image by jason-samfield @ flickr.com</style> The blur of noise, the mare can hear the call of another in the darkness. Recognition is not found in her mind, though, the spooked girl continuing through her motions of violence in order to escape the clutches of another. The painted frame of the mare twists to buck out at her, legs reaching their extension quickly, colliding with hooves that slice at her own legs, tearing some skin on her cannons and leaving horrible stinging, like a paper cut, that causes a weak grunt to peel from Onni's lips as her legs are pull back down to the earth, pushing her forward into the air. onni♥ </style> |
[ OOC COMMENTARY:
OKAY. So we talked a lot in the cbox about being especially careful when reading. I know I can get pretty wordy during my fights, so I'm sorry for causing so much confusion. :<
That being said, I think you really interpreted this post well. It was clear that after our clarification, you had a solid idea about what was going on in the battle. I don't think you had any deviations in plausibility or time constraints, and you understood well what I was trying to do.
I also have to give you a hand - Tares in this post is simply awesome. You really found a balance between her emotions during the fight as well as staying focused, which I think is important. I can see definite improvement in your focus from the last post to this one. Really, I felt connected with Tares.
The only thing I was confused about in this post was Arbutus. I wasn't really entirely sure where he was in the air to be able to possibly hit both Tares and Onni at that moment. After all, Onni is running away and Tares was standing still, so it didn't really add up to me. In the end, it wasn't a big deal because he was probably moving too. ^^
Your defense to the kick was not really what I would have done. You do not want to injure your character's legs. I would have pivoted, especially since Tares would likely be able to do that movement quickly, and allowed the kick to hit maybe her shoulder or even barrel. These are meatier areas which take damage better. Besides, a horse with a broken leg is not good! Don't tempt fate. Aside from the kick hitting her legs, a rear leaves your character very unbalanced. If Onni's kick had hit lower, like her stomach or chest, she could very easily have seriously injured or knocked over Tares. Just keep it in mind next time.
I think that's all I have. Good fight! & You're welcome, Alex. I don't mind sparring any time. ^^ ]