least it reads that way. You need smoother transitions. Do not forget that prose is part of your rubric as well. I forgot to mention in your last critique, but your emotion is also a tad bit lacking. Aisha should be present in every single post, not just in mechanics but in mind. How does she feel during this battle? During her moment when she is unbalanced during the rear would be a -great- moment to mention panic, even if it's momentary. I know I certainly would be a little scared if I was about to fall over in the middle of a spar. x3
OKAY, now for the good stuff.
Your first defense was actually quite brilliant. Throwing her hind end toward Kri's neck maybe didn't match up as well as I'd like since she was biting for a shoulder, but it was still ingenuous thinking, and the kind of defense I like. I give you a big gold star for it.
Next, you really improved on your time frame of attacks. There were no massive expanding attacks, nor did I feel that anything you did was out of the realm of plausibility. You came a long way from your first post, and you should be /proud/ of that. You really listened to that bit of advice, and I think you are going to become a much better fighter for it. ^^
That's all, folks. Thank you for the fabulous fight. Time to call the judge over to have a look. ]