| Deceased |
| Mare :: Equine :: 15hh :: Died at 6yo Buff: NOVICE |
| Vallie |
You need no governing.
You are already ruled.
By love of course, but is it true?
Your ruler is off.
Ruler needs time.
She fancies the powerful.
Does she fancy you?
Haha, no.
I think she hates you.
A wrangler does so, but to you he wants.
Rope you down and cage you up.
Caged? No, I broke the lock..
Hell yes you are now free.
I understand you know, but was it unnecessary to just run away..
"Boy, just get your ass over here." Muttered aloud.
All I need is a word with you, dark mangled boy.
Ladies, here the runner is.
"Dude! He don't look like one to me!" The stupid rolled and chanted.
You are wrong, you'll see.
I will just place this cat behind him.
We will watch him run like Nathaniel.
Be warned he has rarely lost...
(My first stealth guys... I hope you don't get it! XD... In a good way though!) (Also...I was kinda specific and I am pretty sure the person will get it... IT IS MY FIRST SO YOLOOOOO!)
| Hidden Account |
| Stallion :: Unicorn :: 17.1 :: 12 |
| teeroo |
A stallion such as me is too wanted to be tied down, and so easily in fact. Try harder next time sweetheart. ~Loki
You need no governing.
You are already ruled.
-Odin is his father, who in Norse mythology is the King of Asgard, quote on one of his tables is "You were meant to be ruled"-
By love of course, but is it true?
Your ruler is off.
Ruler needs time.
-Fluff-
She fancies the powerful.
Does she fancy you?
Haha, no.
I think she hates you.
-Describes the relationship between him and the mare Angora
A wrangler does so, but to you he wants.
Rope you down and cage you up.
Caged? No, I broke the lock..
Hell yes you are now free.
-fluff-
I understand you know, but was it unnecessary to just run away..
"Boy, just get your ass over here." Muttered aloud.
All I need is a word with you, dark mangled boy.
-Run away from Angora after he got her prego, his coat is black in color-
Ladies, here the runner is.
"Dude! He don't look like one to me!" The stupid rolled and chanted.
You are wrong, you'll see.
I will just place this cat behind him.
We will watch him run like Nathaniel.
Be warned he has rarely lost...
-fluff-
OCC: I'll be honest, I can't tell all the clues xD If it's not Loki then I guess ignore this :3
I am no longer going into the cbox due to recent events. You can PM on this (Valentine's) account, go on my skype (teeroo777), or PM me on DA (teeroo). Thank you.
Credits to picture on page, since they won't show up since they are in black: http://twiwolf.deviantart.com/art/Free-Love-362011598
| Deceased |
| Mare :: Equine :: 15hh :: Died at 6yo Buff: NOVICE |
| Vallie |
"Oh sweety, why would I want see the stallion who got me pregnant?" Loki is safe.
| Deceased |
| Mare :: Pegasus :: 15.3 :: 6 Buff: NOVICE |
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Stella :: Secretary Bird :: None
Aud |
01-20-2013, 06:14 PM
(This post was last modified: 01-20-2013, 06:15 PM by Phaedra.)
Ignore this.
 HP: 45.5
| Deceased |
| Mare :: Equine :: 15hh :: Died at 6yo Buff: NOVICE |
| Vallie |
01-20-2013, 06:34 PM
(This post was last modified: 01-20-2013, 06:36 PM by Angora.)
Archibald was sought.
You need no governing.
You are already ruled.
Mandrake brainwashed him and controls him.
By love of course, but is it true?
Fluff
Your ruler is off.
Ruler needs time.
Mandrake is offline. I was also pointing towards him relationship with her.
She fancies the powerful.
Does she fancy you?
Haha, no.
I think she hates you.
Fluff
Awrangler does so, but to you he wants.
Rope you down and cage you up.
Caged? No, I broke the lock..
Hell yes you are now free.
I understand you know, but was it unnecessary to just run away..
Fluff.
"Boy, just get your ass over here." Muttered aloud.
All I need is a word with you, dark mangled boy.
He is black which is a dark color. He is a stallion which is a boy.
Ladies, here the runner is.
"Dude! He don't look like one to me!" The stupid rolled and chanted.
Archibald is a draft horse and drafts aren't built to be runners.
The first letter of each line combined spells Archibald.
You are wrong, you'll see.
I will just place this cat behind him.
I was again referring to Mandrake controlling him, but through her big cat form.
We will watch him run like Nathaniel.
When you search Archibald on google a guy named Nathaniel "Tiny" Archibald comes up.
Be warned he has rarely lost...
I, along with most, consider him a warlord, but he lost his Jackal fight.
Kri the Resolute Posts: 243
| Hidden Account |
| Mare :: Pegasus :: 14.3hh :: 10 Buff: NUMB |
| Boom Boom! |
Please note that Archibald is not prisoner until 2/3 judges have passed your stealth.
I will be looking at it shortly. ^^
| Deceased |
| Mare :: Equine :: 15hh :: Died at 6yo Buff: NOVICE |
| Vallie |
Kri the Resolute Posts: 243
| Hidden Account |
| Mare :: Pegasus :: 14.3hh :: 10 Buff: NUMB |
| Boom Boom! |
01-20-2013, 06:43 PM
(This post was last modified: 01-20-2013, 06:48 PM by Kri.)
Fail.
+ 1 for his name down the side.
Mandrake brainwashed him and controls him.
- This was a good clue. Also the "you need no governing" pointed me to outcast.
+ 1
Mandrake is offline. I was also pointing towards him relationship with her.
Back up for adoption. When I started considering Archibald as a possible target, this made sense. Archibald's player is also Time, so. xP
+ 1
She fancies the powerful.
Does she fancy you?
Haha, no.
I think she hates you.
This is not fluff.
This is misleading because Mandrake does not hate her sons.
- 1
A wrangler does so, but to you he wants.
Rope you down and cage you up.
Caged? No, I broke the lock..
Hell yes you are now free.
I understand you know, but was it unnecessary to just run away.
This is also not just fluff.
This is too much information to be counted as fluff, and is also misleading.
- 1
He is black which is a dark color. He is a stallion which is a boy.
+ 1 for descriptive reference. "mangled" made me think of his recent battle as well.
I was again referring to Mandrake controlling him, but through her big cat form.
This is a reference to Mandrake and NOT Archibald.
- 1
When you search Archibald on google a guy named Nathaniel "Tiny" Archibald comes up.
This one I'm a little iffy because I would have googled Nathaniel instead of Archibald.
I, along with most, consider him a warlord, but he lost his Jackal fight.
+ 1 for history ref.
You need 3 good clues, and for this evens out to only 2.
edit;
I forgot to say that this was a great first attempt!
Next time just avoid the fluff. c:
| Deceased |
| Mare :: Equine :: 15hh :: Died at 6yo Buff: NOVICE |
| Vallie |
Uhm. I don't think u am allowed to do this, but I left out the answers to one of my clues... Can I fix it?
| Deceased |
| Mare :: Pegasus :: 15.3 :: 6 Buff: NOVICE |
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Stella :: Secretary Bird :: None
Aud |
Fail
You need no governing.
You are already ruled.
- Mandrake brainwashed him and controls him.
+1 It states in Archi's profile that Mandrake has brainwashed him.
By love of course, but is it true?
- Fluff
-1 As Boom stated, fluff can't be directly misleading. This is.
Your ruler is off.
Ruler needs time.
Mandrake is offline. I was also pointing towards him relationship with her.
-1/+.5 - How could we have known Mandrake wasn't online when you made this stealth? That isn't a valid clue. But referring to Time, is a good clue, however, I know I use the name of the Rper in my stealths, but the rules clearly say you need three clues to the character, so .5
She fancies the powerful.
Does she fancy you?
Haha, no.
I think she hates you.
-1 Again, your fluff can't be misleading. Mandrake doesn't hate Archi.
Awrangler does so, but to you he wants.
Rope you down and cage you up.
Caged? No, I broke the lock..
Hell yes you are now free.
I understand you know, but was it unnecessary to just run away..
Fluff.
"Boy, just get your ass over here." Muttered aloud.
All I need is a word with you, dark mangled boy.
He is black which is a dark color. He is a stallion which is a boy.
Ladies, here the runner is.
"Dude! He don't look like one to me!" The stupid rolled and chanted.
Archibald is a draft horse and drafts aren't built to be runners.
The first letter of each line combined spells Archibald.
+1/-1 - Same with Boom's critique. +1 for spelling his name, but -1 because most of that is misleading.
You are wrong, you'll see.
I will just place this cat behind him.
I was again referring to Mandrake controlling him, but through her big cat form.
+1 Reference to Mandrake's 'cat' form, as being 'behind' him, in terms of manipulating.
We will watch him run like Nathaniel.
When you search Archibald on google a guy named Nathaniel "Tiny" Archibald comes up.
Again with Boom - I googled Nathaniel, which brings up a race horse. I thought that was where you were going. So no points added or taken.
Be warned he has rarely lost...
I, along with most, consider him a warlord, but he lost his Jackal fight.
+1
= .5/3
HP: 45.5
| Deceased |
| Mare :: Equine :: 15.2 hh :: 6 (ages in Orangemoon) |
| RayoDeSoleil |
"You need no governing.
You are already ruled."
Mandrake brainwashed him and controls him.
Pass.
"Your ruler is off.
Ruler needs time."
Mandrake is offline. I was also pointing towards him relationship with her.
Fail. Whether or not the account is on- or offline doesn't really have anything to do with anything. Also, at any given time when someone is reading, Mandrake may come online; and no one would know if she was on or offline at the time the stealth was written. Also, I don't think this is a clear reference to their relationship.
"A wrangler does so, but to you he wants.
Rope you down and cage you up.
Caged? No, I broke the lock..
Hell yes you are now free.
I understand you know, but was it unnecessary to just run away...
"Boy, just get your ass over here." Muttered aloud.
All I need is a word with you, dark mangled boy.
Ladies, here the runner is.
"Dude! He don't look like one to me!" The stupid rolled and chanted."
The first letter of each line combined spells Archibald.
Pass.
""Boy, just get your ass over here." Muttered aloud.
All I need is a word with you, dark mangled boy."
He is black which is a dark color. He is a stallion which is a boy.
Fail. Ultimately, these clues in conjunction with another might have been good, but they are far too broad. There are many dark-colored stallions in Helovia. Archi, Deimos, d'Art, to name just a few. Perhaps a reference to the Foothills might have made this better.
"Ladies, here the runner is.
"Dude! He don't look like one to me!" The stupid rolled and chanted.""
Archibald is a draft horse and drafts aren't built to be runners.
Fail. While it's true that drafts aren't built to be runners, all horses DO run - if this had been a personality reference, as Archi is more likely to confront than run, it would have worked much better. However as a breed reference, it's just not clear enough for me.
"You are wrong, you'll see.
I will just place this cat behind him."
I was again referring to Mandrake controlling him, but through her big cat form.
Pass.
"We will watch him run like Nathaniel."
When you search Archibald on Google a guy named Nathaniel "Tiny" Archibald comes up.
Fail. As Boom said, I would have Googled Nathaniel, which would have been in no way connected to Archibald.
"Be warned he has rarely lost..."
I, along with most, consider him a warlord, but he lost his Jackal fight.
Pass.
Overall, I think this was a very good first attempt, but I have to FAIL this. The clues that passed were good, but there were a few that I felt were too generalized and didn't really point to anyone in particular. Next time, try to avoid all the fluff, and be sure that your clues can't apply to everyone. :3 Good try!
Pass
I think while some of the fluff was a little misleading that overall it was a good stealth and there were more then 3 solid clues, especially the creativity of having his name down the side. I don't get how you say she only had 2 good clues Boom when you gave her +5?
You are wrong, you'll see.
I will just place this cat behind him.
I was again referring to Mandrake controlling him, but through her big cat form.
-This IS a reference to Archibald because Mandrake is the cat and she is behind HIM.
Tamme the Tempting Posts: 140
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| Mare :: Other :: 2 :: 2 HP: 9001 | Buff: Admin |
| Tamme |
01-20-2013, 07:03 PM
(This post was last modified: 01-20-2013, 07:04 PM by Tamme.)
Even though I see a few clues in here, like Mandrake's cat form behind him and Mandrake's brainwashing (which are essentially the same clue), there was too much fluff.
You need three SEPARATE clues.
Even if you had three clues, some of the fluff was misleading, making this a fail, for me.
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